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Toro

The colors and draftsmanship are amazing, your sense of color theory is wonderful. I said this before but I think that it's interesting having a more antagonistic protagonist who learns something. Great work!

8

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Worked Like A Dog

Slick title introduction, your boarding skills are great. I vibe with Collie immensely as someone who has trouble saying no. Someone else already mentioned this but I think you can go back an edit that area where the audio is missing. The boards are well enough for me to parse what's happening though so great all around.

8

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Samson, the magical sword.

This was fun seeing the development of. The use of music and sound effects work well. Though the "third act break up" came a bit quick to me, I like the development of both characters. The art is really nice too. Good job!

8

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The heart of the mountain

I loved this! Your use of sfx and music really worked with each scene. The storyboarding was great as well and the story itself only got more and more interesting as it went on. Awesome work!

8

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Skyfellers: Tales from Chusetts' Ranch

Really enjoyed the use of sfx and voice acting. I found the visuals to be pretty clear. All the character personalities are very distinct and they bounce off each other well, I like Al a lot. I very much vibe with Chase too. And as a side note, I appreciate the trans and polyamorous rep.

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Wolf and Dragon- Acts 1, 2, & 3- Kayla Stith

Thank you! Wild wolf packs tend to consist of a main pair + their offspring say for a few others. So that kind of general, small family pack was the idea I had in mind. Smilodons are more often known as saber tooth cats. They lived during prehistoric times in the Americas. It's a real creature, but all we have left are fossils of various species. I like the idea of adding color, hopefully If I have time I can add a few splash pages to show what they look like.

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Wolf and Dragon- Act 1 & 2- Kayla Stith

Thanks. This was originally supposed to be silent and all the characters are non speaking, so the naming thing is just for recognition's sake. But she's named that because pitaya is the Spanish word for dragon fruit, which her design is based off of. There's a visual cue, it's just small. If you look closely, Lobo's marking under his face goes passed his nose now. And they eyes are slightly more baggy, but I can make that more apparent.

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Wolf and Dragon- Act 1- Kayla Stith

Thanks Alia. Yeah I should’ve worn my headphones when listening back. I tried to lower the decibels but I’ll keep that in mind. Thanks for the feedback.

5

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The Magical Sword to afraid to fight - Act 1 Minor beats

Love the board work, lots of strong drawings. I think everything was clearly conveyed. I think for me personally I liked having a female character since it was a nice change of pace from the typical trope of a boy finding a sword. Girls have conflicts and bullies too but whatever works best for you is fine.

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Wolf and Dragon Story Spine-Kayla Stith

Thanks! All of my socials, twitter, instagram, etc, are under my username SEGAmastergirl. Some of what you said will be expanded upon in the Act one video. The setting is a very dense jungle so trying to find an egg in there would be like trying to find a needle in a haystack. As far as proximity, the dragons live close by but not close enough for Lobo to travel. At least not without falling several heights, which wouldn't be ideal. Despite their size dragons are fairly elusive. The mother dragon in this case, separated from her group to raise her young(think lionesses or other social animals). A lot of this is background info for the most part so I think for the sake of the story I'm keeping the more relevant information to the forefront. But this gives me something to think about nonetheless, thanks again.

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Wolf and Dragon Story Spine-Kayla Stith

Thank you! I definitely plan on showing the lost egg. I'm also a sucker for dragons and wolves.

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Wolf and Dragon Story Spine-Kayla Stith

Thanks! For your first question, I guess gaging animal years to human years that'd be fairly accurate age range. Smilodons are better known as saber tooth cats so they're two completely different species. Lobo is a dire wolf specifically. The setting is prehistoric with some fantasy elements. Lobo had a family at one point, the details I plan to explore in the story beats of act 2.

4

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Croxi - Briar and Captain’s Adventure

This idea is so fun and the setting is very imaginative. I'd like to know the extent of Briar and the Captain's friendship so that it's clearer as to why the Captain would give up the treasure later on. As well as what would be convincing enough to make the Captain realize that their friendship and situation is more important.

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Cowboy Predicament

I think the story sets itself up to have all three characters improve in some way. Rarely often in stories are we expected to sympathize with antagonistic protagonists. I see Mel and Chase have their own moments but not for Al, maybe both Mel and Al can be in on controlling while Chase is the outlier. And with the skyfeller returning, I can only really see it trusting Chase. Perhaps the other two would have to work harder to gain his trust? I appreciate the moral of returning kindness.

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Worked Like A Dog - Story Spine

Love Collie and the setting. I think the only thing I see missing is the moral at the end. There's not a fully distinct conclusion and I was left wondering what she would do with her work life after the festival. I can see the theme of leaving an abusive workplace and not putting up with it. But I think for that ending could also be a theme of living life in the moment. Perhaps more emphasis can be placed on why going to the festival with her friends is so important to her. Love the art too btw.

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Wolf and Dragon Story Spine-Kayla Stith

I actually have her questioning her relation to Lobo in mind as we get more into the details of each act but I wasn't sure to put that here or if it would have overloaded it. Thanks for the feedback.

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Marin: A new friend, perhaps?

Love the composition, and the hints of character detail too. Like the clippers in the neighbor's hand, and possibly leaves coming out of the hair too? Must've just got done trimming some hedges. The hint of blue on the eyes is a nice touch as well.

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Galaxia

I saw the tardigrade and rushed over, I love those things. The imagery is clear to me and doesn't require background information. I guess my only critique is that I'm seeing more space than time in this image. My suggestion would be to throw some clocks or a sundial in there.

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Mel the Bee

I love the theming and messaging, feels very relevant. And the use of bees, honey, and bears ties very well to the theme of workplace abuse, as well as the generational gap. I'd like to know why Mel specifically can tell it's a bear and no one else can? If that's relevant at all. Mel's design definately comes off as someone who, because of his introverted nature, spends more time gaining knowledge so maybe that's a way. Love this idea, can't wait to see where it goes.

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Character Profile: Wolf and Dragon-Kayla Stith

Can you specify what you didn't find clear? Just for reference.

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Leo

This sounds fun, I'd like to see what kind of people he'd meet along the way. Does have ways of protecting himself in these dangerous areas? Also, what is his goal? Is it adventuring for adventure's sake? Or could it be a moment to moment type of motivation? Nice art too.

2

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Love and Death

I like the set up and potential conflict, also that Angel for Death seraphim like design is great. I'd like to see how that romance would play out and if the angel would sacrifice his immortality or not.

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Rocky

I love animal stories so I gravitated to this immediately. I like that Rocky is an adult character and his journey hinges on him finding his wild and unborn child. Most animal stories in this nature tend to focus on child or teenage ones for the most part. I'd like to see what obstacles he'd face on his journey to finding his family, especially if they're related to his growth of becoming a father.

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Character Profile: PEDRO by Francisco González

Love the art, and the set up for a classic hero's journey structure. I'd like to see how death as a whole would be characterized. Would trying to escape it be a fruitless endeavor that Pedro just has to accept or not? Would this journey cause Pedro to become more independent and realize his qualities beyond being just like his father? I like the setup.

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Caelus: Week 2 Character

I love a good name reference. I like the theming/ message around getting help from others. I wonder how he lost his wings and how that might effect his day to day life now that he's without them.

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