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Heart Heist

I really like the concept of them joining forces in the end after such a long rivalry. If anything, the biggest thing I find unclear are the motives and reasons as to why they do what they do. I get that they are career criminals, but what them there in the first place? What were their wants and needs? You already know how the ending will be which is a good start, now it's just filling in the details of the characters. I'd maybe try to put them in random (yet realistic) situations and write out what each character would do. Would they make a scene? Would they scope out the area days prior to the act? I hope this helps, and I look forward to how you will unfold the story ^^

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Character Profile - Tagan

I really like the concept of a person meeting a spirit in a coffee shop! To me it sparks a lot of interest and curiosity in how their world works and how they met. There's a lot of inspiration that can be drawn out from various cultures/beliefs as to how/why they were able to meet at such an unlikely place!
Some things that were unclear to me were the setting and how/why they were able to meet. What kind of events took place that allowed them to meet in a coffee shop? I really love how you were able to pinpoint the struggles and obstacles Tagan is going through, and throughout the video it seems like the spirit would also need a character profile as well since they seem to play off of eachother. For Tagan, we know that she has the ability to communicate with the underworld through her magic and "life energies". Do the other people in their world have the ability to use magic and see spirits? Maybe she has a 9-5 job that involves her using magic and her ability to communicate with spirits in the underworld is a unique ability passed down through generations? Can't wait to see what you come up with ^^

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