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Wolf and Dragon

You have such an amazing story and the drawings have so much emotions and thought to them. Love it!

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Indigo Kid

Your submission is for sure one that stands out with the 3D animations. I think you have a clear story that you want to portray however I think that there's a lot of side details that can be edited out and that would totally help with the length too! I think that it's important to remember that if it doesn't help the story move forward, then its better not to include it because just making it longer doesn't always make it better. You have the foundation there, it just needs a good editing!

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The Potion Shop

The story is cute and nice. I like how she gained her confidence and she kept doubting herself. The chemistry between the 2 was a nice contrast too.

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SMOKE ME

The story is really cute and I like the added music. There's a nice flow to the overall arch of the story and a nice up and down of emotions. Love the art and storyboards. Awesome work!

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Samson, the magical sword.

I really like how you carried the story through and how it looks now! Everything flows smoothly and I love the interaction and character development between the 2. Awesome work!

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Dreams Storyreel

It's really interesting the way you took the story and changed it compared to last time. I think its cool the way she found out about her new opportunity but I wonder if she ever found what she was looking for. There's def room to push the story but you have an interesting foundation for sure!

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Sam’s Acts 1 Through 3

I like how you narrowed down the story to be more clear and kept the story moving forward. Awesome work there!

7

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Samson the magical Sword - Storyreel

I really like how you narrowed down and made a nice focus to your story and a small world. It's a lot more clear! Awesome job!

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The Indigo Kid

I think you have a lot of ideas here. I think it would really help to cut a lot of unnecessary parts and try to focus on moving the story forward and I also think that would help with the time length too! The 3D models look cool but I think its more important to have a really clear story so it's easy to understand as a whole picture. You're almost there!

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Croxi - Act 1, 2 and 3

I really like where you took the story and I can really feel the character's personality and chemistry. It would have been nice to have some audio or voice over but overall nice drawings!

7

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Smoke Me - A Cigarette in Love

I think its really cute how you ended the story! I think it would be nice to have some connection from him falling to him on the wall. What was her reaction? Overall awesome story telling to a cute story!

7

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Wolf and Dragon- Acts 1, 2, & 3- Kayla Stith

I really love how the story unfolds itself and gives a reason for every action that's makes sense. I have no issues! Awesome work

6

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Sheldon takes Flight Acts1 and 2

It's cute to see penguins desperate to fly. I wonder about the world this story takes place. Are they advanced like humans? Why do they need money? How do they function as a society? Is he the only smart penguin? I think it would really help to think about really building up the world and its rules. But overall I think you have a cute story with lots of potential! Good luck!

6

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Act 2

I think the story took an interesting turn. I'm really curious about the creature. Since she knows of it, I think it would help to really explore it more. She doesnt seem to be scared in any way so is it not dangerous and just annoying? What's the point of the creature? Just seems slightly random. I think if you really look into the lore or where the creature comes from, it would help make the story clear. Good luck!

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Samson the scared sword - Act 1 and Act 2

I really like how you gave the sword more personality. It makes me more interested in the character and makes the chemistry between both of them nice and sweet. They seem to balance each other really well. excited to see the next part!

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LENNY & TWIRL

The story is really cute. I'm a little confused on the world that they live in. Do people become a tree? was it cursed? Is there magic in this world? I think establishing the world can really help make the story really clear but overall the shots are really nice and clear.

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Acts 1 & 2

I really find your shots charming and sweet. I think it would help to cut off some of the family growing up scenes since the story is about him or at least thats what im getting at. I think that having the focus and build up on him getting ready for take off his whole life building up to that big moment, then something bad happens, it would create interesting drama. I kinda wonder what happened and how he died. Looking great overall! keep up the great work!

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SMOKE ME

I loved the way you moved the viewer's eyes with the use of value and lighting. Very tasteful and nice! It's really funny how he had growing feelings for her when she didn't know she even existed. Kinda reminded me of the Bee Movie lol. Can't wait to see the next chapter!

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Indigo Act 1 Storyreel

I like how you're expanding more on the world building. I think really getting that clear on how the world is build and how everything runs and work can help the story a lot! It can give the characters a clear reason and reaction to the things they see or experience. Interested on where the story goes from here!

5

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Act 1

Interesting story so far! I can really feel the character's emotions. I wonder what her goals are. What was she expecting? I think setting that up first so we are in her shoes can help make us feel what she's feeling. I hope she ends up getting what she's looking for!

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Porcelain bird

The drawings are really cute here. I think it would really help to have some voice over to explain what the story is about since i'm still a bit confused on what is happening. The music helps give it emotion of something happening tho! Very interesting take.

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Act 1 Storyreel

Interesting story! I wonder, do the dinosaurs have these powers naturally or do they gain them by traveling through the worm hole? Are they more like aliens? It would be really cool to establish some world building! Cant wait to see what you cook up!

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Wolf and Dragon- Act 1- Kayla Stith

nice effects you have here! I think that the story and characters are all working really well! You def have a good eye for staging and framing. Can't wait to see what happens next!

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The Magical Sword to afraid to fight - Act 1 Minor beats

I really like the story you're building here but I think it would be really cool to have some world building like what do the magical swords do? I also think that the gender of the character doesn't really matter but whatever flows your story better in your eyes I'm sure it will turn out great in the end!

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Croxi - Briar and Captain’s Adventure

The story and drawings are super cute! I know you have your whole story thought out but I feel like it could be super dramatic and have this whole scene where the captain and crew start to go against each other and fight. The captain then goes down because of her greed, she falls in the ocean with the treasure. The sailor then becomes the new and better captain and they all sail off happily to their next adventure and the story could be that greed will put you stuck where you are but also be that the real treasure if the adventure and the friends. Just a thought haha. But overall I think you have an awesome cute story!

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