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Character Design

What a concept! Sakura's goal of curing herself from becoming a cake is something that allows for such interesting storytelling. I would go into more personal details for Sakura and a bit more character detail.

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Kahlani Character Profile

Such a concept and story! Kahlani is well developed as a character and has such a well defined narrative arc. Something to help drive Kahlani's story further is detailing memories or past experiences of Kahlani with their gadgets or wits. Again, unique character, can't wait for more!

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The Districts

Great character identify with Rusty! Something to think about more is why does Rusty want world peace? Is there something from his past that can lead up to why he is doing this right now? Maybe think about how unity begins? In his neighborhood, in a country or anything in between? Would love to see more from Rusty and his mission!

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Meet 107

This is a great start to the project! I think the file may have been cut short, but it looks like you have already set up the stage for 107 as the main focus. It looked like you were going into some anecdotes for 107, and getting more in-depth can give 107 more direction and background. Again, great start, excited to hear more about 107

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Naomi

Great character introduction! Love the detail into Naomi and also what holds her back. For further character development, maybe even pointing out things like the specific flowers in her hair, or where she is from to further drive Naomi's presence. Also thinking about what holds her back, is there a place or people where she commonly gets microaggressions from. The lesson of adversity building strength is a great story to continue building, can't wait for more!

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“Self Help”

Well thought out! The breakdown and structure of storyline makes this articulated strongly for next steps! Something to think about more is defining specific terms and trying to craft more imagery into the minds of the viewers, like when you mention everybody else, who are those? What does making an impact look like? Is there situations that show how these characters got to this point. The climax of realizing they are worthy of self care is such a great theme and excited to see more to come!

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character profile

This is amazing, I love the duo narrative this takes on Jay and Patch, something that would help is defining what would be a successful career? Is there experiences that you can think about for Jay and Patch? And for future reference, how will they learn hard work and dedication, what is the direct challenge they will do? Again, this narrative is creative and gives plenty of room to work with!

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