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Back To The Roots

A lot of nice stuff here. Im a little confused on the story, this is how I understand it; Its of a famous musician that wants to play songs that she enjoys, but the producer wants her to play the stuff that is popular. She finds a bar that she cant get out of, until she plays a pop song or she figured out a new tune that the producer likes in the end? But i loved some of the emotion some of these frames provided. Nice job!

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Underwoof goes under the sea

A mostly visual story is hard to do, so nice work! I would have liked to see the whole short without any narration. One thing I found confusing is that the way it was structured, it looked like the dog had no home and was alone. 2 ways I would think of going about this is either showing the dogs family at some point before the end or maybe the dog has no family. Love the structure

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Electra

I love the story! I think something that could add to the story is if maybe Electra had to figure out her way back into the advertisements. Dva meeting a dva is a good idea

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Adam

Beginning and End was my favorite part of the story. However the middle gets a little bit muddy. Nice job making it to the end!

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Oval - Story Spine

A universe in a cats belly is a good hook. I personally thought that this video had a bit too much information for a story spine. Another thing I thought was confusing was why the crime rates went up. It also felt like a bit of a cliff hanger because supposedly the crime rates are still up because nothing had changed when he resigned. I can tell you were really into this story, keep it up!

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Leo`s Story Spine

I like the art and the idea of this story. I'm a bit confused on why he has to escape his home town, are people not allowed to leave the heart? also why does he need to wear a disguise to come into his town? The only other thing I wish was that the tension came to late and was fixed to early. Maybe he breaks the heart sooner and then has to collect treasure to fix it. Overall love the direction

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Week 4

Mr. Schnee!!!!! Love the story. The only two things I wished was that I knew who this cool new mayor was and what kind of disasters ensue when these rules are lifted. The Mayor and the world are very compelling

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Pactus Story Spine - Patrick

Characters and story structure is great! The only thing I didn't connect right away was whether or not Pactus was juggling in the circus, I had to rewatch it again to pick that up. You could word it simply like, "Pactus was inspired by the art of juggling by a juggling". Had all of the ups and lows I love in a story. Keep it up!

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What If-Kayla Stith

The one about hiding underground due to climate change was my favorite. Its unclear on how the animals became intelligent, perhaps they had schools for animals. I wonder how people would react and live in the undergrounds.

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What if...

I love if different planets showed our different choices. Its a bit unclear on how you would portray making a choice then seeing the result of it the. Seeing the result of your other choices. I wonder if it happened to everyone, and if so would the world be completely different?

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What If’s

I like the idea of everyone being a super villain. It was a bit unclear of what a steam punk princess would do. I wonder if since there are only villains in the world, would the standard for heros change?

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Week 1: What If

My favorite was messages from the after life.
It was unclear if the messages were from people In the afterlife, or if the messenger was just delivery letters from around the world.
I wonder what people would write about in the after life.

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What if?

All three are great! I wonder how a mushroom would go about finding some friends. I wonder how the artist would use his abilities. I wonder how people would treat giant mermaids.
Nothing seemed unclear to me

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What ifs?

My favorite was wars being fought in a virtual world. It makes me wonder how you would win a war like that, perhaps they have hacking devices that shut down the server when they reach the enemy base. It was unclear the purpose of why planets would be playing ball. Possibly to settle a bet?

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"What If?" Ideation

Dreams being made by a large company was my favorite. I wonder who the company is and why they are making the dreams. Nothing was unclear to me

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