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Loved the story and the sound effects you put in.
This is awesome! The visuals were really neat - I liked how the bullies were black silhouettes. You did a great job of making the main character relatable to an audience. This was a good story for young children who need to find a balance between independence, self-confidence, and compassion. The jump from a school/home setting and Jake trapped under a boulder was confusing to me, and the dialogue was unrealistic, in my opinion. Jake had a boulder stuck on top of him, but didn't seem to really be harmed, and was calm and collected when he was rescued. Overall, the story and moral were very strong.
nice moral to resinate with kids today
i like the art
I really like the moral of the story and I also like the way you expressed the characters feelings
I feel like this would make a good coming-of-age story
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Jake needs help
Jake is a stuck up boy who needs to be batter and stronger than everyone buy why will shock you
I would like to thank my mom.
Some people who I wouldn’t like to thank is Max carigan and elle Cochran I spent my entire week working on this whole max played Fortnite. Elle quit are team 4 weeks ago. So I might seem bitter but I did this “group” assignment by myself.
Angela, Elle, Hudson, Max