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The Magical Sword to afraid to fight - Act 1 Minor beats

This is very creative. Am curious to know how the sword failed its users and got its wielders hurt? This seems to be a key part of why the sword no longer wants to fight. Also, does the sword not like violence or did it "fail" in battle? Maybe this is why it did fail? Just a thought.

Very good job!! Keep it up.

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Orion the Brave - Act1

Very creative idea! Giving sentience to the constellations is brilliant. I love that they play roles as well. Looking forward to seeing where this goes. Question: How was it that Orion failed? I would like to know more about whether it was a mistake or not. Did he really fail?

Nice job!!!

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Act 1 Storyreel

Definitely hooked me but a few things seemed implausible. I realize her job was mundane but would she really leave it after one cup of coffee and a strange card. Possibly consider something more here that would really intrigue her and give her some greater reason to explore this.

Nice job. Am really interested in what this place is!!

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Indigo Act 1 Storyreel

Very strong visually! A couple of questions. Why would Kain dream of working for Acme? Are we supposed to know that yet? Also, what is keeping Kain from going to Earth in the first place? This obstacle seems to be very important and would love to hear more on this.

Nice job!!

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A misunderstood street dog

Good idea and clear in many ways. A couple of questions: Why would other dogs and humans be upset with her when she wasn't doing anything aggressive. Also, why did she go to the beach? Is there some history here?

Nice job!

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Darren Allen Dadd

Love the possibilities of this idea that kids can control their parents.
Am a little confused with what the obstacle is for Darren.
Think if you can define the obstacle better it would make him being "saved" from it more powerful.
Very creative!

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Character Profile – Poe

Very creative idea! I like the idea that the ghost could represent things that are not in our reality but are effecting our lives in this reality.
Question I have is that do they think ghosts are a normal thing that he would expect to find?

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Fantastic artwork. I really like the idea he is striving to be an astronaut as that is "out of this world" while also struggling with more ordinary things of "this world."

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Axel the Kangaroo

I like the choice of a kangaroo because they inherently are thought of as being powerful and sort of fun loving creatures.
Bringing a mafia element is a good contrast to their fun loving reputation as his him being meek on the inside. Curious as how a crippled kangaroo could overcome a powerful mob boss. What trait might he have that he could use to defeat the bad boss.

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What If...

All very interesting but like the ghosts and the live people switching places because it could ask a lot of deep questions like what defines "life." Makes me wonder whether the live people scare the ghosts in this reality?

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What if...

Favorite is what if heaven had visiting hours. So many interesting directions for this. Makes me wonder what sort of screening one would have to go through to get into heaven to visit someone. Makes me wonder if you can visit whoever you want or whether you can only visit people who you knew or are related to.

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Week 1: What If

All very interesting but think my favorite is meeting your future selves as this could ask some interesting questions about who you want to be and price you need to pay to achieve certain things (i.e. a successful career person might be less interesting than someone whose job was less consuming). Makes me wonder what I would hope to find in my future selves! One thing that is hazy is how meeting your future selves is possible.

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My favorite is the wolf raising the baby dragon as I think you can go in some very interesting directions. Makes me wonder whether the dragon would think he was a dragon. What is unclear is how this came about - meaning in this world does everyone know about dragons or would the wolf not even know what a dragon is?

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What If

All very creative. I like the Fairies losing their powers best as it seems you can go in a lot of good directions with this and make an interesting cultural comment. Makes me wonder the back story for how the fairies were introduced to technology and why, since they do have powers, they would need it.

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Chuck's What If

Favorite was the dogs breaking their friend out of "jail." Like this because it can be in a sense a "heist" story with their friend being the treasure.
Makes me wonder how they would find out about their friends dilemma. How much intelligence will the dogs be given. Limited in any way?

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