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Love and Death Story Spine

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Eleonora

Hi! I like the main theme of your story, especially the moral.
I'm a bit confused about the death turning into an angel, couldn't he help the doctor as a death too?
At the end he could have been so inspired by the doctor that he change it's way to be a death maybe
and when she die he could turn the doctor in a death assistant too!
It's just an idea, I like the dark feeling in your story, :)!

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Maranda

Your story is very intriguing, and I like that you gave death personality and feelings instead of it just being the stereotypically evil Grim Reaper. I was a little confused how Dr. Diaz was able to use up her candle; did she talk to Death and ask them to cut up her candle, did she wish/pray for a miracle but didn't know her lifespan was shortening, or was there another way? Another thing I wanted to add is that I like your character designs.

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Takara

I love this very intresting! I was wondering how long did Dr Diaz have the candle burning and save the lives, before she passed?

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Anna

Good to see this is still going strong! It is interesting you’ve expanded upon the cast to include figures from heaven and hell to flesh out death’s importance for both. You could also delve more into the doctor’s sudden passing being influenced by either power, or perhaps a mix of both. Perhaps Death is caught stealing the wax from other candles, but by who? Is the doctor’s death a consequence? Keep it up!

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Patrick

Woah this is cool and has many different tones - its feel dark and moody but also uplifting at the same time, which is an interesting dynamic. I wanna start by saying your idea is super unique and I especially love the melting candles as a symbol for the passing of time and ultimate death of people in the world. To me that is such a unique concept and something I feel like I have never seen before yet feels so natural in the world of this story about death which has been done before, yet this is a different take on that story and one that is truly universal, as they say the two things inevitable in life are death and taxes lol. Anyways that is some things I love. As for some things that were confusing, not much. But I wonder if death could cause the sudden passing of Dr. Diaz by accident somehow and that was cause this strong choice to become a mortal in hopes of being with her one day. The reason for this is it seems so random that Dr. Diaz passes which could totally work but I just wonder if it would fit the story to have death have something to do with it and have that shown versus told using a causal relationship. Really dig your drawings too. Look forward to seeing how this develops.

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MJ

Hi- I love your story. I love that it uses Death as a character-- I always find that fascinating to begin with. I am afraid I don't understand your last part- Death turns into a mortal-- but does this mean Death waits until he ages to die, or does he kill himself to be with Dr. Diaz?

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Kim

Hello! I love your moral to your story so much, it's such a great dilemma that I can personally relate to. Your drawings are stunning as well. I think it's a really unique and intriguing story with a non-formula ending which I find refreshing. I guess the only thing I am unclear on/think might be developed more is this. Is Dr. Diaz aware of Death and his feelings for him? How does she have choice in this afterlife relationship? Is she is aware of him (while alive) and falls in love with him too, or, does she become aware of him from the afterlife because he has denounced his role and lives in her honor, and falls in love with him too, from the afterlife?

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Kim

Oops, I meant, "Is Dr. Diaz aware of Death and his feelings for her?"

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- [x] Once Upon A Time the Angel of Death faithfully claimed the souls of those who’s time had ended - [x] Everyday it would watch a persons candle burn out and come to guide them to the after life - [x] Until one day, a doctor named Maya Diaz saved a life and while their candle was melted, their flame continued to burn. - [x] Because of that, Death began to enjoy this mysterious game of causing complications that Dr Diaz would adapt or preemptively treat. - [x] Because of that Death was called by Lucifer to account for the missing souls - [x] Because of that Lucifer hatched a plan to let Dr. Diaz use her candle to save a hopeless dying patient - [x] Because of that Dr. Diaz over used her candle saving lost causes - [x] Because of that Death developed feelings for her selfless unconditional dedication to saving others and began stealing from other people’s candles - [x] Until finally Dr. Diaz suddenly passed and Death challenged God for taking her away. - [x] Ever since then, Death has taken a mortal form to be with her in the afterlife

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