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ghosties <3

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Olivia (1 like)

I love your drawing of the city, and I like how the happy ghosts are in the center of the picture. I am curious to see if the ghosts are scene by humans and what would happen.

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Mia (2 likes)

I really like teh ghosts! They are super cute, and they look really dressed for vacation! One thing you could improve on is maybe to add some more color. Also, since they are going on vacation, maybe the sky should be like a light, sky blue so that you can really get the feel something "happy" is happening.

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River (2 likes)

One of my favorite drawings in week three! I like the, for lack of a better word, "fuzziness" of the streets and towers below. It really gives a sense of how high they are. The designs for the ghosts are also very cute. The only things that seemed a little unclear is that the use of gray and the clouds in the sky makes me unsure whether I should feel gloomy or happy. Great job! :D

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Ashley (2 likes)

I really like your two ghosts! You can tell what's going on and I think it's very cool.

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Luis (2 likes)

I love this draw because it makes you feel nostalgic, nice job.

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Natalie (2 likes)

I like how you can tell the cars are moving.

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Natalie (2 likes)

I love the shading on the ghost and the shading. The way you did the cars were very creative and I like everything about it.

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Megan (2 likes)

omg so cute <3 such good perspectives and it’s literally so adorbz omg and the shading is good and the motion on the cars and like everything just fits together good job !

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Penny (2 likes)

This is really cute! They look like they're having a fun time and I love their little outfits. Where are they going on vacation? It looks like a big city, but is it their destination or are they only just leaving? I think it would be cool if the background had some landmark that the ghost on the right could be gesturing towards, but it's still great already!

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Abigail (1 like)

This is all very helpful feedback and left me with stuff to think about, thank you so much!

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a sketch based on the "what if two ghosts went on vacation?" idea i came up with in week 1

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