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Final story reel

The story concept of a dinosaur time travelling to deal with humans today is interesting. I need to see more of story conflict, plot, and character development to really connect more to this story.

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SMOKE ME

I really like the concept of this story-- how a wish turned into a cigarette, and it ended up as the LAST cigarette. I'm unclear about the role of the cigarette-- how did it "help" Maria quit? But if fleshed out more, this has a HUGE potential to be a wonderful animation!

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Orion the Brave

I think it's a fantastic idea with the constellations/characters working to protect or destroy Earth. The story is hard to follow without captions.

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Adam

The restaurant part was unexpected. I thought he would be drawing or creating stories. But, this is a story with potential -- touches on a contemporary theme for many young people wondering what they should do, or what they could become. This is a rite of passage story, a transitional story-- what this story lacks is something big, conflicting for Adam. Need to expand on how the restaurant journey came into place.

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Wolf and Dragon

I think this story has a lot of potential. The animatics are great, and this reminds me of many orphan stories -- but this is pretty unique. I've never heard of a wolf and a dragon together.

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Toro

This story is really great-- the illustrations are amazing, vivid, and carries so much emotion. The plot, the pacing, the flow of this story is wonderful-- I love the lesson Toro learned. One thing though- it's hard to sympathize with Toro. It's like he deserved being chucked out to the bottom. If there is something to hint why Toro loves the top, the surface, maybe that makes us connect stronger to Toro.

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What if Project

I like the idea of entering your favorite show. I think all of us have thought that at some point--- would it be as a character or as a cast member? I think you could explore that idea further-- and especially with which genre the show is in.

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What if?

I think it's a fun idea to have a flying wheelchair. It's like having your own drone/airplane. Will it be a secret flying wheelchair or is it widely known? I'm curious to see that develop more!

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The Best Ideas Ever

I love the idea of raindrops remembering where they have been; you could span time and history. If they are "old" raindrops, they could have rained on William Shakespeare's outdoor play once, they could have rained on a war, or they could have rained on two romantic couple. I think if they are part of a cycle but still can go back to the beginning, as clouds/rainstorms, and move on to the next place-- it will be interesting. Also- if they can remember everything, what happens when they rain on something or someone they remember?

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what if

I love the boy with allergies to cats ending up in a cat's body-- that seems the most intriguing idea to me. How will the boy/cat behave? How will boy/cat respond to allergies? It's like you're allergic to yourself- that would make a very interesting story!

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