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Broken Dreams Act 1 & 2 (M & S swap)

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Desiree

Ahh, very touching!

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Yza

Hello, is it right that I can not hear anything? There are no spoken words in your video? I like the story and I am really looking forward to seeing how you are going to draw when they reach in each other's world. Will you add narrative or will it be just reading?

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Jacquelin

What did you like or love about this submission? loved the drawings.
What did you find confusing or unclear? it was clear
What suggestions do you have to make it stronger? look forward to the additional stuff.

good job!

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Carol

Hi, I read your note on not being complete yet but I love where you are going with this. Looking forward to a more completed set with Act 3 because I feel your story has so much emotion and possibility. Good luck!.

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Aranza

Hello! Is a touching story! And I like the message very much.
I'm just not sure how it will be when they'll "experience" each others feelings, will it be like spoken, or with the facial expresions or they will experience the moments like they live them?

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Once upon a time there was mom, Maria and daughter Selena leading busy lives, trying to move forward with their ambitions. Selena wants to play volleyball in college, and Maria wants to see her kid’s dream come true, supporting her family and hopefully saving them from pain.

Every day was filled with work for Maria, household stuff and shuttling Selena around. Selena’s day was filled with school and volleyball. Maria secretly worried about Selena’s singular focus on volleyball as her own childhood dream of ice skating fell through. This left a void that was never really filled. But Selena forged ahead with determination to achieve her goal.

One day, Selena hurt her arm playing and had to stop playing, volleyball permanently.

Because of that, Maria and Selena were sitting around talking about what to do next, while cleaning up volleyball items and looking at scrapbook pictures.

As the were looking, a couple of pictures fell out of the album of Maria ice skating as a kid and Selena playing volleyball. Both reached for the fallen pictures and the moment they both grasped the pictures together they found themselves being transported to each other’s world.

Because of that Maria and Selena experienced each other’s disappointment in not being able to fulfill their athletic dream or being saved from pain.

Until finally Selena understood that her mom forged ahead despite disappointment and Maria realized that while dedication is good, you can miss out on some pretty great opportunities.

Act 1 hasn't been fixed and Act 2 isn't quite done due to time constraints, but thought I would upload anyway.

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