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Hunter

I would elaborate more on the story and the events.

The drawings are very well done.

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Cowboys

I'm sorry, I had made a mistake, my audio settings were messed up. I would elaborate more on the story.

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Cowboys

I feel that the lack of a narration, or any dialogue leads to a confusing story.

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Adam and Robot

I think that your story can be a great movie, but it requires some more elaboration.

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Lewis and his Magic Kite

Your story has potential for interesting character relationships. Personally I would focus more on conflict between characters rather than a story about magic.

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Final Story

I think that the story has potential to be a great movie, but currently it could use some elaboration.

7

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Act 3 for Luna

There were slight delays in getting the right version of the video in, it should have a proper voiceover now!

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City ruled by wind

great drawing!
I don't quite understand the title though.

2

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Nathan

I would suggest making the challenge more extreme.

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Background of Miguel

I like most about this character his desire to create a portal. I don't find anything unclear. I would suggest that Miguel's desire to create a portal as caused by the disdain his parents feel for him. In the end he succeeds and realizes, once his parents are gone, that they maybe weren't so bad after all.

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Week #2 Character Profiles

I like most about this character the visual design. I don't find anything confusing. I don't have any suggestions.

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Taima

I like most about this character the want to be a normal bird. I don't find anything confusing. I think that your story already has great potential, but I think that some work could be placed into the visual design of the character.

2

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Mikey!-Neo

I like most about this character the design that was drawn. I don't find anything confusing or unclear. I would suggest creating a larger problem stopping them from their goal, currently, it seems that the character has little to overcome.

1

Week

A single leaf in a building

My favorite idea was #2, I wonder what people would think of that leaf. It was unclear what the leaf was is it a normal leaf?

1

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What If

My favorite idea was #1, looking on earth from the perspective of another planetoid would bring a whole new perspective. It was unclear whether the astronomer moved to the moon or was born there.

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What if questions. - Torben

My favorite idea was #2. I wonder what the spirits are. It was unclear what the person found in their basment.

1

Week

What If - Mónica Juárez

My favorite idea was #1. I wonder what the explorers would think of earth.

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"What if" - Vlad

My favorite idea was #3, not having gravity sounds interesting. I wonder what people would think of that person who isn't affected. It was unclear how often gravity would disappear, and for how long.

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What If

The first idea, about shadows would change much of modern society, leading to an interesting story. I wonder what would happen if that big bucket (Idea 3) would overflow.

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