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An ode to loss

A very bitter sweet story and beautifully drawn. The music really draws that mourning piece of me. It's great an original piece was written for the story. I hope you're feeling better now and great job to Moon Pie!

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Tyche

I feel very touched by your comment Sally! I aim to be a storyteller, and this means a lot to me.

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The Lonely Fish

Nice music and sound to enhance the story. A very feel good story!

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Snakey the Muddy Snake

Snakey! Very nice moral! I think more worldbuilding can attribute more to the story's atmosphere. Great story.

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Tales From the Amazon - the saga

It's interesting Antonio fights against the evil "Ant" Syndicate. Very good potential for world building, especially why there is a need for heroes and villains!

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Switched Up | Short Animatic

Great story and art! The use of perspective and lighting is very effective. The sounds enhance the story, and there were a lot of hilarious moments. The plot of a bully learning his lesson and being nice to people around him is satisfying.

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Lonely Cowboy

Fun and entertaining! Quite a rebellious outlaw with a cowboy vibe just wanting friends. The story has good structure and great potential!

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Final project

Wonderful music choice that enhances your story. The story told from the perspective of a tree unsatisfied with itself was a compelling concept. The story structure felt complete and real. Beautiful story!

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Weighted

Haha wow the art is amazing! Nice added sound affects to add to the atmosphere, especially the undertale songs. AND THE PINNOCHIO REFERENCE MintyFresh you great person. Hilarious and greatly relatable protagonist.

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Hannah's Story Reel

I love the artstyle and I love the character development. I would love to see more of the world visually and her interaction with classmates after the fact.

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In the forest

I like the art! It's apparent that the main character likes to be outside from the amount of dirty on their clothes and happy content face. Maybe it would help the reader or story to try an add the time of day somewhere or weather?

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Chanting my name

I like the colors and expression, however I'm unsure of the setting. From the description it sounds like Aria is an idol who feels two-faced. To strengthen the drawing to match the description, perhaps have Aria to be in an idol outfit, or make a blurry background of a crowd, or even a spot light on Aria to make her feel pressure.

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Evil within Lisa

It's quite a complex story for what is shown in the art. To make this stronger, maybe you could change the POV from facing Lisa and Selina to looking through the barn window that is crossed out, to perhaps let the reader suspect that the imaginary friend has more presence than we think.

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Week 3

I love the lines you used to direct our attention from the person to the large figure in the back. It's very suspenseful and gives a lot of action. It's amusing how happy the front character is, and is he enjoying this?

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Luna and Thea

The art style is pleasant. It's apparent that these were modern school girls thrust into a new universe, but there is little known about this purple new universe.

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Sammy and Blue

It's a very nice composition with the direction of the light aiming towards Sammy and her friend. It's interesting to see that her imaginary friend has a shadow, so maybe it's not actually imaginary. Maybe they could be building something more distinctive together with legos, like a house or what not if that was the intent.

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The Unluckiest Girl: Tyche "Ty"

Thank you! It's more that she has a literal unlucky curse that was casted on her by a certain someone.

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Xiao The Emotionless Traveler

I love how cute Xiao is, and I like the origin of the mask that was given to him but come to find out his parents didn't care. Is Xiao a child or any specific age? Also what time would this take place in?

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