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Friend Shaped

Hi everyone! Just here to point out since my name isn't in the corner, I'm the D in M.A.D Catapult! Hopefully the issue will be resolved but incase it doesn't, this comment is here to say that I was Team Leader in this group!

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Friend Shaped

many thanks for your feedback and your interest on the project from the start, James! Also many thanks for commending the audio mix! We wanted to be as creative as we could in all areas to properly execute this story.

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Friend Shaped

thanks for your feedback! Yeah, W was a fun character to work on, we wanted to give as much personality to them, flaws and all. We're glad the protag resonated with you!

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Friend Shaped

Thanks very much, Kwong Yue! Yes, we aimed for the showing route of storytelling in hopes that audience would understand W's story, who they are and their relationship with the kids. etc. Our aim was that to make the audience care about them as soon as they understood through their perspective as well as Sam's. Glad this came across :)

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Friend Shaped

thanks very much, Taylor! We're very pleased our reel had an emotional impact! :D

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Mr. Charcoal in Recovery-Land

I like how goofy the tone is and how imaginative it is! Frogs and horses are a funny sight. i like the message and theme of understanding your limitations but also looking after yourself. However, I am unclear with the journey Mr Charcoal goes through and also the tornado should take more time to build in the beginning. Id like to see Mr Charcoal at his every day life before it hits. Narration or dialogue would help make the story-building stronger so we can see the characters relationships and understand the narrative.

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Week 4 - The Story Spine

Thank you, Takara! Much appreciated!

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Meet Leslie Zythe

Leslie is a very real and raw character that's very relatable! I really like the lesson she needs to learn about what defines us as human beings. I would like to know about what she will learn in the story and what obstacles she will face. In the caption, it mentions she will travel through time to right the mistakes she made so that she can gain a better future so I see the story developing through there. Perhaps the choices Leslie makes in the past, will alter things she liked about her present, which will make her regret her decision? etc. Looking forward to see how this story develops. Great job!

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Mush Character Sketch

Mush looks adorable! I admire their want of fitting in and I would like to see the reason explored further. I'm interested to know which characters do Mush meet and how he learns his lesson about overcoming self-doubt. Perhaps Mush can explore various parts of the garden/forest and see him attempting to fit in and overcome his shyness. Great character profile!

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What If? - Emma Gamboa

The computer virus was a great idea! The design for the virus is adorable as well!
I wonder more about the virus since a virus' purpose is to damage or destroy things internally. How does the virus fix things? What's the error?
Parents building a child. Are they real or are they robots?

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What if ... Enni :)

I like the bird idea. Very cute and opens up for scenarios in the plot.
I wonder more about the cookware idea. Is there anything else the cookware can do?
The cookware idea as we don't know how the cookware operates by hearing someone sing.

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I am a script writer. I love stories and the love the stories the animation medium takes you. I can draw decently sometimes but ultimately I am a writer. I love scripts with complex characters and relationship. It's the emotional rawness I love with stories and characters seeing through others perspectives, similar to what you said.

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This is a great q! will answer soon!

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