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BBE

The music added a nice feel to your story to convey some form of emotion. Though the story was a bit hard to follow without dialogue, though there were parts that were fine without it, dialogue probably would’ve helped convey the message better.

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Fangs make life interesting

The art is really nice! I liked the unique storyline and the hints at the contract earlier before it was openly stated. I’m a bit confused on what happened afterwards in the situation with media, and what was done afterwards, but it was a really nice ending to the story too and I liked your theme

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Ryan

I liked how there wasn’t much narration and you could tell what was going on through the images which were shown at good times. The music definitely helped add feeling to the story. I’m confused on how they saw the tsunami if they were underground mining.

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3

I like how there’s well expressed emotion through the narration, it really makes it more interesting to listen to. The sound effects add a nice detail as well, it’s a really good story! Though I’m a bit confused on what the theme was, and it said he had no friends but at the end says he gets back with them. Does that mean he made new friends or got in touch with old ones? That is a bit confusing. Good job!

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Peaches and the not-so-unfriendly Monster.

The drawing is amazing, and the story itself is really well written, and I love the message, along with Peaches character arc. It makes for a very good story and the music and framing is well timed. Good job!

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Week 7 Submission

I was hoping someone would notice some of the things in the background! Thanks for the feedback

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Week 7 Submission

Thank you for the feedback! I was hoping tying something like that in might make it easier for people in a way to connect with the story to some extent

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Week 7 Submission

Thank you so much for your feedback!

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Po act 1,2 & 3

I absolutely ADORE the drawings, for starters. I think the plot was very clear, and the message got across well, the sound effects helped set the mood and you definitely got me hooked on these two emotionally which is also a good thing for story writing!! I think my one thing I was confused of is when it mentions Po had called Pepper a lot but she had never answered, and I’m not sure why that is, since at the start it says he just forgot to maintain contact with her? (Correct me if I missed something there though). Overall it was a very heartwarming story. Great job!

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Benny’s Adventure Week 6

Thanks for the feedback! I’ll totally take that into consideration during week 8. Benny was Maya’s imaginary friend, so created by her to cope with the loss of Benny, her childhood friend if that makes sense

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Benny’s Adventure Week 6

I’ll try and see if I can figure out a way to put it in week seven, but I guess it’s there to symbolize that he’s created off of someone who is dead if that makes sense, like how wings can be symbolic or so

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Week 5

First off, your style is awesome! It sounds really interesting but I wonder why she was looking online for a social space?

5

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Lily Act 1.

I love the visuals and the angles you showed them, it’s an interesting story and the ending left me wanting more for sure.

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"Pull" - ACT 1

I love the cliffhanger and the storyline so far!! It’s really interesting and the shots for your drawings are well chosen. I wonder what sort of connection he might have to the gravity depletions!

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Ted's World

First off the detail the photo is just awesome!! I really like how you can see Ted stand out from the rest of the image of kids playing in groups. It’s a bit hard to tell what he’s looking at in his hands but that could be intentional.

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"What if" - Vlad

I love your art style, the visuals are really nice! I think my favourite is the gravity one because it makes me wonder if maybe the boy unaffected is inhumain or something like that, and how others might react to seeing him unaffected by the gravity change.

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WHAT IF---

I really love the first idea! It seems like a really neat idea about there being a tiny little person running each outlet everywhere. I wonder if they ever get tired, and what would happen if there was a power outage, does that mean the little person took a break? It’s a cool idea

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What If... Apocalyptic Scenarios?

My favourite what if idea was the first one because I think the idea of civilization being above ground and there being a problem like that could be an interesting story.
I’m wondering how civilization was able to be on a floating island if are they on Earth.
Have they always just been on a floating island? If so how did they get up there?

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What If - Mónica Juárez

I think my favourite What If idea was the one with the brother who was a spirit guide to the other one. It’s a really creative idea and I like how they still get to be together in a way to go on their adventure.
It makes me wonder how the one brother is able to see the other brother and if maybe that brother could see ghosts or something similar, and if he’s able to communicate with his brother or if he can only see the dead brother.

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