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ECHO

I really like the concept for this story, very intriguing! I would love to see more continuous story with this concept! Great job!

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Grandfather Story Reel

The emotions in this story are fantastic! I believe that the silence after the grandfather passes away adds so much depth and importance! Amazing storytelling! Great job!

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Sheldon Takes Flight!

I liked this story, I do believe that there can be some adjustments made to the conclusion of the story to possibly connect to the beginning. Maybe his grandfather teaches him that it's ok that penguins can't fly, because they can do so much else. This could be a great character arc for Sheldon in the story!
Great job on the short film!

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Sheldon Takes Flight!

I really like the art style of this short. The penguin designs are super cute! Nice job!

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Love and Death Full Final

I loved the emotions presented in this! Very strong use of storytelling!

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Pactus Story Spine - Patrick

I really liked the name of the main character, Pactus. Very great name! Also really loved the visuals!
I didn't find anything confusing or unclear at all in your submission.
I would suggest to have the coyote follow Pactus along on his journey. Explore more ideas with why Coyote has the desire to help Pactus. Does he want something out of helping him? Why does he have this strong desire to help? Explore more of his character.

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Forever Turning Jade

I really liked the character designs of this story! The plant people were a very interesting concept, I really like how the forest needs to have balance restored.
I found nothing confusing or unclear within your story, it all makes sense!
What suggestions do you have to make it stronger?
To make this story stronger, I would recommend possibly including another character alongside Jade (Possibly her best friend in her job), who is against helping the plant people. Which brings Jade to have to choose over her friendship or her morals and goodwill. This is just a concept that I recommend because I feel like there should be more conflict revolving around Jade's internal struggles.

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Story Structure - Team Potion Bus

Just added the captions to the description! Hope this helps!

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Character Profile: Wolf and Dragon-Kayla Stith

I really liked the character descriptions! I can really picture the personalities of these characters! Fantastic work!

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What If…

Hello there! My favorite idea was, "What if there were snow people living amongst humans?". I think this could be very interesting to see more in-depth characters and plot lines focused on this concept! I wonder if there would be any conflict at first, and then there would be a resolution of peace between both worlds at the end of the story. Nothing seemed unclear to me! Great job, Sam!

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What If...Lee

Hello there! My favorite idea was "What if a town was one plant?". I really think that you can come up with a lot of stories that revolve around this one scenario! I wonder if there are certain characters that can be included into this concept that add to the story. Nothing seemed unclear to me! Great job!

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My ideas

Hello there! I really like the idea of "What if an insecure teen had speaker ears". I relate to this since I remember the feeling of being a teen that was prone to overstimulation due to loud sounds and noises. I feel like you could have a lot of fun coming up with concepts! Nothing seemed unclear to me! Great job Jordan!

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What if

Hello there! I really liked the idea of "What if the monster under our bed was actually our friend?". I can imagine the monster under the bed being able to connect with a human and become life long friends with them. I think that is such a wonderful, comforting premise! Nothing seemed unclear! Great job!

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Team member name here

Hello there! I really love the stick figure idea. I feel like there is a great opportunity for more story ideas to flow from that single idea! I would love to see more in-depth details about "What if we were our biggest fears". Maybe someone could turn into a clown, since that is their biggest fear. I believe there are a lot of ideas with this concept as well! Great job!

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What if...

Hello there! I was very interested in the ghost college idea! I believe that concept has a great story potential! I also thought that the drinks with different personalities was super cool!

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