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Draw Your Life (Ted's Minor Beats - Act 2)

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Christian

nice work

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Mason

I like where this story is going, I wonder how you're going to end this short.

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Pengyu

The drawings regarding characters and the expression of their feeling are really cool, but I feel like the backgrond could be added with more details in certain scenes.

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Jeydin

Woah dude! I love the details your sketches have! I really liked how realistic the scenarios were and also how dramatic the phone breaking was. Nothing was unclear.

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Eli (1 like)

I love this art! Perfect sketches! Shows everything you need to see clearly and nicely uses value to show what's important! I wonder if there is a way that him buying the video can be set up a little more? A bit about that early on when establishing his character might could make it feel a bit less out of place when mentioning it later on. I absolutely can not wait to see part 3 of this! The writing at the end and the story as a whole absolutely gave me frission at the end. Amazing work guys!

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Ben (1 like)

The story is really interesting and deep, although I think that the concept of sentient drawings could be expanded upon more. These two drawing creatures could be shoulder angels/demons (if you know what I'm talking about) and the story would mostly be the same, so tapping into the drawing aspect more would justify the concept. Other than that, I have no complaints. Good job.

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Eli (1 like)

I kinda already got the vibe of a bit of angel/devil allusion and I totally agree that this could be a super cool way to expand a bit more on this concept. I also thought that in establishing the concept maybe mentioning a few more drawings that were there but aren't any more or things like that could make it feel a bit more fleshed out, especially to get the sentience idea across explaining their personalities and what not could be cool.

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Concepcion

excellent work

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Willy

I like the idea and I love the creativity

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Jose

I really enjoyed your story.

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Seneca

Your idea is really interesting and creative, i also really like your art style

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Bailee

Hey! This is one of the submissions I look forward to see each week and it’s rly cool seeing your story unfold :D nothing was unclear and excited to see what’s coming next

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Gabriel

Both the drawings and story are very creative, and I think that this story could hold its own as a netflix original. I am very excited to see the final product!!!

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Greer

Your art style is amazing, and the moment at the end where his phone breaks and he sees his room in the dark is super impactful. It's obvious you put a lot of thought into using the visuals to tell the story for you. Your team is doing amazing!

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Nelson

like the colors

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Leonardo

The drawing are sick!

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Kelvin

Great drawings and atmosphere

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Kaden

The drawing are amazing and I love the idea of how the boy thinks he has this power his whole life and then discovers he was imagining it all.

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Tyler

Interesting, I’m left out on how his tattoos speak to him

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Dara

I love the plot of the story. There is a great amount of detail and it is easy to understand. There is no tips I can give you because it is so good!!

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Andrew

I actually really like this because its different from every other story, it breaks the rules in how you're supposed to make a story and because of that it's amazing. please show how his fall into depression spirals further and further until the end of the story. I suggest he goes to therapy, gets diagnosed with anxiety and schizophrenia, gets medicated and gets his life together.

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Our story continues when Ted Anser forced to confront his fears on a trip to the supermarket. He meets a girl who just so happens to live at his same apartment, and somehow holds out for long enough to get her number. Now, he's received a text from her asking if he wants to play videogames together. Fearing the worst, he decides to deny her offer, when his tattoos step in and try to get him to reconsider. But, it doesn't go quite as smoothly as one might think...

(If you watched our first Act 1 submission, skip to 0:56 for Act 2! - River :D)

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