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I love this story! It's moving! It gently carries you through multiple emotions and leaves you feeling complete. Amazing work!
This is a very cute concept. My only suggestion would be that when they are transforming into a heart maybe the black shape also goes forward towards the heart, so it feels more like both of them want this, and not that only one is consuming the other. Really love the music for the piece.
Music was excellent. I would love to see more of the love story through your animation. Illustration was good.
Creative idea. Hope you spend time developing more.
This story reminds me of hieroglyphs and pictographs from the cave dweller days. In a good way! Matter of fact breaking news this week was of authorities finding unexpected simple cave paintings in Alabama. Your first intuition is to say life was so simple and primitive back then. But it was actually all relative and left a lot to be desired. To make this a better story, add a few beats of finding other or similar shapes that don't resolve the puzzle. Or a shape that perceives themselves as having resolved the puzzle by themselves and not needing the other halve. This is what keeps some of us romantics searching for a heart of gold.....and I'm getting old.
I love the style and the concept in that its very simple and you understand the ideal version of love depicted. Very curious if they're the only shapes in this world? But overall I enjoyed it!
Wow! I love this story. Beautiful, tender, and sweet exactly what we all need to be reminded of these days. I hope to continue to see your work. Congratulations on a profoundly beautiful piece of artwork.
Ahmira, your story is simple and sweet. I think you can grow on what you have done, specially the beginning, maybe introduce the character a little more.
I loved the music and lack of words cuz you focus more on the story. The shapes idea is perfect and the heart at the end just makes everything complete.
I would suggest a stronger middle for the story like a growth to the first shape to notice what’s important in a significant other.
I love the feeling and message of this story. Awesome job!
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Oh no ! i apologize i thought i cut the ending off but it didn't save
I love the design of these little beings! And I love how their emotions color this world <3
I think your choice of shapes are both cute and simple, plus they remind me of No Face from Spirited Away. I found the beginning unclear since they both had a heart in between them yet one of them decided to drop the rose because they weren't in love. I like that the background changes to blue after their heart has been broken and it begins to brighten when another shape comes to put their heart back together and they become one. Also, not sure if it was intended, but the last forty or so seconds can be shaved off. I enjoyed your music and it lent to the spirit of heartbreak.
I love the colors you used and the idea of finding a new love.
I found confusing how to identify the character because of the concept art.
The heart is too much time on screen, you could cut it :)
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about two shapes in a relationship ending off of one-sided love and finding the puzzle that fits for the rest of the heart.
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