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E L I X I R

Thank you, Ani! Your comments are taken on count — all the comments really help me for improvement :)

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E L I X I R

Hello, Shayleen! Thank you so much for taking the time to watch my reel and your kind words. :)

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E L I X I R

Thank you, Mark! I appreciate your words. I am glad to hear it was clear and the story came across without dialogue or narrator (that was the challenge for this final submission). :)

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E L I X I R

Thank you so much, Pietro. It means a lot. Grazie mille! :)

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E L I X I R

Thank you, Belen! You did an incredible work on your storyreel :)

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Thank you for the nice words, Varian! I am glad you got to watch it and write your comments. :)

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E L I X I R

Thank you for your comments, Marijke! I will definitely do those improvements on the Mama´s passing and also the plot about the sword (you´re not the first person who tells me this, so I will work on that) Thank you again! :)

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Grandpa & The Machine

Your story is an achievement. I also did my story based on my grandmother (but I reimagined so many things) so I totally relate to where you come from as a writer for this story. :)

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E L I X I R

Thank your for taking the time to watch it and sharing your thoughts. The sword and the elixir both are a source of life-water-energy but they are cursed and the only one who used them positively was Pedro - he used the elixir to bring water back for everyone. The sword is the relic Papa went to find to produce water through rain and save his wife (he failed) and he also used it to defend himself against Lady Death (She was not aware of the sword existence and she was intimidated by the sword) That is the reason why Papa gave the sword to Pedro — he inherited the sword to his son so he could face Lady Death in his quest for the Elixir. The source is the relic of Papa as the Elixir is the relic of Pedro. The quest for the Sword is the anticipation for Pedro´s quest for the Elixir. The sword is the energy that brought Pedro back to life for he was the last former owner. :)

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The Little Apprentice - a rough draft

Great work so far! I think the story has so much potential. You must definitely continue with this project. :)

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Wolf and Dragon

Such a beautiful story. Very well done. The first sequence is just awesome, actually every scene. The art is great, the characters are so appealing and adorable. Everything is so clear and filled with emotion. The family theme is really really moving. Congrats! :)

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SMOKE ME

Amazing job! Every moment is very well developed and the way you tell the story majors every scene. The art really captures the emotion and the music helps so much to the narrative. Congrats! :)

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Toro

Wonderful! The story is awesome and yet so well resolved. The use of color is...WOW! Absolutely love it — it added so much life, emotion and quality to Toro´s journey. The design of the characters is so cute. Great job! Congratulations! :)

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Walk In My Shoes

Such an emotional ride, Julie! Thank you for sharing such a great story and your work is remarkable! I simply adored how you used color to portrait every character. The Mom´s story just touched me. :) Very well done.

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E L I X I R

Thank you, Julie! It certainly was a challenge to make the story understandable without the narrating. :)

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Eternal Jade

Nice job! I really liked the color palette. The story is simple and well done. Finally, I found Jade really appealing and her journey is neat. Congrats! :)

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E L I X I R

Thank you for your comments, Kennedi. Sorry about the level of music, I meant it that way to show musically the "Elixir" theme. :)

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BILLIE'S RITUAL

Great story! There is a lot of ideas and visual I really enjoyed. Well done! :)

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Hart and Brane

Really nice! I like the characters and the world you created. The story about the girl and dad is so moving. Well done. :)

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Love and Death Full Final

Hey, Richard! Really nice done — The theme about life, death and supreme beings is really well developed. My favorite moment still is when she recalls her dad — it makes me wonder so many situations and images about what could have happened. Well done!

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Orion the Brave

This is epic! Really nice work. The graphics is really original and appealing. Every character feels and look so powerful and godlike. It was simple and yet so epic. Congratulations! :)

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Grandpa & The Machine

Hey there, James! Really nice work! The story is so relatable and moving. I really admire how you managed to showcase a timeline so long (We are seeing three generations — which is great) with the correct moments and scenes to fully understand and feel the characters journey. The scene when grandpa comes back and they reflect each other is just awesome. :)

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Cian and the Metaverse * Final Submission *

Hola, Álvaro! Nice job! I really like how you conveyed two moods (the metaverse and the real world). My favorite sequence was the one about his memories — Personally, I like when the story shows the characters in different ages from their lifes. The drawings are clear and the style is great. Keep it up! :)

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E L I X I R

Thank you, James. Yes, I kept the comment about Pedro coming back to Papa with the speed of light and I think it works. Hopefully this story gets developed. :)

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E L I X I R

Gracias, Álvaro! Thank you for the nice words! Yeah, it kinda remind me of Coco too, so I tried to avoid any major coincidence. I like how you did not expect the ending! :)

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