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This is a simple story, but good nonetheless. My only real problem is the background noise getting a bit out of hand, but I can understand if conditions might not be the best. Overall, good job this week.
Nice drawings, you spoke loud so we could hear you, some of your speaking was not loud enough, split up the audio
Talk louder good idea like the drawings make sure there’s no background noise
Why did he have to get to his family, I like that you guys talked clear
We liked the many different views you had for the pictures. We also liked the lesson you taught your character. To add to the story you could add him finding gold at the end when he gets out. You might also want to record in a quieter place so we can hear you better.
Good description and drawings. Be in a quieter space while speaking.
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Good story and idea. Lots of background noise and make pictures more detailed.
Good close ups. Good drawings. You could add more color. You should try to go a little slower.
Make sure there is no background noise and that everybody is talking the same loudness, also add in the moral of the story. I like your drawings and the story.
Is there tools that he can use like rock to get out
How does the family tie into the story I don’t understand
I like the pictures
And the idea
Very interesting storyline and moral, I would improve the drawings. 💺
Like how you used your perspectives I think you could spend more time on your pictures you should have a dialog I like how you used your arrows.
Maybe you could add more detail and background drawing in the cave.
Good story line. Lots of background noise.
I like your drawings and storyline, but the parts where you can’t really hear the voices should be fixed, maybe say what the family was doing while he was trapped?
I like your drawings. And I like your storyline.
I love the main character's hat!
I liked how his name connected to the story. Also, the lesson he learned about family is a good one.
The story is a complete story, there is nothing unclear.
To make it better, it would be interesting to add more personality traits to the miner. For example, can you give more insight into his attitude about money? You mentioned he mined to make money- did he make enough to be able to stop working? Was he a miser with money? It is clear his family misses him. Before the accident did he miss his family? How can you show how he thought about his family?
Your storyline is cute and I like the message. The only question I have is how long was your character underground and what did he do to survive?
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