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Lenny & Twirl

Hello!
I really enjoyed your reel! I really liked how the pace was at a great pace. Something I thought was a little confusing is why they didn't cut down the dried-up trees as well. Is it protected? Other than that I really enjoyed your reel and the number of simple details in your illustrations!

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Snowed In Act 1 (with subtitles)

Hello!
I really liked your illustrations and the different perspective that you added to your video! It was also very well written and pretty clear from start to finish. One thing that I found a little confusing is what major 3 is and its minors. And lastly something that I can suggest is being a little more detailed with your points to help the audiences visualize it more. I really enjoyed your story and I can't wait to see where it will go!

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Act I: Lonely Leo Discovers We Are Not Alone

Hello!
I really enjoyed listening to your story and watching your illustration. I think it was very well written and it was very clear from start to finish. One thing I'm confused about is why the other students avoid Leo. Something I can suggest is adding a different perspective such as for a birdseye view or looking down etc. But other than that, I really enjoyed your video and can't wait to see what Leo will do with this newfound information!

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Act 1 Storyreel

Hi,
I really liked your idea of using dinosaurs and their ability to time travel. Something that I found confusing is how did the dinosaur manage to get a spaceship to travel? Also, do all the dinosaurs have powers or is it just Rex? I also really liked your illustration and can't wait to see where it will go!

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Cornelius - Act One

Hi,
I really enjoyed watching and listening to your story! It was very clear from start to finish. I also really enjoyed the cliffhanger at the ending. Something that I found confusing is how did the Gecko find him and how did he know about this potion to grant him his wish to get his color back? It was really good and I can't wait to see where it goes from here!

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A misunderstood street dog

Hello!
I think your story is very cute and very clear from major events and minor events. One thing I found confusing is what reasons or why is she not accecpted by the humans and other dogs? Something I can suggest is to have it where the ending has a bit more of an idea or understand of what it is that Luanna could be feeling.

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Hero Town Storyline

Hi Mary,
I really enjoyed your story spine! It was very well written! The only thing I was slightly confused about is what encouraged Renee to be the hero of her village? And lastly, what is it that she does that really encourages her people to follow into her foot steps of being their own heros?

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Lumi's Journey

I really enjoyed the story and message that is being told through the pictures. I think what I found confusing was what had happened to her brother or the little boy that was next to her when she was younger. Another thing that I was wondering about was if they had lost their family causing her to be alone in the end. Other than that I really enjoy your story spine and look forward to seeing the final product or where it will go!

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Caelus: Week 2 Character

I really the character design for your character and their goal to get back home. What I find confusing is how he lost his wings and what kind of journey he will go on to get them back. I really your character his background and I can't wait to see more of him!

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Mush Character Sketch

I really like the character design and the characteristics of Mush. Something I find confusing is how Mush will overcome these insecurities. Something that I suggest to make it stronger is adding other friends to help Mush overcome his insecurities.

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What If? - Emma Gamboa

Hello Emma! I really liked your "what if" ideas and out of all three, the last one sparked my interest. I really like the idea of parents being able to build their perfect child because it kinda reminds me of how kids want to meet their parents' expectations of them. It also reminds us of how some parents like to compare their kids to others making them feel as though maybe they are not to their parents' standard making us believe that if our parents want such a perfect child they should just build it themselves. It also makes us wonder, if parents were able to or had the ability to build their perfect child why are they so unhappy with their child being perfect? What changed their minds about having a perfect child? And lastly, something that was a little unclear is the idea of "building" a perfect child. Would that be like a robot or many a life-like android that looks human? What would the procedure look like? Other than that, I really enjoyed your ideas and can't wait to see how you flesh them out!

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What ifs - click me!

Out of all 3 of these amazing ideas, the third really sparked my interest. I really liked your What If idea about how one person is chosen to go through this challenge that can possibly give them a lot of pressure to win or to be the best because it makes you wonder what happened if you were to lose. What would happen to humanity? And would it be the end for humanity? Lastly, I think the only thing I was curious about or I found unclear is the idea of us knowing there are aliens out there. Meaning, were we already aware of their kind or how did we discover their existence.

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