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The Princess

I think this was very interesting, the mixture of styles in how things were illustrated makes for a really neat viewing experience. My only issue I found is that the voice over was rather quiet and difficult to hear, but that's not much of a story-related problem.

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A Mysterious Mirror

I mean this with absolutely no ill will whatsoever: Did you read the statement I wrote at the top explaining what happened and why I COULDN'T do exactly that?

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In The Mirror

Someone knows! Omg I was surprised no one instantly thought of Celeste when they saw it lol. I LOVE Celeste it's like my favorite game and it made such a difference in my life so, it uh, tends to influence my ideas a lot haha. And I actually did want to do more mirrors! I just was worried it wouldn't look interesting enough & would also be more work but I definitely would do it if I found a way

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Greenhouse

This is super cute! I love the different plants you've drawn on display. One thing I can't quite see properly is the jar in the front. It looks like there's a fish in it? I think it's probably a fish. Anyway, this is really sweet and nice!

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ghosties <3

This is really cute! They look like they're having a fun time and I love their little outfits. Where are they going on vacation? It looks like a big city, but is it their destination or are they only just leaving? I think it would be cool if the background had some landmark that the ghost on the right could be gesturing towards, but it's still great already!

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Setting

Oh dear, something happened to that friend, I bet. It's a very sad atmosphere for sure, the glow of the city behind the character makes the foreground feel even darker and lonely. I can't exactly tell what the little colored thing is in the bottom right, though. Is it a clump of berries? I might just be stupid haha

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Ted's World

This is really good! The position of the character makes me feel like I'm a friend of them or something, while the bangs over their eyes make me think I don't really know them very well... Very mysterious!

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Alexis being turned into a demon

I think the composition here is fantastic! The use of symmetry really draws the eyes to the center. I just... have no idea what's really going on? I mean, like, I can see it's in the description, but that description isn't the definition of helpful lol. Sorry if that sounds rude! It looks really cool I promise haha

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City ruled by wind

The composition is really fun! It really gives a sense of height and how precarious the situation is. One thing that isn't entirely clear to me (this is more of a question than a criticism) would be the path-like lines floating above the ground. Are they wind lines of some kind? Walkways?

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What If?

Gosh, it's hard to choose a favorite between the first and second ideas. The first has a lot of potential for the child as a villain character, unaware of the true consequences their choices would now have on everyone. Or maybe they are aware and, in childish fashion, are selfish with the powers? The second idea is also very fun, it makes me imagine all sorts of hijinks that the poor victim of this bodyswap would get roped into.

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What if video

I found the first idea most intriguing, if a bit existential hehe. It does make me wonder how this being would react. Would they resign themselves to their non-existence, or try to break through into 'reality'? It's definitely a thought provoking question, especially because the act of thinking is so often seen as an indication that one is real, so the idea of a being that doesn't exist being aware of its own nonexistence is... my brain hurts.

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What If...

I enjoy the idea of the vocal bowtie, it has a lot of potential for humorous situations. Can other people hear it? Is the person able to remove this tie? Will it somehow follow them around just to remind them of all their worries? The only thing I found unclear was the reason for the second idea to specifically be focused on a bunny, but I certainly wouldn't call that a problem at all.

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What If? - Emily Matthews

I think the second idea is my favorite. It feels like it could almost take a philosophical view, like, is being 'normal' in itself a superpower, somehow? Does everyone else think this person with no powers is actually the most exceptional and amazing of all? I honestly didn't find anything unclear in this, I think they were all very simple and well executed ideas. As a side note, one thing I found a little amusing is that the third idea, the ghost roommate, was actually an idea I thought of when making my questions, but I ended up putting it aside in favor of another. I just thought that was a little funny to see someone else had that idea too :3

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What If?

I really like the shadow idea, cause it allows for a lot of creativity on what a shadow actually means in this alternate world. It makes me wonder what would cause someone to have a shadow, and how would that shadow differ from the shadows we know? Would it be a creature of its own, maybe? A representation of someone's inner darkness? I'm just rambling. I feel like the third idea, the polar opposites one, felt a little unclear to me as I can't really imagine it without knowing -how- the characters are so un-alike if that makes sense.

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