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Lucca

I love your style, the tree is super cool and the expression on your characters face is very emotional. Maybe making it so that you can't see the windows through the parents clothes would make it stronger

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Braden

This drawing evokes a lot of emotion. The expression on the character's face really makes it clear how badly they don't want to leave the animal. The depth in this image really focuses well on the main characters. I wonder what the plot is.

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Amy

The creature looks so cute. Why is the girl being dragged away from the creature? I think what would help make this image stronger is making the characters less transparent so that they become distinct from the background. Good job on the art!

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Seneca (1 like)

i really like the detail on the tree and how the cat looks

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Maddie

Thank you!

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Seneca

+ why is the girl being pulled away from the cat

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Devin

Great video

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Devin

*drawing

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Maddie

Thanks!

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Nightshade

I like the drawing. Why doesn't she want to leave? Who is the cat?

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Maddie

Thanks :)

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Odin (1 like)

i like the drawing and the different shades of gray depicting the most popular things in the drawing. i find it confusing why cant she leave? what is stoping her? is it the cat/dog? or is it somthing else? try adding some context of why she cant leave or what is stoping her instead of just saying she cant leave. it needs a reason behind why she cant leave . give it some context.

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Maddie

Noted, thanks!

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Surabhi (1 like)

I like how there’s different shades of grey and that the background is lighter and it focuses on the people and the people are darker I’m curious about the animal and who is dragging the girl really cute style

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Maddie

Thanks so much!

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MacKenzie (1 like)

I think the setting here is really important, the big boxy towering buildings in the background versus the flow of the tree and the cat, you can also see how torn the character is between the cat and the other character! I think you could add a bit more emphasis on the girl and the cat, maybe make their lines a bit darker than everything else?

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Maddie

Thank you for the feedback!

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Andrew (1 like)

Your art is really well done here, and it's also impressive that this setting assignment is of an important/emotional scene in the story. The background lines are super clean, and I like how the tree has flowy wood grain. I think a way to make the composition better would be to adjust some of the overlapping going on with elements. The tree's branches are pretty complicated, so I think them crossing over clouds and other trees with the same line thickness makes them less clear.

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Maddie

Thanks so much for the feedback, I'll keep that in mind :)

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