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i love your drawing!!
The pace of the narration was a little slow and makes it a little hard to understand. Apart from that the story is great.
The art style and story are very cool, I think narration would improve the pace, if you were to keep the words then increasing the time would make it easier to read.
I really like the story behind it. I think that if you were going to have words in there to try and make them short not paragraphs, you could maybe have dialogue for when they are talking to each other. I really like your pictures and background music.
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Shock and Mars
Shock meets an unexpected friend and Mars gets to live out her dream.
This is where the special thanks would go! I’m assuming they will be a little longer this week, therefore, I designed extra space for them. If there is far more description and special thanks then there is space, this entire box becomes scrollable.
Sara and Farah