Anna

This is great! I'm confused as to how a wheel breaking was caused by the group taking a break. Also at why such a large part of the story was the group changing the wheel of the wagon. Either way, I really liked the story. The moral of the story, to me, was to be kind to others. I was really happy that the family and Billy lived happily ever after!

Tanner

felt a little fast but love stories that have a histroica element but stories or moral is friendship/ don't judge

Gabriel

cool story!

Julian

I like the idea

Gabrielle

We liked the volume you used. We also liked the pictures. How did they know they traveled 15 miles a day? How long did it take them to fix the wagon wheel?

Anton

I like your storyline and your characters. Add more detail and talk more clearer.

Tye

Speak equally, speak clear, I like the idea, like the name

Olive

I like the drawings and story but the background noise was a little distracting, how did the wheel break

Reid

Nice pictures everyone talked, there was some background noise

Kameron

Nice pictures everyone talked, there was some background noise

Hunter

I didn’t like the background noise, but I did like the drawings and camera movement.

Mataya

Liked the pictures and you some clearly. How did the wagon break?

Mckenna

I like your pictures and your story just try to talk slower.

Meagan

Why did they need to leave
Use different pictures
Did it stop raining because the rain just started
I like the pictures
And the story line

Charles

Good volume. Nice over the shoulder. You could try and add some color. Why did they pick a valley to build a house in.

Noah

Spoke clearly and good volume. What tools did they have to fix the tire

Surabhi

Spoke clear, Talk slower, where were they traveling to?

Ian

There was background noise. Good drawings. You spoke clear!

Preston

I liked the pictures and how they helped explain the story. Talk slower so we can understand it better

Lance

Good idea
Good pictures
Talk slower
Good details

Donovan

Nice that they fixed the wagon by them self
Like how they had a journey
What made the wagon brake
Why was that person in the mountains

Erin

I like how clear you guys were speaking and I like the story maybe add a little more details

Andrea

I like your pictures and how you added a speech bubble to show when a person is talking. Maybe you could talk a little slower.

kadynce

I like you story and pictures but I think you should leave the pictures on the screen longer or try talking slower.

Bree

If you read slower it would be easier to comprehend the story. I like the drawings, they are easy to understand.

Jackson

Talk a bit slower
More diyales
I like the story
Cool pictures

Rushmi

I feel like this has something to do with https://www.storyxperiential.com/media/a406f85c-f195-406b-b093-a2e469e031f0 and https://www.storyxperiential.com/media/7d59f1d5-cdf3-4e9d-b787-0389e6f8fea1-

Andres

I like the story