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Act 3

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Fernando

Good story, talk clear next time =).

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Anton

I like your drawings and your dialogue. Add minor beats to give more detail. Talk clear.

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Gabrielle

We liked your drawings. We liked how clear your voice was and there was no background noise. Maybe you could explain the story a little better. Our other suggestion is to take clearer photos so they aren’t so blurry.

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Reid

I like you drawings I think you should focus on the westward expansion and talk a bit louder

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Kameron

Nice pictures, volume was good, you need to talk clearer, the story line is un clear

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Tye

Good pictures more talking you speak clear speak louder

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Mataya

Like the idea. Where was the history? Maybe make pictures more detailed.

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Noah

What is the moral of the story. Good and loud speaking

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Hunter

You guys forgot a lot of the story and didn’t talk about it much. Decent moral though.

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Charles

How does this relate to social studies. Why was he wanting to go home. I liked that there wasn’t background noise interfering.

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Olive

I liked the drawings your story was confusing, the pictures where blurry in some places and the voices are missing in some places

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Meagan

Why does he need to go to the basement what is down there that he needs
We need your first an second act
It’s fine
Nice

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Surabhi

Where are they, who are they, talk louder

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Mckenna

Have more speaking not just pictures and try to connect it to social studies. I like the pictures.

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Andrea

What is the moral of your story? Why does your character want to go home? How does this connect to social studies?
I liked that there wasn’t much background noise. I also liked your drawings.

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Lance

Good drawings
Was there more history in the early acts?

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kadynce

I liked you story and pictures, I think you should try to connect it more to social studies. I think it would help if you had less background noise

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Donovan

Like story
Nice images
Talk more clear
Bring it Manifest destiny

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Ian

You didn’t have act 1 or 2. Have it related to history. Good drawings. You guys spoke clearly and loud.

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Jesse (2 likes)

Week 7 has all acts. Still a great act 3. Fantastic drawings.

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Isaac (2 likes)

I think you need to add more details and make it more about manifest destiny-

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Erin (1 like)

I like the story maybe bring up manifest destiny

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Bree (1 like)

There is no storyline. If you could add more detail to your pictures it would help.

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