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Underwoof goes under the sea

I think your idea is a very adventurous one that is very intriguing. The audio and the boards mix very well with one another.

8

Week

SMOKE ME

Congratulations! Your team did such a wonderful job with this story. Your boards are fantastic, the audio fits so well, and the editing is spot on. Although there are times when I feel like the narration is not needed, it certainly does not take away from your story. A well rounded story all around. I love it. Wonderful job!

8

Week

A Pirate's Treasure

I think you did very well with your story, boards, and audio. It is very magical and mystical and goes well with the world you’ve created. Wonderful job!

8

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The Antique Store

I thing the idea of having a antique shop owner be able to see the dead is very unique. Your boards, acting, and sound effects are great. I am slightly confused at the end on how she is able to see the ghosts again. Overall, good work!

8

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The heart of the mountain

I think you’ve created a wonderful story that is just as adventurous as the main character. Your choice in audio, music, and fx is great and you have very good editing skills. I think the theme you chose is a good teaching lesson. Overall a very good story. Congratulations!

7

Week

Croxi - Act 1, 2 and 3

Great boards and great story. I think the only things I am confused about would be why the water getting close to the captain and the sibling seeing it isn't as big of an issue to them. If someone saw water almost looking like they were gonna get grabbed, wouldn't they freak out. I also feel like I might not be catching the significance of the family photo. I think it shows a time when the siblings used to like to be around each other, but if that was the case, why would she be so sad to see it when she finds it on the floor. It makes me feel like there's a bigger idea about the photo that I'm not getting. I think if the photo was expanded on more it could make the piece stronger. If the sibling's relationship was given more backstory about why the captain is the way she is with the brother, then it could add a more intense reason for their interactions.

7

Week

ELIXIR - STORY SPINE

I love your boards, the story, and your choice of music. It fits very well with the story. I think you did a wonderful job with capturing the audience's attention and emotion. I think you really hit the theme on the nail with this one. I have no suggestions. Great job!

7

Week

+act 3

I love that your drawings tell the story well with their minimalistic designs. I am confused as to why Zo is so adamant on getting her job back if, I recall, she wasn't having such a good time there as she thought she would. I almost feel like the fact that Zo originally works in a supermarket doesn't need to be in the story if it isn't really shown to be that relevant at the end. The monster wreaking havoc and the events in the beginning of act 3 almost seem like part of act 2, where all the conflict and stuff happens. I would suggest maybe starting the story off with her already working the job and kind of being miserable about it but then, as she comes to meet this creature and understands it, she can find a new way to enjoy her work.

7

Week

Wolf and Dragon- Acts 1, 2, & 3- Kayla Stith

I think the way you ended the story is excellent. The way you call back before about Lubo losing his family and now he has gained a whole new one makes me happy. It really feels like its not just Pitaya's family, but Lobo's as well. Nothing is unclear or confusing. To be honest, I don't have any suggestions to make it stronger. Your story is already strong and you did a wonderful job.

7

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Act 1, 2, 3 Storyreel

Love to see how the story finished. Nothing is confusing or unclear. A suggestion I would make would maybe be showing Toro apologizing to the rocks he made fun of from the bottom. That way his redemption rock comes full circle.

7

Week

Smoke Me - A Cigarette in Love

First off, wonderful BEAUTIFUL BOARDS! Your use of composition and lighting is amazing. Your story, as well, flows so smoothly. Nothing seems unclear. Your decision on when to narrate is perfect. If I had to suggest anything, I think I would say that maybe, when the cigarette wakes up in the photo frame, the woman could be shown living a better life. Or maybe she can have a party to commemorate her quitting smoking. Just so the cigarette can see that the decision he made was worth it to see her happy.

6

Week

SMOKE ME

I think your story has an important message to tell and that your boards to a great job telling it. Nothing seems confusing or unclear. I would suggest maybe adding a scene where the girl's use of cigarettes are finally getting to her. Like maybe she gets out of breath more or she starts to cough more. Something to show the little Cigarette that the anti-smoking commercial did not lie.

6

Week

Act 1 & 2 Storyreel

I am here for the Toro redemption story! Love your story, love the art! Nothing is confusing or unclear. If I had to suggest anything, and it doesn't necessarily need to done, I would say have there be some build up before Toro has his fall into the river. It almost seems sudden. Like he begrudgingly gets help to getting saved and changing his ways. Its very straight forward and Toro doesn't really earn the self reflection he gets after one accident. Maybe the build up could be that slowly learns that rocks at the bottom aren't beneath him. He has to somehow get out of the mentality that he is better than everyone.

6

Week

Wolf and Dragon- Act 1 & 2- Kayla Stith

I think your story is very strong and you've done a wonderful job with your ACT 1 and ACT 2. The boards read very well and nothing seems unclear or confusing. There isn't a boring moment. What I would suggest, though, is to maybe cut down the amount of times that Pitaya wonders off. It happens about 3 to 4 times and it almost seems like it isn't exactly necessary to separate the two so much. I feel like they spend more time away from each other than on screen together. It almost separates the two and makes me feel like they aren't that close to each other.

6

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Snowed In Act 2

I love your story. It sort of feels like the Climax of ACT 2 is already solved though. I am kind of confused as to why everyone would start arguing when the snow in isn't something that anybody could have controlled. If you would want to have them arguing, I would suggest that one of the friends be like, "I thought you said you checked the weather report?" And then it starts to snowball into a blame game. That way its like a miscommunication that causes them to start fighting.

6

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Croxi - Act 1 and 2

Excellent idea of not using audio. Your boards actions speak for themselves and its very engaging story. I think the only unclear scene would be as to why Briar is looking at a photo of their family at a time when they are stuck. Cuz I know they are with their sister but what about the picture is important in that moment. I would suggest, if Briar is going to be looking at any picture, it would be one of just the Captain and them. Because its shown throughout that the Captain is kind of annoyed that Briar is there so what if Briar looks at a picture of when they use to get along?

6

Week

Bean. Act 1 and 2

I would first like to say that I absolutely love your story so far. It is very heartwarming and makes me really want to root for Bean. Nothing is confusing and I have nothing to suggest to make it better. Keep up the wonderful work!

5

Week

Act 1

I love your storyboards. They tell the story so well. I think you have a very adventurous story. I am a bit confused as to how these kids are able to invent all these things and where they get the materials for them. Seeing them the whole time on a tropical beach makes me wonder if they are by themselves or there are places out there that they can find these tools. I suggest that you build upon how these kids are master inventors and where they find the materials and tools to build things.

5

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Snowed In Act 1 (with subtitles)

This sounds like a very fun story. I love that your tackling something that most people don't think about but when it happens to you, OH BOI, its wild. Nothing seems unclear to me. If I had to suggest something, I would suggest having the snow storm be foreshadowed while Antalya is trying to get ready for her trip with her friends. Like make it a background thing that is noticeable but also able to be overlooked. That way the audience can anticipate what is about to happen to Antalya and her friends.

5

Week

Act 1

I think your story is very relatable and your drawings do a great job of telling it. What I feel is unclear is what specifically the art department is. Its not really shown what type of art she does before she gets the job and I feel like if we saw what type of art she is into, it would explain it.

5

Week

Act One Storyreel

I love your story and how much it has progressed. The artwork gives your story a distinct style that coincided with the main character. Nothing is confusing. Keep up the great work!

5

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ELIXIR - ACT ONE

I love your strong story telling and your boards. I'm a bit confused as to why MAMA died when PAPA was the one who used the sword when it states that it 'took your life energy' insinuating it takes the user's energy.

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Wolf and Dragon- Act 1- Kayla Stith

Your story coupled with your boards makes for a real strong Act 1. Wonderful job! It seems like a story that I can definitely see on the big screen. Nothing is unclear or confusing. Honestly, I wouldn't change a thing of what you have here. Great work!

5

Week

Cian and the Metaverse

I think your Act 1 is very strong for your story. The build up is great and you do a good job of explaining the world as we should know it. It makes me feel curious as to why the metaverse machine stops. Nothing is confusing, everything seems clear. I think the only thing that can be worked on would be the boards.

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Worked Like A Dog - Story Spine

Thank you for the feedback! I was definitely having a hard time trying to figure out how to smoothly make the job quitting seem worth it. The idea of being able to meet someone that would be able to change Collie's career path is a great idea.

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