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Good story, talk clear next time =).
I like your drawings and your dialogue. Add minor beats to give more detail. Talk clear.
We liked your drawings. We liked how clear your voice was and there was no background noise. Maybe you could explain the story a little better. Our other suggestion is to take clearer photos so they aren’t so blurry.
I like you drawings I think you should focus on the westward expansion and talk a bit louder
Nice pictures, volume was good, you need to talk clearer, the story line is un clear
Good pictures more talking you speak clear speak louder
Like the idea. Where was the history? Maybe make pictures more detailed.
What is the moral of the story. Good and loud speaking
You guys forgot a lot of the story and didn’t talk about it much. Decent moral though.
How does this relate to social studies. Why was he wanting to go home. I liked that there wasn’t background noise interfering.
I liked the drawings your story was confusing, the pictures where blurry in some places and the voices are missing in some places
Why does he need to go to the basement what is down there that he needs
We need your first an second act
Where are they, who are they, talk louder
Have more speaking not just pictures and try to connect it to social studies. I like the pictures.
What is the moral of your story? Why does your character want to go home? How does this connect to social studies?
I liked that there wasn’t much background noise. I also liked your drawings.
Was there more history in the early acts?
I liked you story and pictures, I think you should try to connect it more to social studies. I think it would help if you had less background noise
Talk more clear
Bring it Manifest destiny
You didn’t have act 1 or 2. Have it related to history. Good drawings. You guys spoke clearly and loud.
Jesse (2 likes)
Week 7 has all acts. Still a great act 3. Fantastic drawings.
Isaac (2 likes)
I think you need to add more details and make it more about manifest destiny-
Erin (1 like)
I like the story maybe bring up manifest destiny
Bree (1 like)
There is no storyline. If you could add more detail to your pictures it would help.
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