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static

Great cinematography and story telling! I do wish you showed more, rather than telling; for example, describing the house rather than showing it. Otherwise, good job!

8

Week

The Life of the Spider in the Corner

I like what the story has the potential to be, but it seems very short and confusing where the plot goes. Also, does Animaker really count as animation? Otherwise, I think this could develop into a good funny story.

8

Week

The Magic of Music

The idea is amazing and the music makes it great! The Silence idea was a little unexpected, and I wish it were explained a little more. Otherwise, nice story!

8

Week

Magic lies within the clouds

I love the narration! It is a great idea. I do wish the aspect ratio was better, and it was a bit long, but otherwise awesome story!

8

Week

Dream

I love the idea of the story and how it is presented! I do wish there was music and sound effects, but otherwise it was great.

8

Week

Flora and Fauna

It is a great story, if a depressing one. I also wish you had included a few sound effects, especially for the action scenes? Otherwise, great job.

7

Week

Pixar full story reel

I like the use of both dialogue and narration. I am a little confused that the spirit says it chose to stay there, but then later it instead says the king forced it to stay forever. Otherwise, nice job!

7

Week

Pixar full story reel

I believe Ash was in a car crash given the dialogue at the start.

7

Week

Act 1, 2, & 3

It is a great moral to not be greedy! I do wish this story was longer and had more plot points? Otherwise, great start!

7

Week

Week 7

I like how the story progresses, but I do wish that you made the audio clearer and wrapped up the ending more. Otherwise, good start.

7

Week

Avery & Act 1-3

I really like the moral of this story! I wish the story were clearer- fixing the audio would help.

7

Week

Act 3 for Luna

Thanks for the suggestion, we added a voiceover.

6

Week

Way Home ACT 2

I love the animation and story a lot! The music really adds to it. I would like some narration so the audience knows exactly what is happening and the backstory to why it is happening. Otherwise, nice!

6

Week

Griffin, Willow, and Their Furniture ACT 2

Wonderful drawings! This seems like a really great and intriguing story. It is both funny and creepily mysterious. I am excited to see more.

6

Week

Act 1+2 storyreel.

I like the story a lot, but this seems more like a rough draft of a final product. What I mean by that is it would be nice if you could add a lot more descriptions rather than mostly dialogue. Overall, it was a good start!

6

Week

"Pull" Act 1&2

Maybe you could find another shorter way to describe it or come up with a different, shorter answer, since I had the same question. Otherwise, I really enjoyed this whole story a lot!

6

Week

Jonathon Q. Sniffer; Act 1 and 2

I think this idea is very funny. Some of the pictures look like photos? Are they drawings? If so, incredible work. If not, nice job! I love the moral of the story and it is conveyed in an amusing way.

6

Week

The Story of the Reptilian Vampires Continues

I love the funny story idea! It definitely introduces the characters and setting well. I am curious how George knows so much about the lifestyle of the bat. Did the bat shelter him in its home? What was it? A cave? An actual house? These details could make the plot better. Otherwise, nice job!

5

Week

"Pull" - ACT 1

I love the art a lot! It is insanely good! Even though it is just a storyboard, I really love the cinematography and camera angles! I do not have any suggestions, but this is very amazing!

5

Week

Act 1 Storyboard

I really love this story a lot! I love the researcher element a lot! The turtle must be very confused about everything going on! Has the turtle seen humans before? It would be cool if the turtle has seen human hunters before and associates humans with villains. That would add a great element to the story! I am excited to see more!

5

Week

Jonathon Q. Sniffer: Story Spine.

This is a great story idea, and I love the moral! One mistake is that I believe you did the entire story rather than only act one, which is this week... I am also curious as to why the carrots have something black covering one of their legs in many of the drawings. Is there a reason for this? Otherwise, great job!

5

Week

Aspen's Act 1 Story Reel

I really enjoy these characters all based off of balloons! I did find it a bit unclear about why the balloons were inside another balloon? Maybe you should have explained that earlier, because it is confusing to bring up "he outside" without explaining the balloons were ever inside somewhere. Anyways, I am curious to see the rest!

5

Week

Celeste Act 1 Story Reel

I love the story that the elephant wishes to become queen one day but isn't quite old enough! I found the power at the beginning somewhat unclear and random. Maybe elaborate on that more? Is it just randomly there, or will it play a part later in the story? I am curious to see the end!

5

Week

Act 1 Storyreel

I think that this storyreel really does a great job in revealing the personality of the character! I really like the classic storyline of the shy character using some magical force to overcome bullies in her life. I got the sense that this character was lonely, and I think you could add more ways in the visuals and voiceover to show how this character was disconnected from others. Otherwise, amazing!

4

Week

Story Board

I enjoy the moral of the story that they became friends rather than fight each other! It is much better than the alternative. The story could be a little better if the Native Americans actually taught the cowboy some of their traditions too! Otherwise nice job so far.

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