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This story has wonderfully small stakes that are heartfelt and relatable. From a structure standpoint though, it could use better impetus for his actions. Not so much as far as "why" but "why right now"? Why is it that he decides to make the sidewalk bake shop at this point? Perhaps there could be some kind of event that occurs within his life that inspires him to go for it. Like a little neighbor girl who has a stand of their own across the street. Pa Pa Po could see this and think "Huh, I could do that too!". And I have the same note for Pa Pa Po reaching out to Pepper. Why now? If we were to continue on the thread I mentioned earlier, perhaps the little girl does something that reminds Pa Pa Po of Pepper and he thinks to call her. Finally, I feel like there should be better motivation for Pepper joining Pa Pa Po at the end. From what I can ascertain, it seems like Pepper doesn't like her job based on her facial expressions. However, as a grown woman, why would she agree to drop everything and help her grandfather who has not reached out to her in several years and lives on the other side of the planet? Perhaps you could demonstrate in some way that Pepper has fostered a love of baking this whole time and is itching to get back to it. These are all things that I see as opportunities to enrich this already charming story even further. I also wanted to say that the art for this is gorgeous and very clear. Great job!
This is so amazing and heartfelt! I really felt Po's pain of missing Pepper. There were a few frames that had a couple extra seconds of silence where there could have been more dialogue added or sound effects, but everything else super, super job! You have a very distinct illustration style that really shown through in the story reel. The film was definitely engaging with audience and viewers.
David (1 like)
Nice work, good animations and art, terrific.
Thank you so much David!😁
Kervin (1 like)
Thank you so much Kervin !😁
I really like the production style and how organized it is, good job.
Thank you so much Steven!😁
Haley (1 like)
Voice could be clearer. Its getting happy in the middle I love that part. Back sad again when he started his business. I wish all of one part was sad and then it stayed happy. I never thought pepper was going to answer the phone. So happy the bakery is open again!!!
Thank you so much for your feedback Haley! It’s widely appreciated 😁
Sophia Rose Imelda (1 like)
This is probably one of my favorite films yet! I'm so amazed at the production quality, art, and your storytelling capabilities especially. The concept was great to begin with, and this film just sells it. Congrats on completing this amazing film!
You just made my day thank you so so much! (,:
Seneca (1 like)
Your artwork is so beautiful and the story plot is really interesting and easy to follow
Thank you so very much Seneca!😁
Chris (1 like)
First off, the art in this story is incredible! The character designs were amazing, and I really felt the emotion and the loneliness that you were attempting to convey. While overall I loved the story, my one concern is that Pepper seemed to very quickly go from completely ignoring Po, to dropping everything she had and starting up a business with him. I found this a little confusing, and it seemed a little bit as if Pepper only came back because of his cakes, not because she missed him or realized he missed her, muddying the intended moral. But overall, this is a very small issue and your work overall was amazing!
Thank you so much Chris! This feedback is valued so much and I’m so glad you brought up this point…. My intention behind this quick turn around between the characters was to be that pepper had been ignoring her grandfather for so long when she first moved away, being busy with young adult things such as hanging out and partying with friends, but now that years have went by and she is no longer as young she was when she first moved away, she works a full-time office job and finds this life to become lonely and miserable. At this point Pepper is too scared to reach out to her grandfather because she feels guilty for ignoring him the past years since she left, she fears that he will not forgive her, and Po feared the rejection of his granddaughter once again. Again thank you so very much for your feedback, it is beyond helpful!😁
Mónica (1 like)
Your artwork is amazing and i really like your story :)
Thank you so much Mónica! You are so kind😁
Chloe (1 like)
Po has such a delightful character design! the relationship between Po and his granddaughter was developed so nicely. You can really feel for Po.
Thank you so much Chloe😁
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Baked Back Together
What can be so small to some, can mean the world to others. Po, the so called "typical"
grandfather is faced with the fear of loss, but not just anyone, his granddaughter Pepper. Not
only has Pepper been Po's granddaughter, but she has also been his best friend.
Pepper lost her parents at a very young age, leaving Po to be her only resort. The two found
peace with just simply being together. Since they began their lives together, baking was their
safe space, something they bonded over every day. As Pepper grew up distance grew between
the two, she was no longer interested in backing with her Pa Pa, all she wanted to do was hang
out with friends. Eventually Pepper moved far away and lost all contact with Po and moved on
with her life. Though Pepper had moved on, Po hadn't. Po still sat alone every day waiting for
the day Pepper would call him telling him she was coming home. But one day while Po was
looking at an old photograph of the two, he got an idea that could possibly change their
dynamic once again, maybe she would even come back. Po would create his very own baking
business just like him and pepper dreamed about when she was small. Po got hard at work and
the next day set up his brand-new cake shop on the side of his grass. To his surprise not one
customer stopped, not even a slight glance. After all his hard work he knew who he would have
to call for help, Pepper. Pepper was thrilled to finally hear from her Pa Pa Po and flew back
home to help with the business. Eventually the dream that sparked so long ago was burning
bright, the business grew and became a massive success.
I would like to thank my Mom, Dad, and brother Noah for supporting me so much throughout my creative journey. Also thank you Noah for helping me out with voice acting!