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Upside Down to Right Side Up - Storyreel Act 1,2,3

Hi MR Creative Productions, Max from Mad Catapult here :) I really like this idea. I think it's original and relatable to people dealing with any form of trauma in their life. I think the script of the story keeps you hooked and I was happy with the resolution. I for one have been in a position where talking about the problem is the most important step to curing it. Something that is missing for me is something that might allude to her past trauma earlier in the film, as I admit that I was a bit confused on what she was going through until I found out she lost her goldfish. Personally I think that the goldfish reveal was a surprising plot twist that I would keep, but maybe you could show why her fish dying turns her upside down 24/7. Maybe it's because she liked looking at her fish in the tank from an upside down angle and that was a special memory to her. I think something like that would share some light on this quirk she has had for so long and her everlasting love for her fallen friend. Great work and can't wait to see the final version!

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Alien Reality TV Show

Hey I love this fantastical wacky idea! I love the dynamic of two opposite siblings teaming up against aliens from across the universe and having to battle an evil reigning champion sponsored by a ripoff cola company xD The only thing that was unclear to me was why Doug became less cynical and Marlowe less naïve from this experience. How does the end result make them change their attitudes all of a sudden if they were both known for these characteristics at the beginning. I think it would be good to add moments for both of them that make them change their attitude when they go up against the reigning champions.

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"Bad Timing" Story Outline

Awww I still love this idea so much! It's just so relatable. The number of times I have thought about this exact scenario and now you've summed it with great character designs and storytelling! I also love the addition of the Madeline character now, to keep an eye on her, in case she changes the future too much.

2 thing that I did notice that were a bit unclear.

How does she find out her life is imperfect when she returns to the present. You see her supposed friends who say they don't know her and you get an idea that maybe she was playing in a band with them, but I think it would have been good if there was a set up for some of the things that she did have in her normal life, shown in the intro, like hobbies, friends, people she's close to.

Lastly, the idea of her seeing the advertisement on tv is a little too public. Is it maybe a secret broadcast for her only, because I think if everyone could change the past, it would make time too unstable. Also, I feel like it needs to feel more personal for her anyway, as if the universe wanted to give HER a second chance or teach her a lesson.

This is such a fascinating concept to which the possibilities are endless. Can't wait to see Act 1!

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Meet W - Week 2 - Character Profile

To answer your question, its always the same person taking on a new character. It's always W. They just always take on a new role every time they take on a new form for their respective kid. It's essentially like an actor doing multiple roles.

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Meet Leslie Zythe

This character really speaks to me! Like hot damn, it's unreal how relatable she is. I'm really interested to see how this story unfolds for her. I think the main thing I'm wondering is what in the past does she regret so much to make her always linger on it. Did she have a lot of traumas that maybe left her self conscious or less confident or did she simply not act enough in certain situations because of her soft personality. I think this will give us more clarity on what defines her now and what she needs to learn from her past mistakes. Can't wait to see the next stage of this story!

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Chap and Chop

Love this idea and the perspective we'll get to see from these two birds of us humans. I also love the dynamic of 2 contrasting brothers working together for a different cause. I'm wondering if we will be told why Chop loves human things so much. Does he want to be more like them or does he just see them as fascinating creatures that are still less developed than his species. The shadow government is an interesting concept that I think leads to a lot of different scenarios in their goal to manipulate the world. I'm assuming they aren't aware that most of Chops information on humans is wrong. I think that could have some humorous results xD

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What if..

My favourite is the magical sword not wanting to fight. I think it's a really amusing concept and theres a lot of potential for a deep relationship between the sword and the knight. I wonder why the sword doesn't want to fight. Does it suffer from a past traumatic event? Maybe it was abandoned and now has PTSD from that.

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What if..

My favourite is what if a magical sword was too afraid to fight. I think it's a really amusing concept and theres a lot of possibilities for a deep relationship between the sword and the knight. The film makes me wonder if the sword had some past traumatic event that made it a coward. Why is it afraid basically. Maybe it was abandoned and now it has PTSD from that.

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What If.

My favourite idea is number 2. I think it opens up a lot of possibilities for the characters journey. This story makes me wonder if he ends up finding a true love despite this fault or whether his fate is already decided. As of now, whats unclear is how do the watches lead you to your true love. Do they tell you a specific time when you meet them or do they act like a compass for finding your true love?

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