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Danylo's world.

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Braden (1 like)

The shadow of the character's back in front of the camera adds some interesting depth to this fantastic work of art! The bright light from overhead gives the image a cool supernatural look!

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Rushmi (1 like)

The bit of blue around some objects draws attention to them, though I'm not sure why they're important. The muted colors give us a nice idea as to how this character views his world.

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Ana

This is so expressive. I really like the lightning, it definitely stands out in the submissions.

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Sara

The art is very effective in showing how objects are not held by gravity- the outline of the person suggests the character is observing, not participating in the events before them
It is unclear how the main character reacts to the change in their situation
I assume as the story develops this will be clarified?

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Alexa (1 like)

The notion of a world suddenly loosing gravity is really intriguing and I love how you crafted the perspective to emphasize the people in the air. Plus, I really like your drawings (the blue highlights and sign are seriously eye-catching) and, as another team of one, I admire the effort put into the background details.

Something I found a little unclear is how the main character isn't affected by the gravity shift. It took a little thinking to realize that while everything is floating, the main isn't because of where he was placed on the canvas. It makes it hard to see if he's on the ground or in the air like everything else, so, without the description, I would've never realized how he was an "outsider" in the world. However, I think you did convey the loss of gravity really well and the chaos it causes with the floating things.

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Emma

Your use of perspective and lighting in the composition make the focus of the scene very clear! I love how you were able to capture so much movement and expression in your piece without actually seeing the main character's face.

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Kevin

Awesome looking world. Love the art style

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Henry

This picture is really well drawn and the silhouette of the guy does a really good job conveying emotion.

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Jacinta

I like the coloring.

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Anton

I like how well done it is. Why are there people jumping from buildings?

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Reid

Nice perspective nice shape nice shading

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Elina

I love how realistic all of the textures are in this drawing!

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Sanne

The perspective of this picture is amazing! You also created a strong mood. Great job!

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Keya

The drawings and the color palette are really nice and represent the connotative mood that your story seems to revolve around. Something I noticed is that the stationary buildings and the tree in the mid-ground of the image seem to be adhering to the laws of gravity, however objects like cars and planes seem to be going haywire. Is this purposeful? I really like your story idea! Can't wait to see what happens!

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Zhilu

The whole atmosphere of your world is so realistic! I LOVE it! Not being affected by gravity depletion is a good or a bad thing in the eyes of the character? Does he feel left out from being different?

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Tristan

I love the perspective and the art is amazing. It is an incredibly atmospheric look into the world you made.

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A world with occasional scientifically unexplainable gravity depletion. One day our character finds himself not affected by that.

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