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A Stellar Bedtime Story

This was very entertaining and I especially loved the beginning question about “Once upon a time…” There is something really special about your story, the overall feel of it is delightfully cheerful :-). The "All is not digested!" line made me laugh! I think you all have such artistry and story telling skills, and I would love to watch your future productions! Blessings to all of you 4tissimo!

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Worked Like A Dog

I absolutely love this story and everything about it! I think the overall story structure was really strong, and I thoroughly enjoyed watching every minute of it. Just a heads up, the audio cuts out around 4:53 (but it comes back later at 6:00)! Maybe reach out to help@storyxperiential.com? The drawings and characters have so much emotion and personality, and the story was carried even without the audio in that part. I love your drawing style, and I can completely imagine seeing one of your short films on the big screen :-).

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Cian and the Metaverse * Final Submission *

Whoops, I made a typo: Cian finding his sister!

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Lost and Found

I think your story is a fantastic journey, and I absolutely love the amount of creativity and heart behind it! It was so sweet how the bond between Mr. Lost and Stella grew over the course of the story, and it became an even more heartwarming when he turned out to be Stella’s father. That was such a great addition to the storyline! I loved the part where Stella asked, “Where is my creativity?” and the computer said, “Somewhere in the world.” That made me laugh! I think you did an amazing job on the artwork and editing, and I absolutely enjoyed your story :-)!

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Cian and the Metaverse * Final Submission *

I found myself completely immersed in your story! It was so interesting to see the contrast between the Metaverse and the real world, and I felt like the storyboards communicated that difference perfectly. I loved the part when the robot said, "bye human," it made me laugh! I also really liked the twist of Cian finding her sister, and how they decided to no longer live in the Metaverse (great song choice at the end). Overall, I seriously enjoyed your story, it is amazing!

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Week

A Pirate's Treasure

I think that your story is so outstanding! The word that comes to mind is magical, the overall mood throughout the story was exciting and adventurous. I think the pacing, camera angles, sound effects, music, and the editing were all done very well (and the characters' actions and movements were able to carry the storyline perfectly). I have no suggestions and nothing was unclear to me! I loved the part when the ocean takes back the gemstone, the illuminating color of the ocean was beautiful! Overall, I think you did a fantastic job and I enjoyed every minute of your story :-)!

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Bad Timing

I think you did an awesome job! Leslie is such a funny and relatable character with a ton of personality, and the pacing of the whole story was really well done. The fortune cookie part and the phone calls made me laugh a lot! I loved each characters' design, and I really enjoyed the parts with the music in the background, I think it fit the theme of the story nicely. Overall, between the characters and the writing, I found myself smiling throughout the entirety of your story :-)! Amazing!!

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Week

BOREALIS - Final Cut

I think you made an absolutely beautiful story! There was an abundant amount of emotion and expression in each storyboard, and I loved all of the details! I felt that the ending wrapped the story up really nicely (SO heartwarming). I have no suggestions and nothing was unclear, it is amazing :-)! Lol, I love the part with the barista, his expression is perfect!

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Week

Toro

I love your story! I feel that it really showcases true character growth and development. Toro has a rough and rigged surface at first, but he has quite the wake up call when he fell to the bottom of the canyon (kind of like the hardest lessons to learn in life are the ones that shape you for the better). I think your artwork is FANTASTIC and beautiful. I also love the design of Hermit, he is so lovable! Absolutely amazing job :-)!!!!

7

Week

Act 3 Mona

I really love Mona's story, and how she becomes a beacon of hope for those who don't quite know what their passions are yet. I think the moral of the story is so special, as it inspires everyone to not only go after their dreams, but to also stand out of the crowd in strength and honesty. I was curious, was it Mona's decision to wear the scarf or her parents' influence? I would love to see the parents' perspective on the situation, as it would really have an impact on Mona. I enjoyed Reed's role in the story, and the only thing that I would suggest is adding a part where he quickly puts on a disguise before he runs after her (just so he isn't stopped by all of the fans). Overall, I think you all did a seriously awesome job on this story and the storyboard illustrations :-)!

7

Week

Leo´s Story

Wow, I love your story! I really think it is beautiful how the Colossi have compassion and care for humans (I especially like the design of the Colossi). I would love to see the choice behind the Colossi turning into mountains, was there an outside force that they wanted to protect the humans from? I thought it was a great twist when it turned out that Leo has a piece of the Colossi's heart within him, that backstory really added to the parent's reasoning for wanting to keep him safe. I think what could make that part even stronger was if the mountain didn't accept any other visitors, but since Leo is connected with the mountain, the Colossi recognize who he is and ensures that he is safe. I loved that angle of the mountain having a human-like face! The only other suggestion I would have is to maybe add a reasoning to the parents becoming tourist guide leaders. Perhaps it is because they hoped they would run into Leo someday? I thought it was so heartwarming how they kept record of his achievements. This is just an idea, but it might be cool to hear a deep Colossi voice saying "thank you," after Leo sacrifices himself to save the heart. Overall, I absolutely enjoyed your story and your wonderfully drawn storyboards :-)!

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Week

Borealis - Acts I, II and III

I think that your story is amazing! I really like your storyboard illustrations, especially the flow of the different camera angles. I absolutely enjoy the characters in your story, and the ending is both clever and very sweet! The barista made me laugh too, I liked his part of the story :-)! There were no unclear parts for me, I felt that the storyboards were well crafted and made complete sense. My only suggestion would be to add at the end fake snow from everyone blowing dandelions (when Aban's friends are making the dark crevice on the side of the mountain like winter). Overall, I love your story and I think you did a fantastic job :-).

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Escape from Area 51

I think that your story is so well crafted, and there were many points where I tried to guess what was going to happen next, and the story kept taking even more interesting turns! Roswell's character is really interesting, and even though he plays the antagonist role, I couldn't help but feel bad for the life he had to live. If I were to suggest anything, it would only be to learn more about Fuga's past on the sun. Has his alien species built a civilization on the Sun? If so, that would be awesome to see :-)! Your ending was perfect, and I loved the contrast between Fuga and Roswell. They both suffered, but Fuga chose kindness. Well done :-)!

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Magic at the Beach: Rough Acts 1, 2, & 3

I think that this is an amazing and absolutely heartwarming story. I seriously loved every minute of it! Especially the dialogue, it was natural, and the pacing was perfect. And the drawings! The camera angles and everything, I think it was all so well done. If I were to suggest anything, it would be to add a part where it is communicated that Naila lives alone, maybe a picture of her family in a photo frame? That way, when she listens to the shell's music, her family would be recognizable. Overall, I think your story is fantastic :-).

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Final Act: Eternal Jade

Wow, I love this story and Jade's world! It absolutely caught me off guard when Tau was impaled by the blue glowing vines, that was a shocking twist in the story! I especially love the designs of the forest guardians, they are incredibly detailed. I was curious about how the plant is guiding Jade, does the plant lead Jade like a flashlight would? The whole concept of the plant is so cool! The only thing that I would suggest is showing more about Jade's perspective at the end. It would be a difficult choice to decide whether or not to share a miracle healing plan with the world, or to become a forest guardian and protect nature: I would love to hear Jane's reasoning for the final decision :-). I think that you did a such a great job on your story as well as your drawings, so much imagination and vision!

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Week

Friend Shaped Act II

I think your story is so intriguing and I loved the animations in the video! W has such an interesting dilemma, because after conforming and performing for so many years wanting to make others happy, W hasn't found a true sense of self. It is actually a really sweet message: Sam is W's perfect friend because she just wants W to be authentic. It made me so curious when W and Sam look at the photo frames, and it made me wonder about W's origin. Does every family in this world have an imaginary friend, or is this a special part about the Anderson family? Do they keep W a secret? My only other question is who gave the imaginary friend the name "W." Overall, I really enjoyed acts 1 and 2! I really like the characters in your story, they are well crafted and drawn with so much personality. I can't wait to see act 3!

6

Week

Axel the Kangaroo, Acts 1 + 2

I think this story is so creative, and the entire world you all have created is really immersive. I really like Axel's character, and especially how his story arc begins with the incident of him standing up to the bully, but it did not necessarily go as planned. It immediately made me root for his character (in a David versus Goliath sort of way). I was curious, were the kangaroos in the desert once members of the mob? I would love to hear more about Baxter, because he sounds like a really interesting character. He's clearly been in quite the fight if he lost an arm, and the thought of him trying to heal and help others is incredibly thought-provoking. What in his journey made him become a doctor? What did he learn on his journey? A part of me hopes that Axel will receive valuable life-advice from Baxter, because I have a feeling that the real fight between Tony and Axel is not necessarily about strength, but seeing that the entire system within the mob is the problem. I would suggest to give the kangaroo mob a name, because that could add to their overall belief that they are a "superior," mob as well as their sense of exclusiveness. It would also be cool to see more about the city that they live in, it sounds like the mob has control the city? I love how there was so much expression and character in each storyboard illustration, and clearly conveyed what each character was thinking and feeling. Really great job on your acts 1 and 2, I really look forward to seeing act 3 :-)!

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Grandfather - Act 1 and 2

Wow, I really love this story. You've shown Isaiah as a dynamic character, and I think there is so much authentic emotion and realism in how he navigates life. My favorite part was the conversation between the grandfather and Isaiah, and the way that the grandfather was there to support Isaiah with thoughtful advice is so heartwarming. If I were to make one suggestion, maybe Isaiah and his grandfather could have one final moment together in the hospital (even just silently holding hands). It is just so sad to notice that the last thing Isaiah experiences with his grandfather is seeing him unconscious, and not being able to say goodbye. I think this is such an amazing story, and that each storyboard was beautifully made.

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Act 2

This is such a great idea! Mr. Schnee is a well crafted character, and I really like his overall design along with the vision of his story arc. When the story was told, I found myself becoming more and more invested in the outcome of everything. I was curious, does the city know that they are in a snow globe? If they don't, what caused Mr. Schnee to not want to tell them the truth? If I had to add one suggestion, I think it would be interesting to see Mr. Schnee's opponent. Given that there is an unknown citizen in Globe City who felt the need to run anonymously against Mr. Schnee, it suggested to me that the people are really afraid of the Globe City leaders, in a sort of dictatorship way. I enjoy so many aspects about your story, especially the overall looming thought of, "What if the snow-globe fell off of the shelf?" It shows that ultimately, Mr. Schnee does care about the city, but just has to reconsider how he shows that care for them. I also really like the idea of "Global Imaging!" The thought of a rigid character like Mr Schnee trying to be "hip" is a hilarious thought. Maybe Global Imaging could have a motto? Also, it would be funny if Mr Schnee was not exactly proficient at working on a computer, but still tries (it could communicate that he is absolutely desperate to win against the other candidate). Overall, really great job on act 2! I love this story, and I look forward to seeing act 3 :-)!

6

Week

Wolf and Dragon- Act 1 & 2- Kayla Stith

You have created such an amazing story! Between the drawings, character designs, and pacing, each frame communicates volumes (especially that part where Lobo speaks to Pitaya through gestures and expressions, perfect). It was really interesting to hear that Pitaya was confused when she saw the wolf pack family, but it tells the audience a lot about her perspective. I think what could even bring this point further is if Lobo looked over at the wolf pack family, and had a sudden look of understanding, as if he knew this would happen at some point (that Pitaya would feel like she is out of place). When Pitaya looked back at the wolf pack family, it evoked so much emotion. Also, I think that action scene was well done. I loved that part where Pitaya breathed fire! Overall I think your story is well tailored, and I look forward to seeing act 3 :-)!

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Rugula's Passion

Wow, you did an awesome job on Act 2! There are just so many parts about this story that I love. For starters, I think the world you created is extremely immersive. Especially those details on the posters behind Rugula as she is in the studio reading lines - it made me laugh, especially "The Ex" poster! I feel like one of the most intriguing and thought provoking points of your story is when Phoebe finds the small door to the monster world in the storage closet of her costume shop. That is such a cool idea! If I were to add one suggestion, I was wondering if the monster world has their own unique language, and perhaps Rugula knowing how to speak "human," makes them need each other even more. Maybe Phoebe and Rugula don't exactly 'click' at first, but when Phoebe realizes that nobody in the monster world speaks "human," she knows that she needs Rugula. Overall I so enjoy your story and cannot wait for act 3!

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Une Masquerade Ridicule - Act 1

Wow, I think you did an amazing job on act one! I especially liked that you included so many interesting camera angles, and each frame of the storyboard was captivating. One part of the story I find to be really thought provoking is when Doire sees the emotional older couple and smiles. It is such an interesting detail that tells much about Doire's core character qualities. My only question was if Ridiculo is supposed to be Doire's secret identity, which explains why she would not be inclined to be the muse of Carolina's assignment. I think your story sparks imagination, and there is so much vision and creativity. I am looking forward to seeing act 2 :-)!

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Alien Reality TV show

I feel that this story is especially strong in humor, because Marlowe and Doug are such well crafted and specific characters. I love that subtle detail about Marlowe's favorite character being Indiana Jones! I would love to see more about the Alien Survivor part of the story, because I was uncertain if it was actually about aliens or if it was assumed by everyone that people dressed up as the aliens. Does Marlowe want to hang out with Doug, so that's why she signed them up? This is an incredibly relatable "want" of younger siblings, to hang out with older siblings. But, given the fact that she likes Indiana Jones, it's clear that she's up for an adventure either way :-). I really like your story, well done on act 1!

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Princess Alienor_Week 5

I absolutely love this! Your story and the world you've created has so many immersive qualities; there are multiple elements that make me want to watch more. The point that leaves me the most curious is if it is Alienor's choice to teleport to different stories and become a different version of herself, or if it is because of the scribe. In other words, is this a power that she could control? It would be cool to see a part of the origin story of the locket, because that would stress its importance later on when she forgets to bring it. I love the imagination, and the first part where she was almost bested by the dragon put me on the edge of my seat. I really look forward to seeing act 2 and 3 :-)!

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Week 4, by Jiwoo :)

There are so many intriguing points to your story, and I absolutely enjoyed delving into an entirely new world :-)! I felt connected with Stella when her mom did not seem interested in the stories she had to tell, it sets the overall story arc up well. At first, I was shocked that the pencil with her dad's name on it (Mr. Lucky) could talk! That was an unclear part for me, because at first I did not know that Stella lived in a magical world. I was curious to hear why Mr. Lucky was at the Lost and Found Hotel. Did he want to stay there, or was he left there? I think taking the time to delve into the concept of Lost and Found City and exploring the purpose of each building a little further (such as the Lost and Found Emotion Shelter) would be helpful to the viewer. Overall, there are many points in the story that are exciting and engaging. The idea of being able to find out what a person's day was like in the Lost and Found Library of Times and Memories is so cool! I think what could make that section stronger and even humorous is adding a quirky librarian. It made me curious to see how there were traps that could be activated, it sounds like her mom's time and emotion book in the library is not meant to be read by anyone? You've created an awesome world, it reminds me of an Alice in Wonderland style of story in how much creativity there is behind it.

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