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Oregon Trail

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Anna

This is great! I'm confused as to how a wheel breaking was caused by the group taking a break. Also at why such a large part of the story was the group changing the wheel of the wagon. Either way, I really liked the story. The moral of the story, to me, was to be kind to others. I was really happy that the family and Billy lived happily ever after!

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Tanner

felt a little fast but love stories that have a histroica element but stories or moral is friendship/ don't judge

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Gabriel

cool story!

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Julian

I like the idea

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Gabrielle

We liked the volume you used. We also liked the pictures. How did they know they traveled 15 miles a day? How long did it take them to fix the wagon wheel?

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Anton

I like your storyline and your characters. Add more detail and talk more clearer.

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Tye

Speak equally, speak clear, I like the idea, like the name

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Olive

I like the drawings and story but the background noise was a little distracting, how did the wheel break

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Reid

Nice pictures everyone talked, there was some background noise

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Kameron

Nice pictures everyone talked, there was some background noise

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Hunter

I didn’t like the background noise, but I did like the drawings and camera movement.

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Mataya

Liked the pictures and you some clearly. How did the wagon break?

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Mckenna

I like your pictures and your story just try to talk slower.

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Meagan

Why did they need to leave
Use different pictures
Did it stop raining because the rain just started
I like the pictures
And the story line

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Charles

Good volume. Nice over the shoulder. You could try and add some color. Why did they pick a valley to build a house in.

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Noah

Spoke clearly and good volume. What tools did they have to fix the tire

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Surabhi

Spoke clear, Talk slower, where were they traveling to?

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Ian

There was background noise. Good drawings. You spoke clear!

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Preston

I liked the pictures and how they helped explain the story. Talk slower so we can understand it better

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Lance

Good idea
Good pictures
Talk slower
Good details

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Donovan

Nice that they fixed the wagon by them self
Like how they had a journey
What made the wagon brake
Why was that person in the mountains

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Erin

I like how clear you guys were speaking and I like the story maybe add a little more details

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Andrea

I like your pictures and how you added a speech bubble to show when a person is talking. Maybe you could talk a little slower.

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kadynce

I like you story and pictures but I think you should leave the pictures on the screen longer or try talking slower.

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Bree

If you read slower it would be easier to comprehend the story. I like the drawings, they are easy to understand.

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Jackson

Talk a bit slower
More diyales
I like the story
Cool pictures

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Andres

I like the story

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