Our Story

good story

Julio

it needs more sentence to know whats happening in the scences

The Newlydeads

good detail but it was going to fast that i couldn't read the sentence fully

THE PRINCESS AND THE WITCH

I think it needs a little more details

Act 1, 2, and 3

good details, but i think it might need more details on the background

Week 8 coraline hetrick

its a good story but think it needs actual words or a natorator

Week 7

your going to fast, some details dont make a lot of sence

Act 3 for Luna

Good story but i think it would have been better with a voice telling the story, even if you had to use the robot voices u can find on wedsites.

Week 7

good art and i guess good details on the events

Week 7

needa detail on why they were trabeling, and why did he have to kill his brother in order to become leader, is it a custom or somthing else?

Week 7

I think it needs more details on why they left their homes, and how did they get to the point where they were attacking others

Week 7

its a good story has lots of details, but i think it needs a bit of more character develoment

Johns Journey

good idea but why did they move or leave on the journey? and why did they needed to reach oregon city?

2

its a good idea bbut needs detail on where he use to live what was his home like, and what happen to his family that made him move or leave his home

Golden dream

Your idea has a lot of details and is good but i think it need like a little details on the back ground or details on like the town or where he was located.

Jeff and Jack

i think it needs a bit detail on where he found it like the place

Act 1 & 2

What gave him this idea and his a greate idea

Story Xperiential Week 6 Submission

more detail and is good idea

Week 5

is good animation but i think u should narorate whats happening

Week 5

its a nice drawing with lots of details altho i think u should speak louder

Meeting a Friend, Act 1

i like the idea, but can you speack a bit louder?

Ryan

good idea but i think you shoudl add the reason why they would mine like the reason, do they have depth, maybe own some own, or just want ot be rich

Cowboys

its a good story, althought i think it needs more detail on why they needed to get to oregan or why did one get shot

Gold Rush

I think its a good idea but it would go a bit better if you added how many family member he has or give more detail about the place he was mining at

Storyline

I like some of the story line but i think u could have added more into the story like his sons get lost while playing so he thinks they where killed in the attack, but then once hes going to attack and starts the attack he finds them and that leads to a greater character development like the emotions the father felt or his tribe felt.