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This is amazing! It has a mysterious vibe! What is the person looking at?

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Hidden in the mind

It looks surreal! :O I think what would help is to add more emphasis in certain areas of the image. Right now, it looks busy and I'm not sure where to look first. If you want to add emphasis on Mikey, then maybe you can lighten the dark background around the bones and mushrooms and then add more contrasting values on Mikey? Otherwise, I like the graphic style of the bones. :D

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Magic of Music

I like the perspective! Are they walking towards a music competition? If so, I think it would help if you added a "versus" sign. Also, maybe have the lightning bolt separating the musicians in the blue screen red? It would make it look more intense. Good job! You really showed how grand the beginning of their musical journey is.

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Sea of Clouds

I love the coloring! Is surfing on the clouds the same as surfing on the sea? If not, how is it different? Are these people not humans but people who can float in the sky? Good job on the artwork!

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What to Choose?

The creature looks so cute. Why is the girl being dragged away from the creature? I think what would help make this image stronger is making the characters less transparent so that they become distinct from the background. Good job on the art!

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Shock in Color

I love the colors especially contrast between the reds and the greens. I wonder how the piece of land that the house is able to stay high in the air. Is it floating or another part of the mountains? What would really help make this image stronger is showing the entirety of the dragon. The way it's cut off is a bit awkward. Again, good job on the image.

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Character development

Your drawings are amazing! I feel like you could be more specific on how the accident prevented him from doing art? Were his hands injured? What made him want to pursue art again? If you're going down the art college admissions route, perhaps you include him having to make a portfolio? Maybe he starts being afraid to draw for fun when he feels like he should draw to get better. I know I absolutely felt that way when I was apply for art colleges.

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Meet Molly! :]

This is an intriguing story! I like how there's two overarching mysteries that are intertwined together that need to be solved. I'm curious how long was Molly in the asylum? Is the ghost next to her, her "brother"? Would the asylum let her leave to work on the case? Also, your drawings are very cute!

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Character Ideas

I love the cute frog design. I want to know why the frog wants to fly when he's only a frog. Is there something about flying that he admires? How would the frogs and birds around him react to his dream? Good job!

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Wifi Character Profile

I like the T-shirt Wifi is wearing! What do you mean by "main human character" when you were referring to the boss? Also, it be interesting to note how their back and hands are hurting from overworking. How much do they get paid? Why is the boss overworking them so much? Good job on the character sheet!

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I can see a story that might have some tragic elements with this character. I'm curious how does he eat or sleep in his suit? Also, I think what would be interesting is that humanity is polluting the world with chemicals that drains color or maybe light (since light makes you see color). He has a mysterious vibe to him that I very like which makes me wonder if he's on a mission somewhere to save humanity.

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antonio the surfing ant

I love the concept of an ant catching waves! Though, I am confused because you said his character courageous yet he's afraid of catching bigger waves because of fear of being injured. Perhaps, maybe he's too reckless and often nearly gets hurt instead.

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WHAT IF...?

I like your idea about the rubber ducky. It gives me childhood memories of fearing the shower drain. How would the duck come to life? What's their personality? It would be nice to see clarification on how the boy would fit in the shower drain and how he's able to breathe with all of the water around. Nice job!

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Insert punny title here...

I like the Leprechaun idea because I always find it suspicious that Leprechauns always leave their gold out of the open. Perhaps, it's a trap to pickpocket people? Or the gold itself was stolen? Rainbows are mere deceptions! I would like to see you elaborate more on how he steals. Also, I love how you drew his evil grin.

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Grimoire

I really like the perspective of the Halloween Night drawing. My favorite idea is the rain made of fire. It's such a funny (and scary) concept. How would society live around fire rain? Would people be more resistant to fire? Was it always fire? If it is, what happened?

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3 What Ifs? - Piero Roque

I like your story about the clones. I am really interested to see what happens. It could be either a sci-fi horror, action, or a drama. How would the originals and the clones interact? Do the clones have their own personality? Though, it's unclear how the clones would be able to look like their originals. Does the scientist have a dark web database that has everyone's information? Your ideas are great!

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Three Universal Questions

I love these ideas, they're just so random and I can see the comedy potential in them. The second idea about the skunks intrigued me the most because of how outlandish you can take the story. I wonder how society would try to get rid of the skunks. Also, I wonder what would redeem the skunks in the end. I don't know much about skunks so I'm not sure how beneficial skunks would be. Good job with the concepts!

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What if....

I like the first idea about the world being made of witches because personally, I love me some good fantasy and magic. I wonder what kind of magic system and how witch society would work. Also, I wonder what exactly are pure-blooded witches? How are they different from "regular" witches? Great drawings, by the way!

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