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The Inflatable Girl

I love this world you created! The setbacks were epic! Beautiful illustrations and the music was perfect. Very well done!

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love

I love this story! It's moving! It gently carries you through multiple emotions and leaves you feeling complete. Amazing work!

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The Dream Seller

Just wonderful! I loved the whole story. Enderr's character had depth and compassion. The illustrations took me to a different world. Amazing job!

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Dream of Courage

I love the illustrations. What's a little unclear to me is whether Rugala was expected to be perfect only in her work or all the time. Fun story!

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SMOKE ME

I love the illustrations. I love the song! Beautiful story!

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Adam and Eve

The illustration is beautiful! What's unclear is the characters' motivations. I think it would serve this piece if you develop the characters more to help your audience understand the character's needs.

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Creative Journey (WIP) (Sarah Estes)

I love the feeling of this piece! Anxiety, frustration, hopelessness, and yet she reaches forward to start. It's optimistic! And that's how I feel about the potential of this story. Really well done!

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Naz & Lili

I love how this story draws you in from the opening image. The illustrations are beautiful! The music enhanced the story. What's a little unclear is why Lili's parents are confining her to the house. Is she sick? Fantastic work!

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Mixiote and Lili

The illustrations are great! I love how well they tell your story. It is a little unclear why Liliana is apprehensive about staying because she seemed to be settling in well before her mom told her that they would stay. Is it because she is so used to moving or does she not like this place? Nice opening! Keep developing this!

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Gravity

I love the illustrations and the quotes on the images throughout! Such a sweet story! Well done!

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Escape From Channel 52

Well, thank you for your valuable feedback! That shift is now a part of our discussions for the final edit.

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Escape From Channel 52

OOOOHHHH, I love that idea! We'll work on that. Thanks for your feedback!

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Act 1-3

I really like the character, Mr. Snee. The story flows really well. What's a little unclear to me is why the people choose to accept Mr. Snee's rules again after the lifting of restrictions. Perhaps you could consider flushing out when the people began to recognize the danger they were in because of the relaxed rules? Nice work!

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Future Selves

Wonderful! I honestly just think it's great! I enjoyed how the decision kept getting harder and harder for Pip. My only comment is encouragement...keep up the attention to detail as you move into editing. I just love this one!

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Moran

I'm hooked! I love the illustrations. Simple yet compelling. I wonder how Moran feels about his powers. Looking forward to seeing the rest!

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Hero Town

Renee is an awesome hero! I love her commitment to finding Hero Town. Were the residents of Hero Town the ones being paid off for protection by Renee's uncle and others? I wonder if we could get more details on the rigors of her journey to Hero Town. We know that she overcame the obstacles, still, I'm curious as to how she did it. Great work here!

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Dream Come True

I love this character! She is someone you want to root for. I was wondering what degree she got originally? Was there anything that caused her to remember her dream of being an artist? She seems connected to the animals and her land. Does that inspire her art? Such a fun story!

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The Antique Store - Acts 1, 2 & 3

I really like the character you have created with Emily. It's clear who she is and how she is. What's less clear is why she is that way. I love the story of her transformation and how jazz music instigated it. I wonder if the social environment created by the ghosts was the environment she was thinking of when she wondered why she didn't have friends? What was it about the experience with the ghosts that changed her so dramatically that she could duplicate that environment? I love the illustrations and I think your shot selections work. Really great job!

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Kahlani Work in Progress

This is a great story! I love Kahlani's transformation. I appreciated how the skills she learned early on served her all the way through the story. What's a little unclear to me is how they worked their way through some of the obstacles. I understood what the obstacles were, but I was a little confused by how they got resolved. Great progress so far! Really well done!

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act 1 - Piper

I love the mixed-use visuals with illustrations and pictures. I wonder if Piper is hiding her talents from the humans or if they just don't recognize them. I'm curious what actions she has taken toward her Hollywood dreams? This is an exciting adventure!

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Act I - First Day of School

I love the relationship established between Lauren and her mother. What's unclear is why Lauren is so apprehensive about going to school. Is it because she won't be able to draw all day or is it being away from her mother or just being in a new place? The drawings are wonderful!

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Grandpa & the Machine: Act 1

I really loved the image of Jim taking the picture of Grandpa with his new bride! Just a beautiful moment! I wonder why it's only the two of them( Grandpa & Jim). Did something happen to his parents? Great Act 1!

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Week 5

I love how clearly you have introduced Sebastian's world to us. What's unclear is why everything has to be so perfect. I wonder what happens if it is not perfect? This is a wonderful story with a beautiful storyboard. Awesome!

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Rugula's Passion Act 1

I love the clarity with which Rugula is presented. She's living her best life and is very likable. What's unclear to me is whether she thinks something is wrong with Human Lore or with her work. I wonder if she is creating the sounds she wants to create or just following the producers' instructions? I look forward to seeing how this turns out!

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Hello

I love your illustrations and how you use the same set, with a few adjustments to the character's expressions to tell the story. It's very effective. I wonder which objects are able to communicate...if it's just the computer and smartphone or if the mouse, keyboard, or lamp have an opinion on this. Looking forward to seeing how it all plays out. Very well done!

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