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Franklin

i like is history

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Hanna

I liked that the characters were very expressive, especially in their body language and way of saying things. In some scenes, there were just the characters, which showed the characters clearly, but I wonder what the background looks like in those scenes? I would suggest adding a horizon line and having the characters a different color from the sky (like light gray).

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Eva

That lip movement. That's interesting.

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Julian

I love the animation, so detailed that even the mouth moves.

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Claire

the animations are impressive!! I just think that you should add more context to how the human arrived and how these aliens live and discovered her, I also think it would be best to add to the plot in preparation for the climax.

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Finn

like how you added voices to your story and get animation

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Joaquin

I would like to see more colour

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Joaquin

3 comments EXCELLENT DESINGS, ANIMATION AND VOICE ACTING

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NOTE: Apologies if the lip-syncing is out of sync. In addition, the video seems too brightly coloured so the shadows are not clearly showing up. I aim to fix this issue in the future. Last but not least, please check if the video is muted (hover over the video). If it is muted, you may unmute it--there is sound.
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TRANSCRIPT:
[The aerotaxi docks on the bridge, and Cadence the human steps out]
KEI: A newcomer.
LUC: Let's introduce her to our village!
KEI: Nah, just make Zelv do it.
LUC: Zelv? He’s too scared to come out of his own house, in case he steps out and falls to his doom! And who can blame him? Us qwertills live too high. That’s why we have to zipline everywhere. Here, watch me throw this extremely dangerous grenade off the bridge.
[Luc throws the grenade. It takes a long time to fall and for them to hear the explosion, implying that the height at which the qwertills live is quite high]
LUC: Case closed.
[Kei and Carl blink.]
KEI: Well, are YOU going to introduce the human lady to our village?
LUC: No.
KEI: Then Zelv should. What do you think, Carl? [Carl thinks then replies.]
CARL: Yeahhhhhh!
[Kei smiles.]
KEI: Come on!
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Credits for voices will be included in the final video. For now, feel free to look here. Kei is voiced by Rithu Anand. Luc is voiced by Prisha Bajpai. Carl is voiced by me. IMPORTANT: These people are NOT part of my team (I am a solo worker) but they agreed to voice roles.

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