Forever Turning Jade

I like how your story which seems to be an innocent group of people, is really a group looking to exploit the Amazon. Your story poses the question that viewers have to contend with, what is selfless vs. selfish? There is a lot to think about with your story, which means you have hit at some deep moral issues that have real impact on how we use our planet. Excellent work, and I am looking forward to seeing how your story concludes.

The Antique Store Story Spine

Wow, the blending of Emily and her world of antiques with ghosts is a fantastic idea. What better way to introduce ghosts then with an antiquities dealer. Working everyday with the relics of the past is truly the best way to forge a connection with the ghosts of history. I love how we see a change from Emily at the beginning to the end. Her growth is internal, but her personality changes which allows her to not live her life by the tick of a clock.

Story Spine: First Day of School

Excellent story. I love how you took the loneliness that Lauren feels and it manifests into a physical being. I think this would be a great way to show a variety of audiences that our feelings can have an effect on our interactions with others. This is a story that many will connect with, as we have all had those moments of separation like Lauren has had. Just a suggestion, perhaps a moment with Lauren's mother to show that she too feels the same way as Lauren? This is an excellent story. Well done.

Once Upon A Time...

Hi. Wow, a great story concept that anyone will connect with. We have all had those moments of wanting five more minutes with a game, a book, or a television show. I like how you have outlined his reasons and your story draws the viewers in. I look forward to seeing the final product.

Sad Birthday

Wow, the way you used shading to illustrate the mood is incredible. There is so much the viewer can take away from the emotions based on who is in the light and dark areas of your picture. Jamir doesn't understand what is happening, nor what he did wrong. Your picture reflects the reality of how kids would sense themselves apart and feel alone, even though they are in a room with other people. Very creative and very relatable.

The Districts

Hi Wayne Family.

Rustin sneaks into the steam district, color me intrigued. Why does he want to sneak into the steam district? Is something illegal happening? Is this were the cool people hang out? Why? That's why I am intrigued. There are so many possibilities with your story and I am looking forward to see how the narrative plays out.

Carli at work

Hi Team Small.

A picture says a thousand words and yours is excellent. Not only do you express the longing's that Carli has, but the background imagery says it all. Stuck at work, but thinking about what could be. Carli connects with everyone, because we have all felt the way that Carli has. I hope she gets to move beyond having a sticker that says travel, and stickers from famous places, to having pictures of herself at these places she longs to see.

Self Help on the Subway

Hi Team Stina.
I love the contrast between the characters to the world, as well as the body language you have established with your characters. The viewer can learn a lot about your story just by the placement of your characters. I'm curious to know if the plant is going to grow and that will help your character, or if the struggle of looking after the plant is what will make your character happy.

ECHO

Hi Team NIAD.
The tone set with the background shading and the soundtrack is excellent. Not only do I get a sense of paranormal but I also wonder how real everything is in the story. Is this actually happening or is this just a figment of the imagination of your main character. I'm intrigued by your video and can't wait to see more.

Character Profile – Poe

Poe is a very interesting character. He seems like a decent person, but he looks like he has trouble accepting people for who they are. Why doesn't get connect with the ghost? Does Poe have a hard time working with others? I think Poe has a lot of potential. His story could be transformative and I look forward to see where you go with this.

Soulmate

I like this idea and I am not surprised that Rasmus wouldn't have a soulmate. You set it up beautifully by your description of Rasmus. He is always looking somewhere else, whether it's in a book or out the window, hoping for love. I think this would a great story of self discovery, and recognizing that the best is often in front of ourselves and not hiding in a book or a far off place.

Jett

He's a paper airplane but his name is Jett, nice. I love the duality of Jett's desire to escape the classroom and explore. This would connect with a lot of students, and the desire to move beyond the classroom. It would be incredible to see Jett caught in storm and blown out of the classroom. It could almost be similar to Dorothy waking up in Oz.

The boy who could fly

I love this idea. I like how you have mixed a common shared trait of sneezing and taken it beyond the ordinary. I think your story would hone in on a variety of issues and needs that plague kids, and the overprotection of parents. It would be interesting to see the parent perspectives. Perhaps showing the worry of the parents would be a great parallel story to what you are developing.

Even Crime Bosses Look For Love!

I really like you concept. I feel like you have two separate worlds that your character lives in with what they show, and how they feel. There are multiple avenues of story to explore and I look forward to seeing how this develops. I wonder, do you want your character to succeed? Can they?

What If Exercise

Staging the trip to the moon for your friend would fantastic. I love the idea that you would be playing on the reader and characters imagination to tell the story. Perhaps you could show the imagination of the characters and the reality of where they are as they pretend.

What If - Nix and Jaime

You dementia idea would be incredible to explore. Trying to understand something that is so unknown would be a great story telling avenue. You could offer some empathy to everyone this this story. I would love to see this idea explored.

What if

The idea of an imaginary friend coming to life is awesome. I wonder do you have a specific day that they might come alive? I would think someone's birthday would be a good choice, or maybe when the person is feeling sad, the imaginary friend comes to cheer them up? Would love to see more of this idea.

What ifs…..

Spiders keeping a pantry inside of my ear would be terrifying. I do like the idea of the bad drivers having to have a cone on top of their car. That would make life so much easier. I wonder what is a bad driver? How would you define that in the story?

What If

What if the dinosaurs went on a trip? I love it. Imagine the story that could be told. The humor, creativity of seeing how dinosaurs respond to what has changed on earth. I feel like this has a very stranger in a stranger land setup that could be very intriguing to explore.

3 What Ifs

What if color came from laughter is a very intriguing idea. I can just imagine a zany story with wild antics that would help to show how color comes into the world by laughter. Color me intrigued.