Not you? Click here

arrow&v

Explanation (Optional)

8

Week

Week 8 of Pixar

The background music was nice. I'm a little bit confused on what time period this takes place in and how slavery still exists during said time period(if it's after the 19th century).

8

Week

Aquiva

This was nice and very creative.

8

Week

James and Kyle

This story was nice, with a good moral. I wonder though, do Kyle and James live on the ranch or do they have a separate home? Because in the story they sell the ranch and move away, but then one of the brothers returns to their home. If the ranch is their home and they sold it, that wouldn't make sense for the brother to return to the ranch if it no longer belongs to them. Did he return to buy it back?

8

Week

Grimmhilda and kid full film

This story is very creative. However, I have to wonder, what was the MC (main character) running from? Why are the Grimm's not to be trusted? I also feel that the sequence of the cat(Yokai?) could have been different to fit the story. Like the MC could have followed the cat and it ended up at the market place. The other character(the green one) was unnecessary to have. The visuals and dialogue were good, you could have talked with a lot more character to bring them to life. Very nice.

8

Week

Lulus adventure

The visual story telling was nice, I like how it focuses on an animal rather than the humans (as most tales do). However I have to wonder, why were those hunters looking for dogs? What was the interaction with the squirrel about? And how did Lulu escape? The music mixing was excellent. However, I believe that your team should have put much more narration in the story because some of the visual context was hard to follow. Really nice story.

5

Week

Jonathon Q. Sniffer: Story Spine.

I like how serious but funny this story is. Like it covers serious topics with very funny characters. :)

5

Week

PTMB

I like your story that kinda follows the line "a tale of two friends".

5

Week

Act 1

I think that this character is interesting, that even though he has a family and such, he is still very greedy. I wonder if some major event later on in the series will make him realize that family outweighs gold.

5

Week

Add a Title

Is Bait's art supplies stuff she makes herself? Also why is the city abandoned? Was it because of an invasion, attack, lack of food?

Go to

5

Week

Jeane's story: Act One

I love this story :). I wonder if they knew about the fish (i think Malaking?) before camping? I also love your team name :)

5

Week

Meeting a Friend, Act 1

I like the story line and character design. I have a question about the music magicians, can anyone be a Music magician(as long as they master an instrument)? and is the world filled with magic that allows them to become music magicians?

4

Week

Story Line

I like the moral of the story, one question... Does the orphanage get their gold?

4

Week

Story Spine

If I was near an abandoned area I would do the same 😂, I think this story is very interesting and I relate to it a lot. Does his friends know that he gets stuck into the book or his parents?

4

Week

Lewis and his Kite -- Story Spine

I like the moral of the story, I wonder if that particular hill is magical or the kite is magical? And does Lewis ever get caught by his mother?

4

Week

Kara

This is a cool story! I wonder why there’s cookies with her face on them in the store? Is it because she becomes a famous YouTuber? I also like the message of the story.

4

Week

Fighting the Light

This is cool! I wonder where he loves originally, and what’s the name of the little friend that he has?

4

Week

Xiao Fe

This story is interesting, I think that I would like to know if other family members have had this ability or if he is the only one. I would also like to know more about the trustworthy future friend that he will meet later in the story.

3

Week

Week Three Deliverable

I love this image its so adorable :D, I wonder about how these two meet each other in the story. Next time however, I would like to see more expressions on both the fish and the octopus.

3

Week

Jakob

The flowers in this image are very pretty, I also like the size comparison of the flowers to the person. I wonder about the story and would like to know more in the future :)

3

Week

M.A.C :)

This is an interesting image, I think this is the first post I've seen with two people in the image. I also like the work with the lighting.

3

Week

Team Mitches Character in a Scene

This is a very interesting angle that y'all worked with :D. I think that its very interesting and would love to know more about the story.

3

Week

City ruled by wind

I really like this idea, and the image is very cool! I wonder, how heavy are the weights that keep them to the floor? Does that depend on how heavy the person is? Or does everyone get the same weights?

3

Week

Week 3 Drawing

I love the textures in this image! They give the image a cool human feel to it. Cool job!

2

Week

Character

Why does Ryder want gold? Is it because he wants to become wealthy, or so he can make stuff with it? Where in the world/or his world is he? Is there an abundance of gold, or is it rare and thats why he's looking for it? What does Ryder need to defend himself form?

2

Week

Character - Salacia

Salacia is a pretty cool name. Does Salacia have any dragon friends, or are they the only dragon in the area?

arrow&v
Filter comments by week

1

2

3

4

5

6

7

8

1

2

3

4

5

6

7

8

Erik's Comments

Please wait while we load your amazing content

Our goal for Story Xperiential is to foster an educational platform that actively remains a safe space for all users to bring their authentic voices and engage in learning free of judgment and ridicule, and where all cultural and gender backgrounds, learning differences and ability levels are welcomed and celebrated for their uniqueness and potential to inspire all of us. We do not condone story content that promotes violence or hate.

Privacy Policy

Questions? Contact us at 
help@storyxperiential.com