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Story Spine Mona

What a beautiful story! I loved seeing Mona's character try different careers and passions in her journey, but ultimately having her own unique path. The message in the story can be used and / or mirrored to so many difficult thing you face as you grow up and find yourself. It was a little unclear if the actor was sympathetic because he had trouble with his path or he just is a sympathetic person? I would like to hear a little more backstory on the actor when he talks with Mona to give more gravity to his actions. Well Done!!

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Fuga's Journey- Area 51 and Beyond: Story Spine

I liked the empathetic approach you took to the plight of the Aliens. It very imaginative and opens room for character exploration. I agree that there might have been more room for development if the number of Aliens introduced here was decreased. I am unclear how Holly came to join their group. Was she just sympathetic to the Aliens or was she imprisoned for something else and joined forces? I would like to hear more about why Holly is there with the group to help create a more poignant moment when Fuga saves her.

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Bean.

I love the artwork and the style. The story is very lovely and full of potential for backstory(ies). It is a bit unclear if the Grandmother knew the Grandfather was the owner of the competition or how long ago he split from the family...has he always lived nearby? It was very interesting to see character traits develop with Bean that are similar to her Grandfather. It would be great to see that explored more, plus a little more clarity on the backstory.

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Gravity

I really liked the concept behind the story and the levels of emotion that are incorporated in the storytelling. I am a bit confused on the transition from Declan wanting to go to the party, to deciding to create a space adventure for Rylan. I would like to hear more about Declan's transition emotionally and why he chooses to stay with Rylan. Plus more from Rylan on how he feels in that scene. Overall beautiful story.

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Sheldon Takes Flight

I love the meaning behind the story and the journey that Sheldon takes to fulfill his dream. I also really liked the artwork and character choices. I am confused how fish are used as a fuel source. Is it the oil? I would like to hear more about how he transformed fish into fuel.

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What If Akwesasne

My favorite is the what if Akwesasne is a portal to the Sky World. It lends to so many possibilities about the world beyond and also bridges a rich cultural background. It is unclear how you would access the Sky World in this scenario. Is it through a certain set of words or actions?

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What Ifs by Los Diablicos

I really loved all of these What ifs! I think my favorite is the Diablico Sucio Mask what if. It open up so many possibilities to a back story and questions. Is the quinceanera the reason for the mask to become sentient, or is it a rite a passage that the girl did not know about? It was unclear if the mask belonged to the girl or another family member originally.

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"What If"

I really like the awkward and dangerous predicaments each of the scenarios provide. I was very intrigued by the inflatable people. I wonder how the inflatable people got to the world? Was it on purpose or by accident?

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