Act 1 Storyreel

Hi team, love the initial idea of dinosaurs that ended up travelling in time by accident. I found confusing why the T-Rex have telephatic powers. Does each dinosaurs have special abilites that we don´t know? Is a consequences of time travel? Do they have a languege of their own?. I assume the main issue of the sotry is how they are going to coexist with humans, but are they going to try to go back to their time? And how they think the mayor can help them? Really interesting idea, I hope this helps. Good luck

Potion Bus - Act 1

Hi team, I love the idea and the mission that can relate these two characters. I was confused at the end by the montage, how Gerlad´s appearance is repeated. I think you can relate her anxiety with the way she discovers Gerald, maybe she´s an outcast because she thinks nobody will understand her joy with potions or dark arts, but at the end is the only thing that can save the hole town. Also it wold be great if you show Gerald like something that she has troubled with, I don´t know at this point if she´s particularly scared of ghots, but a trouble between them can be interesting. Hope this helps, good luck

Une Masquerade Ridicule - Act 1

Hi team, I really like the main character, is very kind but also mysterious. I love that you story explores Doire in different situations. What I was confused about is why Doire seems so unconfortable with the idea of being the subject of Carolina´s task? Is something in the past that prevent´s Doire of being in such a personal situation with another person? Or is it that Doire hides something in their appearance? I think you can look for a reason and a strong moment when is unavoidable doing th task with Carolina. Hope this helps, good luck

THE SHADOW'S BAZAR, ACT1

Hi Team Capuccino´s, I love the name and the artwork. The character is compelling and the idea of selling shadows is unique, I really like it. I was confused in how a shadows can save a soul, and with what they can but it. Also a lot of times we see shadows in the characters, does each soul loses its shadow for some reason? And what can Zala gain for saving a soul? is some kind of mission to save her own soul? I think you have very interesting ideas but is hard to tie them together. Hope this helps, good luck

ELIXIR - ACT ONE

Hi tema, amazinf artwork and great story too. I´ve always being interested in cursed characters so this story caught my attention a lot. I found confusing what are exactly the rules of the sword of thunder. Does it took the life of whoever us it? or their loved ones? Why Mama dies first and why lady death is intimidated by the sword at the end but not at the beginning?. I Thinks this turning point at the end suggest that Pedor is going to become more active in Act 2 but is unclear what are his interests in Act 1, or is going to be Papa´s story all the way?. Hope this helps, good luck

Act 1 Mona

Hi team Aartvarks. I loved the idea of Mona living in a world where everybody seems to have a destiny exept for her, it´s very relatable and exiting. I found confusing if there´s other people like her, or why this particular actor inspires her so much with his work? Does he do it because he doesn´t have a mark either? or because he imagines a world where no destiny is traced and can only dreams of knowing a person like Mona?. I find that destiny or passion as a theme is really powerful, and I think Mona represents a strong point of view in this theme, but I think the actor´s relationship with the theme can be stronger. I hope this helps, good luck

Une Masquerade Ridicule (The spine of their story)

Hi team. The artwork and music of your story are beautiful, the moral is great and the fact that you show it through a couple of friends is perfect. What´s confusing to me is from who or to whom is the letter Carolina finds in Doire´s apartment, and why is so disturbing to Doire that a friend reads it. I´d suggest to give more action to this part, where for example Carolina assumes what Doire would like to do with a letter like this but Doire is offended, or is hurt, but with a specific action that led to the next event.

Two Witches and a Star

Hi team, I loved the artwork and the imagination of the problem of the story. What´s not clear to me is what happen if they don´t get the star to shine? There´s some danger that they will face if they fail? And why the star suddenly starts to shine? It has something to do with them being kind to each other? If so we should be able to see this transformation in their relation clearly through some gesture or action.

Sheldon Takes Flight

I loved how charming Sheldon is as a character, his desire is so simple but so strong that we can relate inmediatly. What´s confusing to me is where this desire came from and what´s his relation with fish prior to this day. I´d suggest to introduce the fish early in toher way so in the moment where we thinks about it as fuel it doesn´t feel sudden. Maybe you can relate his previous trials with fish as well so the story is contained.

Croxi - Briar and Captain’s Adventure

I loved the artwork and how clear the beginning is, I got confused in the middle by why he couldnt steal the gem, and how he convinces the captain of throwing so easily the stone to the sea. I´d suggest to keep looking for intense actions in this part so for example the kids get injured while trying to steal the geam and this led the captain to realize what´s important. Or maybe an accident caused by the lack of water around, something that keeps us in the situation

Lenny meets Twirl

I loved the moral of this sotry and how you use very relatable circunstances to show it, like the trees and the videogames. What´s confusing to me (seeing how the tree has a face) is how the kid is able to listen to the forest? Is it only by sound and somehow the other kids can´t listen for their videogames? Or is something more magical?. I´d suggest to give your protagonist some other ability or curiosity that makes him able to listen to the nature and to sahre that ability with the rest of the kids, visually.

Grandfather Story Spine

Hi team, I love the drawings and how the grandfather was described. What´s confusing to me is how the actions of the kid are related to the fate of the grandfather, it seems to me right now that they don´t share a lot of circunstances so what happens to them is not as connected as it can be, my suggestion would be to work more their relation and to show how their actions lead to the consequences they experience.

Bean's World

Hi team, this concept is really beautiful, the composition brings calm and a sense of cotidianity to the scene, the lighting suggest a calm day. What´s confusing to me is what is the situation or conflict that we´re looking here, it seems that something is going to happen with the cat in the windows but is not clear. I´d suggest to give a small hint about what can happen in this calm situation so we´re more interested in following the story.

Week 3, by Jiwoo :)

I love the drawing, the character´s expressions are really clear. What´s confusing to me is the location, how the library is organized, I´d guess she is in a high surface among the books but I´m not sure. The unique source of lighting is a great idea, I´d suggest to detail only what the light reveals, so you can leave to the audience imagination what the rest of the library looks like

Facing reality

Hi tema, I love the drawing and the composition, the posing is great and the detail. I´m not sure who is your protagonist, by the amount of details I´d guess is the one in the front, but I´m also not sure what is the gift from his grandmother, is it the knife? I´ll suggest to differentiate clearly the gift, visually, and somehow suggest why it is differente than anything else other characters might have.

The Warblers

The art is bautiful in this concept, It´d be great to see and entire short drawn this way. I love how the props and location help to start the imagination about what they´re getting ready for. For me it´s not clear if they are related in some way for this trip, are they family? friends? colleagues? I´ll suggest to use more elements in color among the different birds, so you can guess groups and maybe different plans between them

MR.BRAIN AND HEART'S WORLD

Hi tema. I love the use of the line and the colors you chose to portray this character, what´s confusing to me is if we´re looking at two characters at the same time, or is some kind of montage in time? It feels like two different settings. My suggestions is to show only one location where the characters are staged clearly.

Lottie’s whole world

Hi team!. I love how most of the image is cold put there´s a small light entrance that gives a little bit of warm and hope to her activity, it feels hopeful and protected. I find confusing if there is something she´s trying to be protected from or if we can see as an audience what "magical" means for her when she reads. I would recommend to use visuals around her to give us a some glimpse into her imagination.

The Diablico Secret

I love how the image reads so clearly using light elements over dark and dark elements over lights, this allows to read very well Liliana and her expression. The expression of the mask is very clear and terryfying, and since Liliana is in the lower part of the frame, smaller than the masks, the fear is real. Great work. The only question I have right now is where this is happening, there´s not enough information about location.

Mush Character Sketch

I loved Mush’s description and motivation, I think it brings a whole world of adventures. What’s unclear to me is if there’s more plants or minerals that can walk an travel to other places. You can build a small society with rules that put Mush in difficult and reflexive situations about the value of places and friends in his/her life. I think it could be stronger if you make Mush’s wish concrete in an object or place that he/she wants to find and reach, something that has huge value in Mush’s life, that can initiate his desire and that the audience can compare to what he/she has left behind

This is Jade

Hi team. I really like Jade’s description, specially that she’s part of a group, because she seems very young and can have very different ideas between a group of also very brilliant scientists. What’s confusing for me is why they care for these plants besides being their subject of work? Do they suffer some accident because of the plant? Do Some of them lost somebody of their family because of these plants? Is their fault to have these plants on earth? I think it could be stronger if you link the crew and the plants in a more emotional way

Zala

Hi team. I loved Zala’s description, she’s mysterious and relatable, what’s confusing to me is what she sells in the market? Is something related with the shadows? Does she sell shadows in a land where few people can afford a shadow? Just some ideas, because I think it would be stronger if you can attach her character arc with her craft or role in the place she lives

Charactrer Profile by Nazish Naqvi

I loved the description of Isaiah and the drawings You chose to describe him, I think that action of asking someone on a date can tell a lot about a character at that age. What confusing to me is what’s their previous relationship. Are they classmates? Or is Isaiah new in this school? He wants to invite her to some specific event?. I think it could be stronger if you choose a specific event that is meaningful to Isaiah in some way.

Meet Kyota & Adrian

I loved the idea of the switched bodies, overall because one is a kind of selfish character and the other one, more like a family person, so you’ll have a lot of opportunities for reflexión in your characters. What’s not clear to me is by what means they managed to switch bodies? Is something external? Or a mischief gone wrong by Kyoto? Maybe a wish that went the wrong way. I suggest you give each one of them a path that crosses somehow, not just by how they look but around what they want

Oscar Character Profile

I love the idea of the “trick” for a dog being related with magic, it unleash my imagination but is confusing to me how this relates to the other dog, it is about the magic? Or about their roles in the family? Maybe you could put the family in a stituation where nothing but a miracle can save them so the magic comes into play.