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Act 1, 2, & 3

Time the pictures with what you are saying. Good drawings.speak clearly

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Ahmik

Why did pilgrims set their things on fire. Why dint they fight back. Maybe add some things? How long did it take them to find gold. You spoke clear, maybe make drawings that go better with what you are saying.

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Act 3

I like the drawings, how did they hear the rumors? Why was there fire. Speak slower.

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Act 1, 2, 3

I like how there was no background noise. Some are too loud and close to the microphone, why did they think they had to go really far away?.

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Oregon Trail

Spoke clear, Talk slower, where were they traveling to?

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Ana, Andrea, Walker, Donivan

Good perspective, make it so the images don’t move and are clear. You spoke really clear.

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Week 7

Clear voice, Take individual pictures and do a voice over so it’s clear. Who is Tammy.

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Cowboys

Why did they have no friends? Why is he in jail. I like the drawings

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Act 3

Where are they, who are they, talk louder

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Week 7

Why did they leave, nice drawings.

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Money Tree

Where did he find the money tree. Try find a quieter area to record. I like the drawing and pictures.

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Gold rush

Why did he have to get to his family, I like that you guys talked clear

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James and Kyle

Good story I’m kinda confused how the cow has to do with this I like your drawings

6

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Jonathon Q. Sniffer; Act 1 and 2

I like your drawings, If that’s his voice it should be in first person, speak slowly

5

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Act 1

I like how ari has a different color scheme but still blends in, How did ari die? What’s aris background? I like how you made a background to go with the story and it all fits well perfectly.

5

Week

Act 1: The Lonely Fish

I like your art style,
Why dint she try to look for the city
What happens with the book?

3

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What to Choose?

I like how there’s different shades of grey and that the background is lighter and it focuses on the people and the people are darker I’m curious about the animal and who is dragging the girl really cute style

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Madeleine Devlin-Week 3 character world

I like how you have different shades. I’m wondering what that thing is that’s standing next to the hunny, I like how you added color to make it pop

3

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week 3 submission

I like how it has different shades, I’m wondering if she’s an elve? From looking at her ears she looks like an elve I like how you left some parts white so people can assume it’s white

2

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Meet Moony!

So is they more countries in there or it only them in the story

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Sunny Funder

What if she had friends

2

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Characters

What if there was no gold

2

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What if Character

What if he was happy

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Week 2

I like ur plot, why is he trying to figure out himself? What made him wonder about that and get him into that mindset I like how u Drew one picture of him and the other a silhouette of him with his characteristics

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Meet Molly! :]

I like your artwork, why was her brother a part of her head all this time and she wasn’t told sooner her parents and brother died? I like the script

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