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Omen, The Black Cat

This such a cute and lovely story, loved how you expressed every frame and how they where laid out! I'm just curios but by any chance does the magic woman has a name?

8

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The Little Apprentice - a rough draft

I really love how the story showed us everything without using words. And really like the reason why the dad changed was because he remember he also started once too. <3

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Leo and the StarWorks

Hi really like this story, love that the alien is the one creating starts, and the design that holds the stars is like a light bulb. The only suggestion would be that when Leo is giving the first presentation maybe at some point have a close up of his face sweating or looking away so we are able too see how uncomfortable he truly is. This was a fun story!

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Mixiote and Lili

I really like the idea of the cats having a secret organization hopefully Liliana will still love her cat by the end of this! Hope to see where the story goes from here.

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Dream of Courage

I really love this story and the character design! I really love the build up of Rugulas breakdown, so the viewer feel stress with her.

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love

This is a very cute concept. My only suggestion would be that when they are transforming into a heart maybe the black shape also goes forward towards the heart, so it feels more like both of them want this, and not that only one is consuming the other. Really love the music for the piece.

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Majestic Story Reel

I really like the idea of the buildings been alive and that they created relationship with the crows. I find it a bit confusing why did the crows felt like helping the majestic, and what happens when their is no one performing does she re-plays an old performance? You have lovely drawings and story hope to see more!

7

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Cian and the Metaverse (Act 1, 2 & 3)

I really like the world building and the robots character design and personalities. I find it a bit confusing how he gets food? I find it a bit unclear waas his sister missing or they just haven't seen each other in years? Maybe a suggestion would be for him to have a stronger reaction to the family photo. Still great story!

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Marin- Acts 1-3

I really like the concept of the curse turns you to shapeshift. The only thing i find a bit unclear is was he a man or they at the beginning and then turn into female? And ultimetly decided not to go back to his/her/they wife? I really like the story, character design and story. Love the scene that only an eye pops to look Marin.

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The Shadow Bazar ACT 1-3

Love the characters and the world it looks so cool! I find it a bit unclear how did Zala end up in the bazar. The only suggestion i could think of maybe make the bazar have more appealing things not only for the clients but for the merchants that sell to the people that go by. I really like this story is very cute and love the ending <3! all the drawing are so cute!

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ELIXIR - STORY SPINE

WOOOOW this is so cool!!
I love it so much! The story, drawings, the scenes, everything is super fun story.
The only thing I find unclear, is in the scene when lady death arrives at papa with the rod sword and breaks it, if she really wanted to kill papa she would have more than enough time before Pedro arrives, no?
Maybe my only suggestion would be maybe add a reason why papa turn greedy, and would like to see the mom and dad relationship a bit more.
Still this is soo awesomeee!!!!!

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Escape From Channel 52

I really love this idea, and looooved the ending that last drawing made me laugh so much. I find it a bit confusing how they are using the same tv and not been sucked back in by accident, or if they changed the remote. Maybe a suggestion could be that his sister made that remote for the science experiential show(instead of the normal tv remote) maybe that way it could explain why he was sucked in time and never again.

7

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Lottie’s whole story

I really like the idea of been left behind even do the parents don't want it too and also is very clear all of the frames. I find it a bit unclear of what will happen to her, does she stays with his father otter? Maybe as a suggest could be that she could still speak with her father, even do he is an otter and she is human.

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Future Selves

I love that parent was a job option. I find it a bit unclear if Pip decides to drops out or which study he will start with? Also I find a bit unclear what happens to all the Pips did they go back or just started living with Pip? I really like how all the turns in this story it seem a very fun one.

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Act 1&2

I really like this story and where is going. I find a bit confusion how did the alchemist friend new what's up with them only by looking at them and also did neither of them has any friend or companion that could help him get back Koyotas body? Maybe a suggestion to make it stronger would be to make Koyota to look at himself in a reflection so he starts believing what Adrian is saying and that way he can be sure he is not going crazy. Is looking great :D

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Act 1 & 2 Aria

I really like where this story is going! I find how you have showed the story to be very clear and entertaining. Maybe I'm just been dumb but maybe a suggestion would be changing the name of Bruno to another name I kept thinking of the movie encanto and we don't talk about Bruno. I'm curios to learn how the flee that place, but I'll have to find out in act 3!

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Eternal Jade Acts

I really like the idea of this story, how they transform to be part of the forest and protect it. How did they find out about this plant, and why is this plant so importer for Jade to the point of ignoring the research team and venture the forest alone. Also if the Villagers left so long ago how are their home still intact if they don't live there anymore. I'm also curios what happen to the rest of the researchers did they just didn't care what happened to Jade? My suggestion maybe would be to make it stronger reason at the beginning why would Jade would do anything to get this plant, maybe to safe someone, or someone who died in his hand and didn't want to loose any body else, or maybe he has been studying this natives history for his whole live and even do it has been century since they last left anything in writing they kept talking that this plant will show the way of the righteous person.

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The Antique Store - Acts 1 & 2

I really love the story is a very fun concept! The only thing i found a bit unclear was the book club, was it a ghost book club? My only suggestion would be to maybe have or a ghost behind the counter, or a ghost you can see behind the compact mirror so we could experience with Emily the disappearing of the ghost.

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Liliana act 1 & 2

Thanks Manuela!

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Hero Town Act 1

I really like the world building of how the creatures are extinct and the heroes just end up not appearing because they aren't needed. I find it a bit unclear why no one had a phone or some type of communication with the hero other than when they would randomly appear to help? Also are there no police in this world? I love that the images are super clear and it looks like a fun story I wonder how would it evolve.

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Act 1 Pre-boarding

Sorry to hear you are very busy. I went back and understood they somehow end up in the same body because someone stills his body. I thought we would find out at the same time the pirate found out his body was stolen, which in my opinion would be way more impactful to find out this mystery later with the pirate than in the beginning. A suggestion would be even try making a small voice recording explaining a lil bit of what is going in the story, so we can fill in what pieces are missing. This looks like a good story hope to see more!

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Heart Heist Act 1

I love that maybe the crime lord might be a wooooman or binary person! I really like the idea that they practically have total control of the whole area. I find it a bit confusing if the rookie is a rookie how did he find it that the crime lord was behind it when usually not even FBI or police know when is the crime lords faults. Maybe a suggestion would be that maybe the crime lord would be to cocky to hide and tells him, to back off his territory while its his he wont be able to touch anyone here.

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act 1 - Piper

I really like the idea that the chinchilla wanna be a star. I find it a bit unclear of how the cat will close the window before the chinchillas notice, is it a smart window or something? And wouldn't the owner think the cat ate the chinchilla if they arrive home and there are no chinchilla at home? Maybe as a suggestion would be to use a different type of window like a awning window with a cord attach that he could pull quickly and the window closes. This story looks fun and can go in so many directions!

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Meet Stella the Rebella

I really like the idea of a woman type creature having such a strong conviction of taking what she wants. Is a bit unclear to me( maybe we find out in the next acts) is she is like a monster made from all clothe of the mall? Also is a bit unclear of where the story would be heading from here. Maybe a suggestion could be why she likes candy so much, or is it something she needs?

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Western District

I really like the districts kind of universe and how different from each other each could be. I find it a bit unclear, does Flint son dead? If so did he died doing heist? Maybe something fun could be that Breston doesn't want flint around, but still sticks around despite he blatantly not wanting him there.

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