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Krista

This is beautiful, this made me appreciate the things I have. Thank you

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Mattie

This story is adorable and the art is cute. It made me feel really happy and from my understanding, the moral was about the importance of family connections and friendship.

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Ben

The drawings were great! I love how you brought the characters to life with their expressions.

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Kyla

I really like your drawings. I like the use of dialog in Act 3. It creates more believable characterization. Great job!

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Jasper

Liked it, reminded me of the bee movie.

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Katherine

I really like how you drew the expressions on the characters, but why were Flynn's parents too tired to get home?

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Claire

I love your storytelling through images!! It's a very cute and interesting concept, and there's not much to change. I do think that you could maybe give a more detailed narration, but good job!

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Sara

I like that the main character was able to solve his problem through reflection. His personality really came out. I thought the fireflies made an interesting cast.
The artwork was good.

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Abdulla

Great artwork!

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Mataya

Nice color and pictures. I like the story and fun idea. What would happen if a big was mean? Would he just decline?

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Meagan

If he can get out to deliver mail why can’t he just escape

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Noah

Really good drawings and volume. Why did they leave the top of the tree

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Charles

Nice story. Good drawings. Why did Flynn never talk to anyone but Ryder and other fireflies. Why didn’t his parents have enough energy to get back home.

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Mckenna

Your pictures are really good. Try to speak a little slower in some parts but I like your story board.

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Meagan

LOVE the drawings
Nice emotions

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Bertha

well done.

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Mónica

Your story is so beautiful, i really like the colors that you use :)

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Ricardo

The animation is very well done!

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David

Good job and details! Very good animation

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Willy

I love the animation and the story is very good, emotional

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Enrique

The animation was dope

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Aisa

I really like the animation.

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Cooper

I think the story is good but I was wondering how they got out of the jar.

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Samantha

Cool story! I really like the resolution.

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Script for Act 3 (Skip to 2:44 for Act 3)
Until finally, after Ryder unexpectedly bumped into and saved Fynn from a predator who tried to eat him, the two finally get to catch up.
Ryder: Hey fynn? Fynn? You in there buddy?
Fynn: Huh? Oh yea.. thanks for that btw
Ryder: What happened to you being able to dodge those things? You doing alright?
Fynn: Uh yea it’s just been a long night, heh long week… or two..
Ryder: Hey man you wanna talk abt it..?
Fynn looks at Ryder w sad eyes and nods. And after talking more w Ryder, he finally realizes how his work has been affecting him.
And every since that night w Ryder, fynn began listening to what Ryder told him and started reaching out to bugs both nocturnal and even diurnal (those who are awake at day, asleep at night) so he can mail even more letters at take up less energy. And now that he has more free time, he’s able to spend time w his family again as well as Ryder :D

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