Jonah (1 like)

A mostly visual story is hard to do, so nice work! I would have liked to see the whole short without any narration. One thing I found confusing is that the way it was structured, it looked like the dog had no home and was alone. 2 ways I would think of going about this is either showing the dogs family at some point before the end or maybe the dog has no family. Love the structure

Florian

Jonah thank you for the feedback. But that is exactly what we tried to visualize (which seem to have worked even though it confused you), that Luanna has no family (as she is a street dog rejected by humans and there pets).

Dani (1 like)

"Underwoof goes to the sea" is a fantastic story I like! The end I love also, apart from the drawings, because is what would happen if a dog live adventures across the ocean.

Klaas (1 like)

Nice.
I followed your progress and it came nicely together. The intro was nicely done.
One suggestion I would make is the friendship between the whale and the dog could use some depth, but overall the atmosphere and your intent is very clear. Also the drawings communicate nicely.
Great.

Diego (1 like)

I love your story-reel because it brings many positive feelings out from our hearts.

My main comment is that you have a very nice way of telling stories and that I feel you will find this kind of nice way to tell any story, so please continue to do so no matter what happens :)

I really love how you managed to have clean drawings and simple compositions because it is just enough to understand and feel everything, no need to make things more complicated. I found everything clear because of that.

My suggestion to make things stronger is: This story is finished, continue telling and making stories. With more stories you will start to find similar topics and themes, as well as very different ones. At one point you will be able to look at your work and find that all of those stories have something in common and also that they are meaningful for you. At that point you will have explored many inner feelings and topics and it will build to your storytelling skills naturally :D

-Team Raining Frogs
https://www.storyxperiential.com/media/97fa95bf-6eea-44b3-ae75-bb6ebed70d6e

Emma (1 like)

I think your idea is a very adventurous one that is very intriguing. The audio and the boards mix very well with one another.

James (1 like)

Cute idea it was great to watch it come to life.

Bethany (1 like)

I have followed this story and loved seeing the end result! Great work!

Joshua (1 like)

Simple drawings and clear/great story. I can related to the story. US an México, the two countries I call 'HOME.' Vey beautiful. I was hoping to see the 'new Luanna' meet with the other dogs from the beginning of your story but not really necessary. Great job.

Shayleen (1 like)

Hey there! I’ve been intrigued by your story from the beginning - it’s simple, charming, and fun. I loved this final story reel. It’s a challenge to not narrate, but you did a great job! I do wish there was more conflict built up, but I loved the *SLAP* scene with the whale. I laughed out loud. Great job!!

Álvaro (1 like)

Hello Flova!! First of All I loved how simple yet understandable everything about this story film is. Very adorable and I liked how that Sea God helped Luanna and every other stray dog in Peru and sends them to the happy island!! I also imagined Luanna being adopted by some Mermaids, and ended up being a royal underwater dog. hahaha You made me imagine some cute scenario. thanks!! Very Cute story ;D