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Week

Underwoof goes under the sea

Jonah thank you for the feedback. But that is exactly what we tried to visualize (which seem to have worked even though it confused you), that Luanna has no family (as she is a street dog rejected by humans and there pets).

8

Week

Grandpa & The Machine

I think especially the beginning starting with getting married is very clear in your drawings.

8

Week

Grandpa & The Machine

This is really well done! I can only repeat previous comments. Great music selection and art. You could have probably even reduced the amount of story voiceover as the pictures where speaking already very well for them self's.

8

Week

Skelly and Rachel

I really like the story and art. But what I don't understand why Skelly all the sudden helps Rachel?

8

Week

"HELLO"

The idea of combining old and new is great. But I have to agree at times it is a bit hard to follow the story right now with just an explanation. But what I don't understand why there would be an old computer with Modem if they already have smartphones?

8

Week

Legends of Surf

This is a great and very detailed story. But what I don't fully understand is why you mention all this brands. Has it any relevance to the actual story?

7

Week

The Book of S Act 2

Ah I see that makes sense. I think the task itself was to combine Act 1 + Act 2 in one video which I guess is why I was confused that it was missing. Keep up the great idea.

7

Week

Escape From Channel 52

This idea is really good. But what I don't understand is how that shift has happened. Especially how a 2D cartoon character becomes real.

7

Week

The Book of S Act 2

I really like your drawings. And the idea is pretty good. Can't wait to see the full story. But because Act 1 is missing I don't fully understand why she wants to get rid of the book.

6

Week

Underwoof goes under the sea

Good feedback about the transitions. I just wanted some more variety instead of just one way but I can see how that might be confusing.

In regards of the smelly dog: Initially we had her super clean but then people didn't fully understand why humans and other dogs might not like her. So we decided to make her a bit more grimy to highlight the fact that she is a street dog. Curious if you have any ideas how we can highlight that better?

6

Week

Acts 1 & 2

I really like your art style. And the story is very easy to follow. I am very curious to what happened. Why he didn't make it.

6

Week

Skyfellers - Act I & II

The drawings are really great. But some scenes are a bit confusing without any kind of story/narrator. Like why do they set out to catch a dragon? And how can they keep the dragon behind a tiny fence if it can fly?

6

Week

Samson the scared sword - Act 1 and Act 2

I really like this setting. It is such a great idea to have a Hero sword that doesn't want to kill. The art is really good too. But what I don't understand is how is the sword able to control Felice but was not able to control the heros and instead just asked them to not kill?

5

Week

Dream Seller - Act 1

I really like the story and graphics so far. But I think to convey your idea better you should add a voice over to your video.

5

Week

A misunderstood street dog

Yeah I think we need to re-word our Act1 ending a tiny bit better or explain more what the realization is.

5

Week

A misunderstood street dog

We tried to show that with her barking at them. What Luanna things is playful friendly "I am your friend" barking we Humans usually interpret as annoying/aggressive behavior. Curious if you have any suggestions how we can portray that a bit better.

5

Week

A misunderstood street dog

That is a really good idea. For now we made our drawings very clean to flesh out the story. But will defiantly refine them a bit to show that a bit more in the future.

5

Week

A misunderstood street dog

Our basic idea is that she likes the ocean because it is more quiet where no one yells at her but where she still can smell and see so many different things

5

Week

Act One Storyreel

I really like your story. The art is really great and I really like how you explained how he ended up in the bottom. The only thing I don't fully understand is how did he climb the tree without being spotted by the children.

5

Week

Worked Like A Dog - ACT 1

I really like the art style and the basic idea. But what I am curious about is why is she living with her grandmother and has that anything todo with the rest of the story?

4

Week

Story Spine

The drawings are rally good. The character is also very relatable. But what I don't fully understand is if she didn't wanted to have a conversation with the women why then does she all the sudden tell her everything after a simple question?

4

Week

The Indigo Kid

Interesting story. But somehow I feel like his trip to earth is fully disconnected from his job and the story setup. I am wondering If he is initially from earth (given that his father is there) why was he different/sensation for working on Mars?

4

Week

"Hello" Story Spine

I really like the overall concept. But what I didn't understand is why is the computer wanting to communicate with the smartphone in first place? And why is the smartphone drying all this things (Playing music etc) even if it knows that the internet is not working? I think you can make something really great with this idea.

4

Week

Alex the Kangaroo Story Spine

The characters and overall art is really good. The only thing that is not fully clear to me is why he is picking fights with the mafia? It sounded like he could have always went to boxing gyms if he needed to let off steam?

4

Week

Smoke Me - Story Spine

I really like this story arc. It is a very fell thought of story with a completely unexpected actor (the cigarette). The only thing I don't understand is how the Cigarette can all the sudden move (to jump into the tea) but does not use that strength beforehand to for example approach her?

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