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Butterfly Effect

I love the storyline and your art style! I hoped to have a little more background story and context, but this was really well done in the time allowed! Good job! :D

8

Week

Mias story!

I love the drawings and the storyline! I really like the space drawing at the beginning too. The color highlighting important elements made them really pop out as well! Good job!

8

Week

Todd Astor

I love the drawings and the moral of the story! I also really liked how you made some elements in the film pop out with color while leaving the rest black and white. Really good job!

8

Week

The Adventure of Mikey and Eaon

I love the drawings and the characters personalities! I would've loved to see just a little color in some of the more important elements in this video, however I loved the storyline and the film! Good job! :D

6

Week

Story reel for Act 1 & 2 for Aspen

Thank you for your feedback! That’s a great suggestion… I’ll make sure to include it! :D

6

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Story reel for Act 1 & 2 for Aspen

Thank you! :D

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Story reel for Act 1 & 2 for Aspen

Thank you for your feedback!

4

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Tutsi's Comeback

I like your drawings, they are simple and direct. Your moral is also an important one in my opinion. I’m wondering why Tutsi is made fun of and how did he develop his passion for basketball? I’m excited for your final story reel this week! :D

4

Week

Bernard's goal

Cool got it, thanks! Excited to see where this goes :D

4

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The Lonely Golem

I like the moral and the drawings, they are very descriptive! What I'm confused about is what drove him to go explore the village, how did he make friends with the little boy, and why did the little boy's family choose to accept the golem? I like the story and the moral, there are so many opportunities to show emotions people feel all the time! I'm excited to see where this goes! :D

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Aspens Story Spine

Thank you for your feedback!

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Aspens Story Spine

Thanks for the feedback!

4

Week

Aspens Story Spine

Yeah, the main idea was to have the balloon world sort of similar to our world but with some changes! Thanks for your feedback! :)

4

Week

Aspens Story Spine

Thank you for your feedback! Really helpful, and I'll make sure to work on your comments! Thanks! :)

4

Week

Ruff Ruff ( am I spell other right ) Story Board Sketch

I like the drawings, they were descriptive. It's hard to tell what's happening since it's voiceless and there's not much description but from what I read, it sounds really cool! I'm confused on where this is taking place, what is their mission, and who are the characters? It seems like it starts in the middle of a scene which helps capture the audience but after that, it'd be nice to have some more background, details, and description. Overall, this seems pretty cool and I'm excited to see where it goes!

4

Week

Gilda's Story Spine

I like your moral and your storyline, I haven't heard it [the storyline] anywhere before! The drawings are really descriptive. I'm wondering why Gilda was promoted to a Squad Leader and what inspired her to use dreams to help humans? And at the end, how did she get Mary, the oldest Squad Leader to join them? Was Mary curious? Was Mary trying to prove that Gilda was wrong but ended up seeing that she was right? Overall, I really like the storyline and the drawings! I'm excited on how this is going to turn out!

4

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Madeleine Devlin- Week 4- story spine

I like the moral and your drawings! The way that you highlighted the main characters in pink really makes them stand out. Peaches in the drawing looks a little on the dirty side, so that makes me curious whether he's the loner of the pack? I'm also wondering why Peaches is the one who is chosen to guard Moxie from the monster?

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Bernard's goal

I like the drawings and the moral of the story! I'm confused about the car and why he keeps it. Does he not have enough money to get a new one? Does it have some sort of sentimental value? Overall, the storyline is good and I'm excited to see how the story ends up!

4

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Act 1 Voiceless

The drawings are really amazing, they help support the scene! Because it's voiceless, I'm kind of confused on what is happening and the story. However, the drawings are really skillful!

4

Week

Oregon journey

I like your moral and also the drawings, they're really descriptive! It was a little hard to hear... I'm also confused on why he left his dog Liberty, and why the settlers helped him. I'm also wondering why and how he died?

3

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Golem Drawing

I like the drawing! I'm wondering why this golem wanders the forest?

3

Week

Characters in their World

I like the drawing and how you added blue to the main characters to make them stand out a bit more. I'm wondering why are they at a beachside carnival?

3

Week

Devin Haynes

Wow, this is absolutely amazing art! I'm confused on where is the character? What does this environment have to do with the main character?

3

Week

Alex’s Room

I love the drawing, it's really pretty! Adding the closet was a great addition because we now get the idea that maybe he's sorta the minimalistic style and he wears the same thing everyday. I love the colors you chose!

3

Week

Potential Dangers

I love the drawing! The way that you chose to only put color on Fynn's light makes it really seem like it's shining. How you drew the bird in the background really makes it seem creepy and scary, something I wouldn't want to go near. I also really love Fynn's expression here. Overall, I really love this drawing.

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