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Jonathon Q. Sniffer

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Alan

I admire how your morale ties in so well with the story and Jonathan's struggle to overcome challenges.

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Krista

I've never been so inspired because of a carrot. Great work!

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William

I liked the art
I was confused by how the carrots had sentience

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Gabriella

the carrots are cool the way the story goes it is nice to hear about the progression of the character

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David

The carrots are room temperature.

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Gabriella

u playin to much 😂😂😂

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Jak

I loke how it is carrots so its not too complex. What if the famer just picks Jon and eats him?

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David

Jon would cease to exist.

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Ella

Great job! Your story spine is great! I wonder what Jonathon does to make up with his friends.

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Andrew

he doesn't do anything to recover his relationships

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Tyler

I got so connected to Jonathan, great storyline and the character arc is just an art that the old masters would have reveled in

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Andrew

thank you sir Tyler I appreciate you greatly I hope we can enjoy our lives and strive to success together while being happy at the same time.

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Andrew

nah

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Cam

I like how your morale really connects with the story and how Jonathan has to overcome obstacles in his life.

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Andrew

the morale is to never trust anyone and to never get emotionally attached to anything.

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Odin

i loved the story and how he matured so much, from the begging he was happy and then he was sad and frustrated. i find it a little confusing why he had a black leg in the middle of the story and not the begging. i think you could improve on how and why he had abandinment issues

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Andrew

horse.

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Samantha

I like the story, does he see his family again?

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Andrew

no. they are gone forever.

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Lila

This is a great story and I love the pictures you drew, it really help create the story!! Does he ever get reunited with his family?

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Andrew

never.

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Solomon

I really like the lesson that Jon learns, with that even with all the suffering he’s been going through, he still needs to treat others with respect. I was wondering though, what parts do Jon’s friends play before they started to get mad at him?

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Andrew

thank you Solomon. I appreciate your comment greatly and I hope we can be friends in future lives.

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Mia

Your storyline is AMAZING! I was wondering, do they ever get reunited?

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Andrew

no. never.

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Ashton

Very good story. Will they ever be back together?

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Andrew

his family dipped on him so no

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Jesse (1 like)

Very creative storyline. I like it.

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Andrew

Jesse, jesse, Jesse, I appreciate you comment. but... any advice on improving the story?

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Ian (1 like)

Good job with the story spine. I like the drawings and I’m wondering if they get reunited.

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Andrew

nope

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Sanne

Great use of the story spine! I am very curious as to what happened to Johnathan's family and if they get reunited.

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Andrew

his family never loved him and will never find him again.

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David

Thank you. His family captured. They will never be reunited.

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Jonathon Sniffer is a carrot who, due to emotional trauma at an early age, loses compassion and empathy for others. He has to learn to experience and give kindness in order to change his mentality and make the world a better place. Script: Once upon a time there was a carrot named Jonathon Sniffer who lived in the ground with his family. They were happy in their field and lived a perfect life but Jon was emotionally feeble and had abandonment issues. Every Day they would pop out of the ground and have fun playing in the sun with each other. Jonathan was truly happy and was nurtured by his loving family. Until one day when his family was taken from the ground and Jonathon thought he would never see them again. Because of that Jon trains in order to never be hurt by anyone again. He believes that because he is strong physically, he won't be hurt again emotionally. Because of that Jon focuses solely on himself and loses compassion for others. He becomes sad and loses all traces of empathy. Because of that Jon starts to treat his friends poorly and they begin to dislike him for his self-centered behavior. Jon realizes that treating people with compassion and empathy is more beneficial than ignoring them. Until Finally Jon uses his newfound abilities of compassion and empathy to teach others to treat each other with kindness which in turn, makes the friendly people like Jonathon more. And ever since then he has lived his life treating people with kindness, and showing them empathy as well as compassion to help the world become a better, more kind place. The moral of the story is to treat others with compassion and kindness while focusing less on yourself.

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