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Monachopsis

Hi! I love the theme of your story and your drawings are amazing!
I will suggest you to be simplier in the explanation and leave more space to the drawing.
It s a very great work, inspiring and very impartant, :)!

8

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Omen, The Black Cat

Hi Melissa, the idea of the story is very cool.
I will suggest you to be more quick in your storytelling and focus more on the key moment of the story to engage better with your audience.
Great work tough, I like the drawing, maybe try to add more composition in your frame sometimes, :)!

5

Week

Alien Reality TV show

I love it!
That's the best couple for adventures! It really seem a concept for a 2d show, I can't wait to see what adventure are waiting them! :)!
Great Job!

5

Week

Cornelius - Act One

Cool, I really like the concept of the story!
Did cornelius loses his power because he gave to much for others, like if every gift had a color of himself!
look forward to see your next act, great job!

5

Week

Leo´s Act 1

Hi!
I love the giant's intro, it's amazing, I would love see more about the heart/city relation, like you showed in the story spine,
I'm a bit confused about leo that needed a mentor, I think the story spine was more clear about his journey.
I can't wait to see more of leo's adventures with the giant, maybe at the end they could travel together, :)!

5

Week

Love and Death Act 1

I love that the angel loses it's inspiration and became the classic death,
I hope to see more funny gag like the man that fall from the wall, XD!

5

Week

Snowed In Act 1 (with subtitles)

Hi!
I love your drawings and that every character has his own color.
The story it's very clear, I think it could be stronger if you show Antalya room when you talk about how much she care about her friend, maybe showing pictures and let us as understand who are them (like what do they like to do togheter ).
Great work, I can't wait to see the airport adventure now, :)!

5

Week

Act One Storyreel

I love your story, great ideas, simple and clear, :)!
I would love to see how Toro react to the fact that he felt bigger only because he was far from the other rocks!
Very, very great work, I can't wait to see more!

5

Week

THE SHADOW'S BAZAR, ACT1

Thank you very much Richard for your feedback.
I think you have a good point suggesting to start from the lost soul, we are having some hard time to understand how to make the story more clear, your idea can really help, :)!

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Week

Alien Reality TV Show

Very cool, I would love to see an animated tv show with this idea!
The only thing I'm a bit confused it's the moral, i really do love them the way they are, maybe they can simply learn how to collaborate and accecpt the sibling as they are, in their own unique madness!
Love it!!!

4

Week

Leo`s Story Spine

I love it, your voice it's the best!
I love the moral, the only thing I was confused of it's if then the heart was still like the begin or if people stop to ask him favour and start to live them passion instead.
I can wait to see more, :)!

4

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Love and Death Story Spine

Hi! I like the main theme of your story, especially the moral.
I'm a bit confused about the death turning into an angel, couldn't he help the doctor as a death too?
At the end he could have been so inspired by the doctor that he change it's way to be a death maybe
and when she die he could turn the doctor in a death assistant too!
It's just an idea, I like the dark feeling in your story, :)!

4

Week

Snow Days Story Spine

Very cool and true, I love it.
I think could be stronger if you add just a little something, like that they are friend since they were little and now things are changing, they're growing up and choosing different path in life, but no matter what, friendship it's not about what you do in your life, but to have fun together, :)!
It's just an idea, your story it's great and simple as friendship is, <3!

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