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Layne (1 like)

Hey I absolutely love the idea of the last one and can be such an amazing way to portray the power of mother nature and the ironic things humans ask for to try and change it. Countless times people have complained about the weather or something in nature that couldn't possibly be changed. There could be hidden themes of preservation and climate change as well and the depth of this concept is limitless. I think it could be very funny but also beautiful and enlightening as well. Amazing idea!

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Marijke

Hi Layne, thank you for your feedback. You read that one exactly as I meant it! For many people it raised questions so that was a good learning point. But then it makes it all the more special when someone thinks along the same lines. Yes, thinking that everything can be changed because people want that to be so. Thanks :)

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Melissa (1 like)

Question #2 is hilarious! I love the idea of a scaredy-cat sword refusing to leave it's cave because it doesn't want to fight! I wonder how the knight will get gain the sword's trust and fight alongside him. Is the guy shown above a knight? What kind of magical abilities does the sword possess?

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Marijke

Hi Melissa, thank you for your feedback. I love the questions. The character will have to be thought out as will the magical abilities!

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Lina (1 like)

Hey team,
First of all: Amazing illustrations! I loved each one of them.

My favorite idea was the second story.

I was curious on how you guys gave life to an object that was designed for something but that fear could give the sword another purpose; so it givers mileage to the idea.

Not from this second idea, but referring to the third one I would suggest being more detailed about the question. I was unclear if the person was demanding something over the waterfall or it was owning it.

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Marijke

Thank you for the feedback, Lina! It's a good description: an object designed for something but fear could give it another purpose.
The third idea was indeed not clear enough in its presentation and it raised several questions. Very insightful!

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Maria Teresa (1 like)

.I like the first one, it looks very funny for all the trouble and the characters.
. I wonder if the things are going worst and worst........
. It's the goat evil to convince them to leret free?

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Marijke

Thank you, Maria! I think it's a funny thought too. The goat rampaging through the village / bridges / forrest. Thanks for your comments!

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Matthew (1 like)

Your style is lovely! I really love them all but my favorite is the first one. It could be an awesome story with a fun goat protagonist. I picture the whole tribe after him which is a really fun sight. It makes me wonder more about if ancient sacrifices actually prevented volcanoes from going off! Nothing was too unclear. I just want to know how the goat escapes and how the volcano is alive. Nice work.

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Marijke

Hi Matthew, thanks! Haha, you wonder if ancient sacrifices actually prevented the volcanoes from going off: exactly my idea!! We hadn't thought of the rest of the story yet. Your questions greatly benefit. Thanks.

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Sef (2 likes)

My favorite one of the three was the second one. I feel like you have a solid conflict for a story like that and it could lend to a bit of humor in the story as well. It makes me wonder more about what kind of power the sword has and why it must specifically be used by its wielder as opposed to any other sword. I was a little unclear about what is causing the sword to become afraid to fight, what does it have to lose? What kind of history has it had?

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Marijke

Hi Sef, thank you for all of your thoughts! Your questions were insightful: why is it afraid and what happened to it? Thanks.

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Taylor (1 like)

All of these ideas sound awesome! The one that stands out to me the most is the Sword. It has great potential! Would the sword get over its fear or would it and the knight (or whoever wields it) come to a solution?

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Marijke

Thank you Taylor! We think the sword has great potential too. It's awesome to learn what speaks to the community here. So thank your for your comments. And for teaching me someone Wields a sword. Not Yields it. And does he gets over his fear? Will there be a solution? We don't know yet! Great question.

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Javier (1 like)

The sacrificial goat looks so funny, that's my favorite. I really want to know how does the goat escapes and what does it do next. Like is the whole short the goat running, or are they in an island so the goat has to swim... Also the visuals are pretty cool. Se face of the goat says it all.
Also the Magical sword looks funny, and a very interesting story on the relationship of a warrior and his weapon. It really made me interested on wanting to know more.

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Marijke

Hi Javier, thank you for your thoughts! Yes, how would that goat escape in the first place.. Animal wit, I guess. And how does the story go: where does the goat go??
Thank you for commenting on the sword too. It has made more people curious. That feedback has been precious.

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Keo (2 likes)

Beautiful illustrations!!! I love all of these ideas, I think the potential for comedy and adventure in each of these concepts is amazing! As a fantasy fan, I love the idea of the reluctant weapon. Can the sword talk, or does it just get extremely heavy each time the wielder tries to use it? Would the wielder and the sword be able to come to an agreement so the sword becomes less reluctant? I'm just very curious to see how the story would end!

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Marijke

Hi Keo, thank you so much for your thoughts and compliments. The reluctant weapon! good choice of words there. I love how you think about this story. It really helps our narrative.

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John (1 like)

I can see all these ideas shining, but for some reason the idea of a weapon that is compelled not to fulfill its purpose sounded cute. I wonder about the warrior and the two's relationship. Will they ever be able to fight? What's unclear is why the warrior would stick with such an impotent weapon, does it have amazing untapped power?

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Marijke

Hi John, Thank you for those great questions! 'a weapon that is compelled not to fulfill its purpose' : great summary. And the question why the warrior would stick with such an impotent weapon is good one! There would need to be a reason to keep the sword, even if it doesn't want to fight. That will be part of the sword-yielder relationship. Thanks!

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Seth (1 like)

The idea of the cowardly magical sword is great. Was it always afraid? Is it powerful enough to win if it just overcame it's fear? The only thing unclear is if it's a sword new to battle or if this has been a long-running problem.

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Marijke

Hi Seth, I love your thoughts. I especially like the one if the sword is new to battle or if this has been a long-running problem. Thank you!

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Emma (2 likes)

Hi there, cool ideas. all of them. they are so well thought of as the contrast because what is supposed to happen and what if the opposite happens. The goat is cool, funny, great visuals, and can really come to life as a story.

The waterfall one is great hard to navigate as a story tho. I guess to me would be a tom and jerry type thing where the guy keeps trying to build stuff to change the water flow but just fails.

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Marijke

Thank you Emma! For your comments and compliments.
The waterfall one I really like, but it is one that is hard to get right I think. Because it's man vs nature and dialogues are not really there. More like monologue from the little man with his rules. And then: just a waterfall.

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FRANCISCO (1 like)

My favorite What If idea was the one about the coward sword. Imagine all those warriors losing their battles because of the sword. The third what if made me wonder why would a bureaucrat would want a waterfall do by his rules.

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Marijke

Hi Francisco, thank you for your thoughts! Love that you see all those warriors before you, losing battles with a magical sword that doesn't do what it supposed to (anymore).
The bureaucrat: we thought he would just be following rules. And rules are rules. Even if they apply to force of nature (don't make sense at all). Thank you for your questions!

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Teri (1 like)

The second idea was my favorite because it made me laugh. I wonder what humorous and possibly dangerous situations a person would get in if they had a weapon with a mind of it's own. I wonder if other people will realize that the person cannot control the sword?

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Marijke

Hi Teri, so great that we made you laugh. And I love that you pick out the thought of possibly dangerous situations for the yielder of the sword! That could give funny scenes.

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Max GW (1 like)

My favourite is the magical sword not wanting to fight. I think it's a really amusing concept and theres a lot of potential for a deep relationship between the sword and the knight. I wonder why the sword doesn't want to fight. Does it suffer from a past traumatic event? Maybe it was abandoned and now has PTSD from that.

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Max GW (1 like)

My favourite is what if a magical sword was too afraid to fight. I think it's a really amusing concept and theres a lot of possibilities for a deep relationship between the sword and the knight. The film makes me wonder if the sword had some past traumatic event that made it a coward. Why is it afraid basically. Maybe it was abandoned and now it has PTSD from that.

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Marijke

Hi Max GW, haha, your thought about the sword being abandoned and having PTSD is great! What a great angle. Why is it afraid? That is indeed important for how the story would unfold. And we don't know it yet.. But thank you for the feedback!

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Kara (1 like)

Wow, what amazing art! I really enjoyed the waterfall what if question. Perhaps a scientist or the EPA would have more of a reason for nature following rules? Great questions and again beautiful art! :)

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Marijke

Hi Kara, thank you for your thoughts. Ah, a reason for nature following rules: that would be deep. A scientist would think he knows what should be, or what is best. And the waterfall wouldn't care. Because... It's a waterfall. Thanks for the compliments!

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Hansen (1 like)

Your idea about a bureaucrat is intriguing to me. It could tie in ideas about government, power structures, man vs nature, etc.

It makes me wonder who this bureaucrat represents/where his authority comes from? What rules are being broken by this waterfall?

It's unclear to me why a bureaucrat would believe that he could subject a waterfall to his rules. Maybe he enforces the laws of nature? Or perhaps it can be more symbolic of man vs nature in general.

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Marijke

Hi Hansen, thank you for your thoughts about the waterfall narrative. It indeed could go in different directions. It started from the point that a bureaucrat got rules to follow and he feels the need to follow them, even if they don't make sense. Man vs nature: yes! Your questions are very insightful and help me think about this.

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AJ (1 like)

I really like the idea of a magical legendary sword not wanting to fight and is scared of it's own fate. Perhaps it learns courage? Does the holder of the sword have some kind of flaw that he can learn from the sword to balance each other out? I think there's a lot of potential with the story there with some nice character building.

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Marijke

Hi AJ, thank you for the comments! I love your thought about the holder of the sword having some kind of flaw that the sword can learn from. The combination between sword and yielder becomes much more evident.

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Monica (1 like)

Your Goat and Volcano God story possibilities sound and look like they will be a joy to witness. I wonder if everyone becomes friends in the story or the power struggles that will happen between all the characters: Goat, Volcano, the angry mob of people.

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Marijke

Thank you, Monica! Good question about what would happen between the Goat, volcano and the angry mob. We haven't thought beyond this point yet. It would take a lot of action sequences of the goat getting away, big chase. It sounds like fun too!

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Fiona (1 like)

Haha these are my fave so far!
The final one especially made me laugh. I wonder how you would develop that as a story.

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Marijke

Thanks Fiona! So cool that it made you laugh. The sword seems to be popular in this community. Very valuable feedback to get.
I am curious too how we are going to develop a story... Can't wait to find out how we will be mentored.

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Sanchez (1 like)

I loved all of these prompts! I was really intrigued by the sword one, to me it was unclear whether all weapons are magic or just that one sword, but I think exploring the story from the point of view of the sword could be fun! If he is the only sentient sword he could feel like the odd one out, where if he has sentient friends, he could also feel the odd one out because of his fear? I love the art style too!

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Marijke

Thank you for your feedback Sanchez! In my mind it was a thousand years old magical sword. Maybe he only ever talks to his yielders (if that is a word).
Thanks for the compliment about the art style :)

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Luis (1 like)

I enjoyed all three of your "what if" ideas. The one that stood out the most for me was the sword. I would love to see how that character would develop and what makes it magical and sentient. The last one, makes me wonder what made the bureaucrat want to subject the waterfall to its rules? Did the waterfall flood his city, did the bureaucrat fall on a wet floor, who knows? Interesting to see what would happen. All three are fantastic, keep up the good work.

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Marijke

Thank you Luis! I thought like: a thousand year old magical sword who gives its yielder ever victory.
And thank you for commenting on the last one too. I think the statement could have been clearer: the bureaucrat has been given the rules and he needs to stick with them. If they make sense or not! Haha, your idea that the bureaucrat fell on a wet floor. Fantastic. Thanks!

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Brennan (1 like)

I love all these prompts! I'm going to discuss the second prompt, the sword that is too scared to fight. I love this prompt, as it allows a fun subversion of expectations on a classic story. It makes me wonder why the sword is scared to fight? This would be fun to explore! You could use the story to explore themes of pacifism, with a weapon that refuses to hurt others. This sounds like a fun story!

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Marijke

Hi Brennan, thank you for your insights. Yes, a weapon that doesn't want to fulfill its purpose. Is it then still a weapon? A pacifist sword indeed! after thousands of years and hundreds of battles it has had enough...

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Emma (1 like)

My favorite What If idea is the Sacrificial Goat escaping because its an idea that hasn't been explored. It makes me wonder what the goat's life would be on the run and how the problem of the volcano god would be resolved. It is unclear, though, how the goat escapes.

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Marijke

Hi Emma, thanks for your comment. You ask good questions. I have no idea yet how to answer them! I thought it was a funny thought if there actually WAS a vulcano god that cared about the sacrifices. It would definitely need more thought. Thank you for helping.

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