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The Antique Store - Acts 1 & 2

I love your story theme, and the creative way to use an antique story as another characther. I'm confused between the pacing too much dialogue but not a lot of images. Overall, cool story and can't wait what's next

6

Week

Lily the Lion Cub Act1&2

Hi there! I enjoyed watching Lily's story. The illustrations and narration are lovely. Act 1 and act 2 are very complete for me. Can't wait what happens next.

6

Week

Sheldon takes Flight Acts1 and 2

What a lovely story! The act 1 and 2 are well thought, and the illustrations are adorable. How the penguin city works? What are the flying school teaching about? Overall, great story

6

Week

Act 2 Mona

I've felt so connected with the plot because it is a universal feeling. Act 1 and 2 are well delivered, and the plot goes smoothly. I'm excited about the final story reel.

5

Week

POr las barbas de mi gato (My cat´s whiskers)

I love the plot and drawings. But I'm confused what are the major and minor beats of the story because I got lost what's the main premise. Is he going to overcame his allergies o fear with cats?

5

Week

Act One

Great writing and storytelling, I wish I could see more illustrations to visualize easier the story. Looking forward to seeing final version

5

Week

Lenny & Twirl

First, what a great introduction. I love the illustrations that I could feel the setting immediately. I'm only confused what is the major and minor beats, what it's the protagonist role for the story. If you give more context would be great, and I'm investing for what's next

5

Week

Marin-Act 1

WOW! What a marvelous story and a lovely beginning. Could you share more about Marin past life? Furthermore, Why Solaire was the only one who perceived the curse? Does she have a special skill? Great story, can't wait to see more.

5

Week

ELIXIR - ACT ONE

I enjoyed your story and plot! Such a universal theme with magic realism I love it. My question is: How the mother died? What's Lady death protecting or mission? Overall, can't wait what is going to happen

5

Week

Snowed In Act 1 (with subtitles)

Hi there,

I love the premise of your story. The drawings are lovely and how you introduce your protagonist Antalya. I'm confused what happened to her friends and how it's relating while her being trapped at the airport.

Overall, keep going!

4

Week

Story Spine Mona

Hello!

It is a lovely story, I connected with the plot. It is hard to follow a career path or being brave enough to change it. How the actor got the attention of Mona? How he was sympathetic with her? Furthermore, I love the moral of the story.

4

Week

Sheldon Takes Flight

Hi group! I love the penguin full story, I was excited what you will come up this week. I enjoy the plot and the art of how Sheldon persevered to accomplish his dream. What part of fish he would use to power up the plane? Maybe the waste like bones after eating them.

4

Week

ELIXIR - Story Spine

I love the story plot, and adding magic realism with Mexican tradition. The characters are well-developed are the story is beautiful. You can add how Papa found the life water fountain? overall, can't wait for more

4

Week

Cornelius - Story Spine

I truly enjoyed and love Cornelius's story. His journey was fun to watch, and I connected in so many levels. I think you can give more context of why Cornelius always wanted to help or is he felt ashamed about himself? Furthermore, showing more the interaction between Cornelius isolating himself and the interaction with the monkeys. Overall, love the story.

4

Week

"Bad Timing" Story Outline

Great story, the illustrations are beautiful and well communicated. Felt connected in many levels. I got confused with the part of time travel, if she had the ability or found a machine. The plot is great and looking forward to seeing more.

4

Week

Bubblepop Story Spline

I love your story and the art captures beautifully. The concept of being in an actual bubble on how we behave in society it's genius. Something unclear, why Thea it's not in a bubble? Is she always being that way or recently? How lesha left the bubble to defend Thea? One suggestion would it's to give the origins about the bubble world and the people who are out of them?

3

Week

Mel can't face his fears.

I love the attention to detail, this scene looks clear to me. I guess my only suggestion is to highlight more Mel's position because he gets lost in the frame and took me a while to find me. Overall, looking forward to seeing your work next week.

3

Week

World of Bubble Pop

I can't wait to see how the whole plot will develop. I love colors, facial expressions, set, and everything. It looks clear and can't wait to see more

3

Week

Kyota & Adrian in World

Love implementing the comic book vibes and attention to detail about both characther look and feel. Something unclear it's the transition on how they changed bodies. A suggestion to strengthen it if it is the "Clock's fault" while Adrian was fixing it.

3

Week

The truth about Mixiote

This shot looks so much fun. I love the little girl's face and the kitty's expression. Moreover, looks really cool how you played with the lights and shadows. I found unclear if Mixiote it's talking or listening. Addition why the Lili's face it's smiling? My only suggestion to play with the plot and dialogue

3

Week

"What Did You Do!?!"

I love the colors, texture, and movement. I truly feel that I am speaking with a ghost. Something unclear for me, where are the other ghost going? I can't see the boy's facial expression clearly. My suggestion is to make the lines a bit stronger and more clear of the interaction.

3

Week

Legends of Surf

I love the full picture of shop and how is main vessel from the protagonist and how he truly care about that place. I'm unclear with his age, if the shop it's really his or a family business? I would love to see if Reese feels obligated to move out of town or the shop would get evicted.

2

Week

Raul´s character profile

Raul stole my heart. Since we are a product of the stories we believe in, and he got a reality check. It makes me wonder if he is going to learn that fighting is not the answers? Is he going to have a mentor? Will he be in peace with himself as a sensible boy? I think you can use more anime style reactions combined with western illustrations. It will look awesome!

2

Week

Ugo

I love your characther, he seems an outspoken introvert. Ugo is relatable, and the cat named speedy is hilarious. Does Ugo have stage fright (Racing wised)? That's why he is shy. Is He going to create an alias or persona to achieve his race car dreams? Can't wait to see how his story will go :)

2

Week

Mel the Bee

I truly enjoyed this story about the metaphor using a bee colony and a bear for the conflict. Especially a generational problem too. Something confusing for me, it's how the bear found the bee colony, did the bear put an enchantment on the bees, so they can be the queen? I think it's great that Mel can use his introverted nature as a power to be an influential leader at the end.

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